Applejack and Rainbow Dash have been marefriends for a year now and they couldn't be happier. So why does Applejack seem worried one evening after the two have shared a wonderful picnic?
Written for the 2013 AppleDash contest.
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Idsertian
British, Brony, plays vidjya garmez. Also ships ponies, because reasons. Twilight and Luna are tied for Best Princess.
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This story is so sweet
I'm loving these contests, they truly bring out some amazing writers.
that was beautiful
Very beautiful. Well done :)
ok this has given me cavities it was so sweet.
I loved it.
Hmm. I'm welling up over here. This has never happened before.
Simple, powerful, wonderful... Beautiful :)
Consarnit, AJ, will you get to the poi... Oh. :O
awwwww
I'm not gonna cry I'm not gonna cry I'm not gonna cry 
darn it 
great story
I like this entry. It's simple, sweet, and portrays the romance pretty well. I also like the different approach you took for this contest. It makes the story stand out from the rest and it makes it memorable.
I'm not sure if the judges will appreciate the narrative aspect of the story seeing as the usual advice when writing is to show and not to tell, but I guess we'll see what they think in due time.
All in all, good entry. I wish the best of luck to you, mate!
Cheers!
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Thank you all for your kind comments, they are greatly appreciated and it makes me get the warm fuzzies inside when I read them.
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This idea is far better than the two I had previous to it, which really would not have worked as well. I scrapped both of them part way through, as they were becoming either too complicated to write, missed the point entirely, or just weren't working.
But yes, we'll just have to wait and see what the judges think. I'm checking eagerly every day, the suspense is killing me.
Certainly a sweet fic between AJ and RD
But I was hoping for something more.....juicy.
omg thats so sweet i almost died
I really thought that aj would be concerned about dash leaving for the wonderbucks someday, but then....well, i dont want to spoil here in the comments, but to cut it short: I cried
3068521 Rules for the contest stated otherwise.
3074785 Well, it is mentioned right at the beginning that Rainbow has training in the morning, hinting that she's already in the Wonderbolts. To be honest, that idea never even occurred to me.
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I take it you're not planning to fork this once the contest is over and write some "juicier" bits in then? :D
Warm fuzzies? I didn't think Pound and Pumpkin were in this story?
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Ok ^^ But couldnt it also mean that she is still training to hopefully become a wonderbolt someday? At least thats how I understood it, especially after AJs first story when they were talking about them. I donnu, but I think this leaded me in this direction.
3077541 I am not, no. Sorry. Reasons being twofold: 1. No need to ruin an otherwise perfectly good non-clop ship. 2. I don't want anything like that tied to this name.
3078710 How you interpret the story is entirely up to you, but I wrote it with the intention of being canonical with regards to established events. Hillside is supposed to be set shortly after the end of S3, so Rainbow is in training at the Wonderbolt Academy.
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Well, that's perfectly fine by me. While I may read more "juicy" fics than I do any other type of story, I still read & like plenty that may only be lovey-dovey and they stand quite well without delving into further deviance.
This really doesn't need expanding on anyway. It doesn't need more chapters to prove its a good story or get its point across :)
Just thought I'd let you know, this story caused me to follow you, don't abuse my non-powers of thumbing and faving.
3081419 Indeed. It's not that I'm against clop, because I'm not, it's just this account is tied to something semi-professional outside of ponies. At least, it would be professional if I was getting paid. *grumble*
I may actually attempt something juicier under a different name at some point.
3081430 Aw, but I like abusing powers!
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wowzers. I didn't know that
I reckon several folks here could write professionally if they wanted to (if they're not doing so already). Whatever's best for you then. If you do decide to write anything juicier, I'd welcome it. I don't know if you can write clop, but you can certainly hold together a good story, so the foundation'll be sound :)
3083508 I write for a small gaming and tech site started and headed up by a friend of mine. Unfortunately, things haven't gone our way in the last year or so. Link's on my profile, if you're interested. /shamelessplug
Beautifully done.
7406458 Many thanks, kind Canadian ferret. This is, however, objectively my worst story. I am very sorry I subjected you to it.
7406622 I won't argue your opinion, but only ask that you respect mine when I say I greatly enjoyed it.
7406736 But of course.
This story was so beautifully done. Amazing job.
It should probably be AJ’s cutie mark, shouldn’t it?