April 14th, Equestrian Year 3584
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The Great Spell, an event that shook the very core of Equestria, occurred on this date. Many have heard of the event, even in Little Filly School. A darkness took to the sky, coming from the Valley of the Shade, within the Equestrian Border. The princess was nowhere to be found. Random citizens were turned insane by the event. Then, after the Seven Hours, the darkness faded, along with the insanity. The princess returned, shaken but no worse for wear. She announced it was nothing to be afraid of.
Few comprehend the magnitude. For this nation, this nation of prideful ponies, almost fell.
Whispers went around. What had happened in the Valley? Who was responsible? Would the day return when insanity fell once more? In time, all wounds healed. The whispers died to low rumblings on the underbelly of society. Those involved were not talking. Anyone else who seemed to continue to talk simply faded into the wallpaper. Eventually, the incident was uncovered. An explosion at the Weather Factory, which had been doing renovations at the time.
It would seem the nation's past is as checkered as most.
It has come back to haunt them, on the eve of a momentous occasion.
Now, the task rests upon two unicorns of two very different backgrounds.
The first being Twilight Sparkle, one of the strongest beings in all of Equestria and loyal student to Princess Celestia. Her abilities are unparalleled and her destiny is set in stone. She is to become the new princess. Will her talent of magic win the day and allow her to continue her mighty deeds?
The second is a lone being who has long developed his talents in the night. His association with the royalty has made him a valuable ally and his revelation and power could shift the tides fully in the favor of the ponies. But is his past just as jaded as Equestria's, and will his vengeful spirit ultimately fail him?
The days count down, and the minutes tick by. Destinies will be realized. Mortals will become legends. And legends will become gods.
LEARN FROM YOUR HISTORY
CORNUA, ALIS, ET UNGULIS
... Oh my God. o.o That was... strangely suspenseful, tragic and worrisome at the same time. Excellent way to start a story like this!
This is part of the insanity, ne? Hm...
... Huh. I like how you've portrayed the two sisters;' bond and given their POV on the enemies Twilight and Co have overcome. Still, i can't help but wonder how this all ties in together.
.... I really don't know what to make of this now. XD Things seem a little more joined together, but... I can't shake a feeling of foreboding. Like everything's going to go to the dogs very,v ery quickly.
This chapter's a nice step in the right direction as far as joining everything else goes. I'm sure you have this planned out, but I still have to tell you that the start is rather slow, and thus detracts somewhat from the story itself. Still, it's pretty good.
I felt as if the dialogue between the two sisters was a little stunted in this chapter. Especially the part where Celestia asks Luna if she'll forever be at her side. It was too.. flat and a bit too formal.