This story has a silly premise taken seriously. It's also my first foray into shipfics, so take it with a grain of salt.
Accidents are not uncommon between Applejack and Rainbow Dash. Considering how physical they often get, it's no surprise that they'd tumble over each other once in a while. However, after one of their intense races, Rainbow can't seem to get over the fact that Applejack's body is so stupidly comfy. Naturally, she turns to her tortoise for help.
An AppleDash story.
Chapters (4)
Good attempt at one of my favorite ships. Simple and cute. Not bad.
I am interested
I'm looking forward to reading more of this as it comes out. Keep up the great writing!
i am intrigued... Please, write more
Ohhh, you definitely caught my interest here
I'd love to see more of this 
Cute, simple...maybe a little over dramatic on Rainbow's part - then again, loneliness can really be pretty crippling, especially in that moment of realization. I laughed at the part with Big Macintosh. Ought to be interesting!
Hmmm. Something seems... Off about this. Not sure what, but something's off.
Reads well, flows nice...
Screw it. I'll track. Let's see where it goes.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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I had that issue too while I was fixing the chapter. I noticed that there was something off about it that I just couldn't get no matter how many times I reread the story.
In the end, I just decided that the story itself was pretty weird and that's probably what was so off-putting, hence the first sentence in my description.
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The really weird thing is... It doesn't affect the story that bad. It's just this nagging in the back of the mind... Like:
"This is off. Somehow, someway, it's off."
Nor does any of it seem forced at all.
~Skeeter The Lurker
To me it goes 'off' right where she starts yelling accidentally at mig mac. Rest of the story is great
Cracked me up! Ill be keeping an eye on this
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That might be it, but I don't think so.
Just one of those things, I guess.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Maybe it's just my opinion but from all the farm work AJ does, she wouldn't be very comfortable to sleep on. Too much hard muscle.
Now Pinkie Pie, bet she is nice and squishy.
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Aha! I'm very meticulous when it comes to writing stories and I thought of that too. I assure you it will be addressed eventually in the story.
Good catch!
The part where she yells at Mac by mistake was hilarious. I likey!
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I know, right? But it doesn't affect the story at all.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I love this story so much. Update it really soon!
Liquid fucking pride. God damnit.
A hiatus? Due to family?
Understandable. I can wait. I'm rather enjoying this fic so far.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Yeah, we completely understand. We'll be waiting.
S'all good, real life comes first!
..Heehee, feathered bumper car.
Feathered bumper car....hehehe...
family is important :)
loving this so far
This fanfiction is awesome!
I love your humor. I regret not checking out this story sooner
You magnificent bastard
Im with DbzOrDie on this story. It spent far too long just sitting in my list.
"As the gentle winds swept through the grassy field below, soiled pancakes laid somberly among broken dishware. Silently, they lay forgotten as the only evidence of a lonely pegasus’ outrage."
Honestly I feel like this line doesn't add anything to the story, but its the most beautiful line I've read today
Yeah! This fic is awesome! Can't wait for you to update it, I love your humour! Bye!
Oookayyy......
Awkwaaard....
Heh... Open mouth, insert foot. That's our Rainbow!
Nice job on this so far! Strange I never got the update notification...
~Skeeter The Lurker
...well that took a seriously unexpected turn
Didnt expect it to be liked?
This is great! Its well written, fairly unique, and it shows how much a rejection of love can destroy someone.
And amazing chapter, it happened not too fast, but not too slowly and was bang on! Cant wait for the next chapter!!!
Awesome chapter
This is a really sweet story (even after accounting for the syrup-stickiness involved).
You know why I love being a writer?
That is why I love being a writer. Because sentences like that make perfect sense to other writers, and virtually no sense at all to those who've never had to fiddle with plots.
(You know what I mean. Get your head out of the gutter.)
2842217 That is honestly very true. Messing around with the plot like that is very fun ((double Entendre!!)). In one of my stories, the main character was gonna have a nightmare related to the CMC. It became Luna helping the CMC deliver a letter to her in her dreams and a monster interrupting it. Then the monster became the stories villain.
Another good chapter Mr. Snowpony, to be honest when I saw you updated I quit cs:go to read it. The plate turned out to be pretty symbolic and important, I really enjoyed it and was surprised (in a good way) how deep you made Rainbow when she found the broken plate on the ground. I didn't mean anything bad about my earlier post. Thought now I'm waiting to see waiting if Rainbow ever gets any hot cocoa
Have fun on your vacation!
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You quit Counter Strike for me? I feel honored!
And I know you didn't mean anything mean by that post. When I first saw it, I was pretty amused and I thought I could tease you for a bit about it. I'm actually glad someone as observant as you was able to catch it, to be honest. Good job!
Also, now that you're anticipating it, Rainbow's not getting that hot cocoa anymore, so HAH!
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I've been noticing that too lately. Someone should really notify knighty about that.
I don't... wow that's a lot of icons. Let's see we have Derpy, the Mane Six...
it tells you what the icon means in text!
Cool!
Back on topic, I think that you shouldn't hold yourself to a schedule; if you have something done and you like it then post it, if it needs a few more days of polish I think the readers, the ones who really like the story, will understand. Its better to do your absoulte best than to hold yourself to a deadline and cause unneeded stress.
Oh wait, you're giving the story a hiatus due to a family situation? Fine with me.
I apologize if this is rude and has offended you in some manner; it is my opinion: nothing more or less. This shouldn't mess up your life and family.
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No, you aren't being rude. I get you and I agree. I really should upload the chapters only when I feel that they are to the quality that I'd like them to be in. Taking time to carefully sift through the story over and over to work out the mistakes is a good habit to uphold and it should definitely be a practice that every writer should partake in.
However, it's also nice to have a schedule. For one thing, it gives me motivation to keep writing by working hard through the entire week instead of lazing about and doing nothing productive. Secondly, to be like a professional writer, I must acquiesce to the fact that schedules are set in real life and if I did not accept this, I'll never succeed as a writer. That's just how the world is.
But, enough about me. If I understood your post right, then this is probably the first time you've ever commented on this site. I feel honored that you'd chosen to comment on my story first. Thank you very much. I appreciate that.
I just LOVE this story
The clicking... Still not certain what that was all about.
Otherwise, the chapter is pretty good.
Loving the interactions with them.
~Skeeter The Lurker
YAY!!!
On one hand, the click sounds like everything "clicking into place" in Dash's mind.
...on the other, it sounds like Featherweight is stalking them with his camera.
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There's a strange romance/horror fic hidden somewhere in there.
It has to end?
yay
Oh Mr Snowpony , it has be some time since I've been here and picking your story was
the best choice for coming back into the swing of things. Once again another amazing
written chapter.
"by Celestia she’ll take all the hugs she can get!"
all the hugs!
"Tank was on the ground and he was munching away at the ant-infested pancakes." glad to see that the
pancakes are back, though im curious to why nopony has cleaned them up yet.
"Her hooves afire, she flung the drink behind her, immediately regretting it when she heard a death defying scream ring through the kitchen. Turning quickly, she caught a glimpse of a blue blur flying towards the freezer’s ice dispenser and activating it, sending a cascade of ice cubes down upon the unfortunate mare's singed body." Its not nice to toy with ones emotions like that