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After Applejack's aunt and uncle are killed by muggers, Applejack and Rainbow Dash return to Manehattan and revive the Mysterious Mare-do-well to help clean up the city.
Of course, gangsters won't be the only thing they'll end up fighting. Oh, no. That would be too simple.
Winner of the AppleDash Fic Contest in the Already in a Relationship category.
Yeah. Surprised me, too. Enjoy!
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I just got sent here by Tchernobog... you wanna know what music I was listening a split-second ago?
This:
Fancy that coincidence!
I will read the story later, though. I just realised it's late... a lot...
IT'S HEEEEEEEEEERE!
edit: also, screw FO:E. This story is the highlight of the site right now, imo!
... Baha... is your title for this story a really oblique Sailor Moon reference?
Yeah, still not asleep...
666 likes!
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FO:E is getting ridiculous right now... it's... pfft...
Though seriously... that fic was posted less than... what, half a day ago?
I have seen people bidding when will it get over 1k likes and it started with a month went through weeks and ended with someone saying days... at this rate it will be over in less than 24 hours... scary...
The sad part? I am not going to read it, ever. I still have a mental image caused by someone saying something about an alicorn in an armour made of... gah, back, BACK I SAY!
Sorry, got carried away.
Anyhow, going to sleep, for real this time, before I start ranting too much. I'm already babbling like mad...
edit: Sweet, Merciful Celestia! It went up to 674 in the time it took me to write it!
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...Having a wonderful time!
First thing I thought of upon reading the title. God dammit, Spongebob y u no good anymore. Will be sure to read later.
I see what you did there
love this 
Oh good lord, Tiny Tim is stuck in my mind now! Definitely will read soon.
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IT WASN'T JUST ME THEN!
Huh? Where's the rest? I demand the rest!
Ok... how do i say it... I doughnut like it ok?
Its... too perfect... i doughnut like it at all!
I absolutley LOVE IT!
The plot is solid... A few small cracks in the foundation caused by a sudden rush... but everything else is PURRFECT!
You made this cat purr my freind!
For this chapeter, you get 10/10 Photo Finish's purrfection!
I am so excited for more.
A good start so far.
Cant wait to see Mare-Do-Wells first Appearance. Plus The rest of the groups reaction to this whole thing,.
2919511its 2:30 am where i am, i was just woken up by thunder, i have a DUTY, TO READ, APPLEEEEDAAAASH!
And now that i have read ir i can add this to my list of uniqe and epic appledashery stories!
You know what is needed now?
MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
Why?
Because this is pure awesomeness and...
APPLEDASHHHHHHH!!!!!!!
We old geezers remember a time when a young man with a ukulele fascinated the world. Although it was mostly with the question, "Who in heck is that?" I loved listening to him on Dr. Demento, and I think he'd approve of this similarly strange pairing. Enjoyed, loved, and thumbed.
2919812 Nope. But am I the only one who likes to tip toe by the window?
Ok, this has real promise to it,
Appledash? Good.
Appledash as batman? Great
Well written Appledash as batman with believable motivation, no dark tag, and where every line feels completly in character? OHGODWHYISTHEREONLYONECHAPTERUP
Not a fan of Appledash, but the story seems interesting, I wonder if they will fight super-villain. Twilight as Harley Quinn and Pinkie Pie as the joker maybe?
'Grrrrr im Batmare'
'Rainbow, sugercube; 'ah love y'all an all but y'all be beatin bad ponies with laughta dressed like that'
'Oh this aint for crime fightin 'sugercube'' *wiggles eyebrows*
'......no'
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This... this is glorious...
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You flatterer, you...
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Many references use I, but Sailor Moon is not among them (I've never seen the show). It's actually a reference to a video of Celestia going to the gala (which I can no longer find) with the song that others have already pointed out.
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Hope you slept well!
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I have no idea what you're talking about :liarjack:
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It's coming, promise! I just wanted to give myself a buffer because I'm terrible at keeping things updated.
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I'm glad people are getting this reference.
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Purring is good. I like purring.
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Because small chapters mean quicker updates.
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Not this story. That would require alt universe tags and maybe a few more character tags. That being said, Manehattan is a rather large place...
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*'not yet'.
2925068 In that case, behold why I thought you were making that joke.
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Ah. I feel enlightened now.
"She is the one named Mare Do Well" kindof has a nice ring to it...
2925068 please do a batmare reference, it perfect setting :p
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I did sleep well, thank you!
The first think I did was to read the chapter on my phone. Very promising, awaiting for more!
Keep up the good work!
Not bad so far. I quite like it.
Only thing is... The set up for this is... Weak. Several parts could have been expanded on to provide more story to it all, I think.
Other than that, you have my interest.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Welp this has my attention. Can't say I agree with Dash's motives, but this is still interesting and written well enough that I want to follow it.
I am wondering whats your update schedule im am completely estastic and dying in wait for the next chapter :D
Awezum!
Well, duh! You needed the voice change! How would they say "I'm Batmare." otherwise? Or "I'm Mare-Do-Well." I suppose, but that does not have such a nice ring to it.
As for updates... well I waited for many different updates so I can wait for these ones. Not to mention that, for me, 10k chapter is kinda moderate, bordering on short, really... I'm weird!
Though honestly, that note about the contest in description might be misread as "It's already done, I'm just fleshing out/creating suspense by taking my time with updates".
And I am wondering why did you not cover their supply of those flashbangs and smokescreens. I mean, they don't seem to be magically limitless, no? Oh well, maybe next chapter?
Keep up the good work!
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It really doesn't flow, does it...
Oh, I can't do ten thousand. I can't even read anything over around six and a half thousand.
...it's not done... Not even close... I've got it outlined to them in Manehattan, finding an apartment and jobs, their first night and their much better second attempt, and then it kindof trails off from there. Frankly, it was submitted unfinished and untitled, and I'm still surprised it won.
Valid question on their tools. I kindof hoped to imply that Zecora made them, and they could send for more later; but to be honest they aren't going to use them that often.
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They do need a good catch-phrase, don't they?
I never said I expect ten thousand. It's just that I like to come clean: "less than ten thousand is not impressive, so don't try luring me with it". Frankly, I don't know why I do it... I am weird like that. Also, apparently many people find that statement hard to believe... dunno why.
Oh, thank you for clarifying the completeness issue. Well, it's hard to say now... either the rest was that bad or that small bit of yours was that good! And I am leaning towards the latter!
Yes, I did got that impression. "Here, have some tools, if you're out, mail for more!" It's actually quite sad for me that we did not get to see the reactions of the gang to that idea. It was irrelevant, but I would like to see it.
All in all, great work and I am waiting for more!
So Twilight and Rarity are their backup in case things go south? Ya I cant think of anypony better suited for the role then the unicorn that can repair a dam in a matter of seconds to come in and throw a goon through a wall from 200 feet away.
...Why is Babs in Ponyville?
If she's visiting, well, it's pretty rude to go off on crime-fighting leave while you have guests over!
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How about "In the name of Celestia, We'll punish you!"
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We not-so-old geezers who were going to elementary school in the early 2000's remember a time when Spongebob was good. And that song was the [Naughty Word!] back then.
Very nice work! I like how you introduced the story so quickly, but did so without making it feel rushed. And the Appledash interaction has been excellent so far - I'm very much looking forward to seeing them fight crime together
This chapter length is great, in my opinion, so I'd say keep going at around 2k-3k. I generally prefer shorter chapters to longer ones, since it's easier to figure out where to stop reading for the night or take a break, and also there's more potential for cliffhangers. And I love going to sleep after ending on a cliffhanger
Also, I love one-liners too. I'm more excited to see what Applejack comes out with, rather than Dash!
I like all the thought that went into making the costumes. The pacing seems a little too fast though. Rushing through their friends just accepting and going along with the notion that Dash and Jack are going to risk their lives fighting crime in another city kind of on whim. I would suggest possibly slowing down the pacing, making chapters a little longer.
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Hey look, someone who has similar taste in chapter length to me... I must say for me though anything shorter than 15k I consider to be an easy read, anything over 25k I grab a drink because I'm not leaving my chair for a couple hours (15k words/hour) to which I proceed to salivate at having a good solid update.
So, I suppose it's kinda redundant to say I'd prefer longer chapters?
In most cases anything shorter than 3k just never really stays in my head, but I am a little bit insane so my views are almost never shared by the majority.
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Definitely similar taste! Though I am yet to find over 20k chap... oh, wait, no, my personal Top 1 story has one or two like that! I think?
Though I can't really say I read 15k/h as I'm pretty sure that's not the case and I actually read slower in English what with it not being my first language.
Though we should stop or we'll push the author into depression or something...
This looks really interesting and good. I'm curious on how they're gonna find a life style in Manehatten. Also, since they are the "Elements of Harmony" aren't they gonna be famous and stand out? Unless that whole "fake our death" thing happens.
Also, will there be like "villains" like Two-face, Joker, Riddler and such?
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"We have an army!"
"We have a Twilight."
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Valid point... to be honest, she's there because I wanted somepony to be making funny faces at Applejack while she was trying to be serious. And it's totally not foreshadowing.
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Thanks! Hope it doesn't disappoint.
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Next chapter will be a bit longer (couldn't figure out where to split it).
Point. I tried to handwave that away with the "A few weeks later", the first line in the chapter. This was supposed to be a shipping story for a shipping contest, and putting in those discussions with their friends and Twilight's "are you insane?!" moments felt like they'd be just filler so I just never wrote them.
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If Bon Bon can waltz into Rarity's shop in the smallish town of Ponyville and ask, "And who are you, again?", I think they'll be able to blend in just fine in Manehattan. At least, that's my story and I'm sticking to it.
And no, I wasn't planning on it. At least, not those characters specifically. This was first and foremost a shipping story; but it's safe to say they won't just be fighting muggers.
2958454 Wait, wasn't Babs from Manehatten? And being their cousin from Manehatten wouldn't it that pretty much make her the oranges daughter? I know it was never stated in cannon, but that is just something I assumed was intended when they told us of where she lived. That makes this entire affair a little darker if you think about it
I REALLY badly want to see how this all turns out with theirs first night fighting crime the suspense is killing me for how much I love this book
your writing is fantastic keep up the good work
I gotta remember this one.
Squee!
Good stuff, the tricky contract that AJ signed made me laugh, and the rest of the chapter was well paced, but the crime fighting seems to be coming soon, and I can hardly wait.
I agree, that would be an interesting song.