Rarity is my favourite pony and Sparity is my favourite ship and The Cutie Mark Chronicles is my favourite ep. I'm a massive Otaku, watched countless animes, played countless games, Just a happy nerd.
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A few years after the end of the series.
Everyone still meets with each other, just less often as their lives continue.
Spike works more often with Rarity these days.
But one day before one of Pinkie's Parties, the two go out on some errands.
However, destiny brings the two together it seems.
A SFW good ol' Sparity fluff story.
Editors: Mr Stargazer
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Note: Story was written prior to Twilight Sparkle Alicorn and thus this story exists if that event had not happened.
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Applejack is one word. You have missing words and incorrectly capitalized ones. You switch between past and present tense. Numbers should always be spelled out. Repetition issues, your favorite being that you describe what they're doing and then have them say it. You missed capitalizing I a lot, which warrants a different point than above. Sweetie Belle, two words.
I read the whole thing, very promising, but you're killing it with errors.
1994902 Yeah I guess I was just in a rush to get this thing out, In the future I'll throughly go over the editing, although in terms of tense in my writing, it is a bad habit, I'll improve with every chapter hopefully.
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Sorry for it seeming rushed, after the tunnel scene it was meant to seem fast paced with a series of misfortunes between the Spike and Rarity.
I will try to remember that when i'm writing future installments.
I love this need a profreader but I love it.
The pure Daw in this story is Inspiring.
a bit cliché, but it was still a good read
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Thats, i wanted something feel good with these two
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I will not deny it, but i think it works :P
Well, most comments already point out the proof-read thing. Here's one:
Shellfish is best assistant!
Otherwise a cute, fluffy and engaging story.
A very promising start but slow down a bit, it'll help with the errors
1995169 Applejack is still one word, and I still see a number of issues. It's better, but you should find a proofreader, check the Looking for Editors group.
^ Why does everyone and their mother nowadays have to tamper with Spike's appearance? One of his characteristics and appeal is that he's not he-man or as big as other dragons, yet he's able to get things done for the ones he cares about. Making him act more mature is fine, but with his size I wonder how he gets into any door.
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Well I suppose i just prefer my head canon like that.
I would say that 7 foot would be approaching the height of most doors in Ponyville, but once again that is just my point of view.
Sorry if this aspect ruined the story for you.
Very good for a first story. Mine exploded like I never imagined it to, and I see you have already caught the eyes of a few very good writers. (Myself included if I may be a narcissist for a moment.)
I do have a slight problem, though. The pacing feels like it keeps jumping around from slow, to fast, to good, and flopping between them. Practice helps a lot with this, as well as pre-readers/editors. They can also find errors in grammar, spelling, and flow that you would otherwise miss.
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Heh, well I'm definitely surprised its as well received as it is so far, I'm just happy people enjoy it
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My advice: Always stick with it, don't lose enthusiasm. If you don't feel up to writing, don't, or the story will seem forced or rushed.
Check into editors and pre-readers, as I said, they help tremendously. If you want someone (favorite author, someone who goes around and gives stories reviews) to look at your story, don't be afraid to ask them. (Politely, of course.) Getting editors/pre-readers and becoming friends with fellow authors is also a great way to work out ideas for a story, and can help get you out of a writer's block. (if you ever get in one)
You will inevitably get some haters.(if not, you are lucky/very good) If they are kind enough to give you some sort of feedback, try to use it. If it's just pure negativism, ignore it.
There were many errors still. For instance more happy isn't a thing it's happier. The tense were stil all over the place, as well.
Good fic, fluff ain't bad every once in awhile and there's really nothing offensive or heavy here, but there's nothing wrong with that.
Also, I found that the easiest/cheapest way to get around the whole dragon lifespan in Spike fics is to give him a terminal illness because every animal has diseases and cancers that shorten lifespans and stunt growth.
Liking the story even more so far with this chapter. Much more detailed and drawn out. I love the added realism and Im pleased with the resulting storyline. onward I say! onward!
Interesting..? possible foreshadowing in this chapter? To what is still a bit hazy, but nonetheless this will create a dramatic plot interest which will keep the story juicy.
>>>turtleboy76>>>Ohh would like to suggest though that if you would like to have a little more fun with the story, you could try one of two things:
1. include a unique trivial dating scene, but with a tragic effect that doesn't destroy the relationship but gives alot of emotional distress to the story. (example: perhaps a bad accident, or a life threatening disease)
2. if you wanted to it would be interesting how you would incorporate a background story of another not so well known background pony and intertwine two different lives and situations to where they seemingly affect one another with an intended moment of dramatic interest.
(example: maybe something along the lines of having idk Vinyl Scratch involved with helping setup an amazing wedding perhaps, even though Vinyl isn't known to like mushy stuff so by helping she learns in her heart she desires to be in a relationship too, but needs help from rarity and spike to understand and find her somepony?)
P.S. Just ideas of course not necessary but would be very good for providing more stance for a founding well written fimfiction.
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Hey glad you are enjoying it, I really liked writing chapter 2.
Thanks for the ideas, But the rest of my story is pretty much set in stone and I am hoping that everyone will be happy with it.
Spike will be the main focus of the next few chapters and I dont want want to have too much of a focus on anyone but Spike and Rarity.
Spike needs to remember to not only make his future wife near immortal but also Twilght and the pony gang as well.
hmmmm needs more bacon.
Greedy Spike requires more!
though, i did spot some errors in there...
It's KING Sombra. Like this story.
Finish this story soon.
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Haha, i'll have chapter 6 out during the week hopfully
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Thanks for all your support dude
And it was all a dream! The End
Wonder what's gonna happen now that we're seeing into Spike's memories (or atleast that's what I think is happening)
Can't wait for the next update
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It shall all be revealed in due time
This chapter was hard to write since I'm not generally accustom to dark plot, so I hope this didnt seem TOO out of place or forced.
Nice chapter. :3
2283697 It wasn't.
And thus Spike was the best pony despite being a dragon. Very nice I really enjoyed this chapter. looking forward to the next chapter.
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Great to hear, glad you liked it
Thank you to all my readers; It was all Destiny is officially complete
THE FEELS!!!!
Bravo my good sir/madam. Bravo.
Was so happy and a little sad to find this in my favourites this evening, knowing that this will finally be the end this thing great fic. Though it is sad to leave something so great, it had to end sometimes, and the ending was worth it!
Really hope you'll continue writing fics. Would love to see what other ideas you have left in that head of yours and if it's even as bit as good as this story, I absolutely can't wait!
Sparity forever!
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Wow that comment really made my night, cheered me up since Jojo's Bizzare Adventure just ended.
Happy to hear you were so happy with the ending, it was a toughie to write but god damn if it wasn't fun as hell.
For the future I don't know if I have any fic material left, that sparity was my one and only love child of imagination, what I can say is that me and a friend are working on a comic series of the CMC and I'll be posting them on my blogs on here.
Sorry this fic is finished, but hopefully everyone will like it like you did and may even inspire some more sparity in the future.
Greatest story ever.
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Thanks buddy
I would have liked a little deeper venture into their lives after the wedding, but this was a good ending over all. It was very well done and other than a little bit rushed ending It was very well done overall I think you did a good job of capturing the characters essence and that's the important part of making your story believable if you ask me. I especially liked the part about Twilight making a picture book of the tale. It certainly had "The Magicks."
Keep up the good work I hope to see more from you. 
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Although a little bit longer would have been nice I couldn't help but think it would just drag on then. When it came to the character's personalities I tried to make them as realistic to characters as possible to not draw any hate towards myself away and appeal to favourites of other people. I just liked the idea of Twilight writing her own books, seemed right, but the picture book was something that just lit up in my mind and I had to write it.
Thanks for reading it and giving support throughout though
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Thanks for supporting it til the end
First off, I am an unforgiving Sparity shipper; and secondly, this story does have a few grammatical flaws but...
This was wonderfully done. Even if it does a few things I hate in Shipfics, I can completely overlook that for a wonderful and very sincere story. Its much more of an adventure story with a heavy romance lean which is very nice. 4/5 rating definitely.
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Yeah the second half is more so an adventure, glad you like it
Well, I said I'd read your Sparity.
OMGosh what an amazing story best story I have ever read
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YAY Sparity forever
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Thanks for the applause
First story? Well, I have to admit, it does show. Its very rough, full of errors and pacing seems very bad. Not sure I can continue reading this...