Hell, yeah, new chapter! Still... I may not read the last chapter when it comes out... I always rip out the last page of a book (as long as it's not "War and Peace" or a work of similar cultural importance), then it doesn't have to end. I hate endings.
“I love this thing,” Spitfire panted, reaching a hoof back to clumsily grasp at her own rump, squeezing to force the fabric tighter over the curves of her well-defined body.
4034123 Very nice reference there. very happy you made it. On a side note, please stop ripping out the last few pages. The library can't afford to keep ordering in replacements.
I was reading this in school when i came to the end or what seemed like it, i was a little pissed of when it ended like that, and when i came home i looked up this story again in case there was something like a sequel and i facepalmed "Incomplete" im very happy this will be continuing
Welp. He's fucked.
im only hoping this ends with him leaving the hotel to become the wonderbolts masseuse and get free pegapuss when ever he wants :P
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In the good sense of the word, or the bad sense?
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Did you seriously just... I don't even.
4033070 I'll leave that up to you.
Oh.. shit. Lionel... run!
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dude.. great minds think alike :P
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pegapuss...
You have no idea.
Hell, yeah, new chapter! Still... I may not read the last chapter when it comes out... I always rip out the last page of a book (as long as it's not "War and Peace" or a work of similar cultural importance), then it doesn't have to end. I hate endings.
4033253 I... I don't think he meant it like that...
she is peanut butter and jelly.
So you do love him Dashie.
He's screwed....LITERALLY! Hahahahahahaim not funny
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thats my word now
pegapuss'tm
"Why thanks for asking Rainbow Dash! I enjoyed myself emensly."
I like where this is going...
So do you think Rainbow's angry?
“Did you enjoy yourself?”
Oh snap!
Hell yes!
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Commence read.
Spitfire running through the whole sexual experience.
Rainbow Dash suddenly letting the jealousy strike, or is it the competitiveness?
I read this beauty all in one sitting, rather enjoyed it.
You are one of the first writers that got me into clopping, but I feel like I need to point out a few things here...
The first part is kind of repetitive... I mean:
Also Spits says in different ways "Fuck me" like 6 times.
Kinda felt like it was going nowhere
Also there are a few errors you shoud fix. Dude, do you really have no editors or proofreaders?
But all in all, I couldn't resist the urge to fill a bucket or two with this chapter. Brilliant as always.
Looking forward to that threesome.4033045
verbatim
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Very nice reference there. very happy you made it. On a side note, please stop ripping out the last few pages. The library can't afford to keep ordering in replacements.
I read this to the 1812 overture.
I need a shower. Bad.
Yup, he's gonna die via Dashie. I guess there are worse ways to go...
I think Spitfire needs her own ingress story!
4722222 She's gonna get one!
4722297 AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW YYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
This is a straight 10/10. Like, holy crap.
Update please?
I kinda like this.. So.. Please?
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+1
I'm curious to see if our protagonist gets employed by the Wonderbolts, becomes Rainbow Dash's boyfriend, or just ends up in the Hospital.
4947119 A combination of all three?
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Hmmmmm, so he turns into an Octopus hybrid?
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I think the whole thing should take a entirely random turn and have the human fall in love with spitfire!
I would crap myself if that ever came to life in any story's I read!
Rainbow- "Anon I love you! I don't wanna be screwed by the other Wonderbolts! Just you!"
Anon- " I'm sorry rainbow but you're to late! I'm in love with spitfire!"
Me ( as in the reader ) - " ( spits out drink ) .....DIDNT SEE THAT COMING.... "
That's probably how it would go down.... And yeah I drink drinks whenever I read or write...
I was reading this in school when i came to the end or what seemed like it, i was a little pissed of when it ended like that, and when i came home i looked up this story again in case there was something like a sequel and i facepalmed "Incomplete" im very happy this will be continuing
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you just invented your own slang term. Congratulations.
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Immensely. How was your TV time?
space needed
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Lionel be like: Spitfire and I were meant to be together. To do it.
-Right. Ew. Um..