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  • 1w, 1d
    Planning out new Affliction story(ies)!

    I dunno how to do it all!

    Should I go with concurrent uploads, or staggered/as-I-write-them uploads?

    The reason for this is, the two stories will be having a good deal of their plot-points happening concurrently! For instance, in the spoiler so that people can't complain:

    In Affliction 5, chapter 1, we see Kuno instructing changelings to 'become more independent' and 'find something unique to wear'. They all come back with collars with bells on them. Except Chitin, who comes back with a golden Ankh in her ear.

    In Chitin's story, chapter 1, we see Chitin erm... 'bribing' the jeweler to give her said piece of jewellery. While walking home, she walks past the pet shop, with has an entirely new room built onto it, has been repainted, and completely cleaned top-to-bottom just that morning.

    So if you read any one of them, it could spoil various parts of the partner story.... So staggering them to be released as I finished them like I usually do, might end up spoiling some of the partner plots before that chapter is even released!

    The alternative is to release chapter at a 1-for-1 ratio. One chapter of Affliction, one chapter of Chitin's. Problem with that is that there could then be a longer wait between each pair of chapters being released...

    So I dunno what to do!

    I think I will stagger the release of the stories, submission-wise. They're both Affliction. When I posted volume 4 it was at the top of the box in like an hour. :pinkiecrazy: I don't want to spam the feature box. So I'll likely post Affliction 5, and then Chitin's story a few days after, when the heat on the previous posting has gone down a bit. You guys will have to wait an extra few days or so before getting tasty Chitin story start, but what can I do?

    My patreon people will have access to Chitin's story early, I guess :pinkiecrazy: I can't give links to anyone else because NSFW blog posts aren't allowed and are never coming back. Sigh. And Chitin's story is really, really NSFW. Right out of the gates!

    Though, I will add: You could totally go to my patreon page, hit the 'activity' button and look at the posts there that are for everyone, not just paid patreons. :pinkiecrazy: No sign-up required!

    So... whatcha all think? Concurrent release? Or give-no-fucks-just-post-what-ya-got? I kinda wanna do concurrent releases, but I wonder if the effort would even be worth the meagre payoff of keeping the two stories in line...

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  • 2w, 5d
    It's over

    Hooray!

    Affliction 4 is over. Done. Finito.

    Time to start on volume 5.

    Which will run concurrently with 'Chitin's Story', so you'll see a fair bit of crossover in the story arcs of those two.

    Sorry if I've been slow to the whole writing thing lately. I've been sick. And it's been really bad the last few weeks. My mother thinks Ross River fever or glandular fever. I think meh. I'll know when the blood results get back. Either way, it makes writing a chore. I can't think of words. Sentences don't work. Plot points stop making sense to me, etc etc etc.

    But I'm gonna keep trying!

    P.S. Chitin is gonna be sexy! I already have her all figured out! Shorter mane than Kuno, more punkish, and a single gold hoop, and a single gold ankh on said hoop. Because it represents 'life'. And she's totes deep like that. :pinkiecrazy:

    Keep an eye out for all new affliction shenanigans.

    And join the Affliction-verse group! You can ask me things in the threads area!

    Anyhow, be cool! :derpytongue2:

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  • 3w, 3d
    Upcoming Affliction story!

    I'm planning a new thing! Based in the Affliction-verse. :twilightsmile:

    Now, if you've been following affliction 4, you'll know how this is possible in the universe of it. And I'm intending it to be 'An Affliction of the Heart: Chitin's Tale(/story)'. Chitin being the changeling currently known as 'Speaker'.

    And the reason I say this now instead of just working on it quietly and posting it sometime is a few things:

    First off, no, I'm not stopping work on Kuno/Warden. Not yet. Don't be stupid. They need another entire volume just to disentangle the absolutely nutty web of plot lines holding them all together.

    And the second, main point... I'm kinda leaning heavily towards making Chitin's story adult rated. Clop and whatnot.

    It'll still be mostly story-based, with clop for flavour. But it will also enable a lot more fun changeling things without having to shy away from certain points because of the rating! I have to do that with the current Affliction series. I can't make the descriptions too adult. Because the children might see!

    The main reason that I bring this up now is that I am capable of being reasoned with. If enough people complain about the upcoming story being adult, I could maybe make it cleanish rated like the current Affliction series.

    So, would it be terribly problematic for the majority of you if the new series was rated adult?

    P.S. I am most definitely back, bitches! Four story updates in a week! Aww yeah! :pinkiecrazy:

    18 comments · 297 views
  • 3w, 4d
    Affliction WIP

    Right here! Click it!

    Doubtful I'll get an entire chapter done tonight. So here's a WIP link for you people who are too impatient! It should be done... soonishly. I don't know! Could be tonight! Tomorrow! or the month after next!

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  • 4w, 1d
    I'm back!

    From the land of the non-writing! Between Destiny, Diablo 3, SWTOR, malaise, coffee milks, and generally being lazy, I haven't written anything workable in like two months!

    But I posted the start of a new romance/clop story! I can't link because mein fuhrer won't allow NSFW links in blog posts. :flutterrage:

    Anyway, my patreons have the link because they're all awesome. Which is one of those perks I didn't think of! They get access to stories early! You know, because the review process takes ages these days.

    Anyway, expect to see the new story on your dashboard and probably in the goddamn feature box in the coming days! Pony writes have been so slow during the off-season, any old schmuck with a keyboard can king-hit the feature box. I'm the schmuck with the keyboard!

    Thanks for you all being patient with me :twilightsmile: I hope there's more writing to come soon!

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#1 · 92w, 4d ago · 19 · 7 · First Impressions ·

Incomplete?

Oooooh, you spoil us AP!

EDIT - would it be an appropriate place to claim that I have 'popped this story's cherry'?

Three weeks later, I just want to point out how hilarious it is that my simple comment has so many clicks, both up and down.

Love what you're doing with this Ingress verse series so far AP, please keep up the excellent writing, it is always enjoyable to read your writing.

#2 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I thought this was coming out long ago!

#3 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

... oh, what the hell sure. I'll read this :twilightsmile:

#4 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Commence read.

Guess this will be coming out in parts then.

#5 · 92w, 4d ago · 1 · · First Impressions ·

Rainbow Dash was sitting in one corner of the restaurant, hooves crossed in front of her, head resting on them, watching the door like a half.

Calf? Hawk? Mmm, I suspect you ment hawk.

Lionel seems like he wasn't very happy to have his week long vacation- er, job interrupted by a, ugh, customer. That could explain most of his bristly as a cactus attitude. Still, it's good to see the two finally getting along, and that he's not a completely self-centered person when a mare's in obvious pain.

p.s. I don't see a gore tag so this won't devolve into a pony version of The Shining, eh? Heh. :rainbowlaugh:

#6 · 92w, 4d ago · 4 · · First Impressions ·

>>1947865

i prefer to picture him watching the door like a calf, its much funnier that way

#7 · 92w, 4d ago · 2 · · First Impressions ·

Nice. I wonder what's gunna happen next...

#8 · 92w, 4d ago · 4 · 11 · First Impressions ·

Needs a chainsaw

#9 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Featured on fimfiction's homepage. Good on yer, Anonymous Pegasus. :raritystarry:

#10 · 92w, 4d ago · 1 · 6 · First Impressions ·

(Joke) Alt. Title: Across The Ingress Universe: A Humance Vacation

#11 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I don't think Rainbow Dash will forget his kindness. :)

It's good to see the soft sensitive side of Rainbow Dash.

#12 · 92w, 4d ago · 2 · · First Impressions ·

Well, Lionel was certainly kinder than most people would have been had they been blackmailed into action upon pain of property damage. Considering that the only interactions he and Rainbow Dash had had up to the wing scene had involved either the afterforementioned blackmail or lecturing him for finding her unpleasant, it certainly demonstrates that he does have a soft side that his previous actions gave no hint to.

The text is well formatted and easy to read, and the story flowed well. While I very much doubt that Rainbow Dash would use the kind of language that she did in the spa scene, certainly nothing so formal at the very least, otherwise it made for an interesting enough first chapter.

I await the next installment.

BlackWinter

#13 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

>>1947792 yes, yes it would.

#14 · 92w, 4d ago · 5 · · First Impressions ·

Nice to see a male reacting towards a tsundere-type character as I would hope to do so, i.e. "shut up bitch" rather than "w-well, ok, I guess..." or somesuch. :rainbowlaugh:

#15 · 92w, 4d ago · 1 · · First Impressions ·

Mythbusters episode about Unicorn magic.

So much win!:rainbowlaugh:

#17 · 92w, 4d ago · 3 · · First Impressions ·

Finally, a change of pace.

Nice work, bud.

#18 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

this is funny and awesome

#19 · 92w, 4d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I'm liking it, please continue

#20 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

i like it:pinkiehappy: keep up the good work!

#21 · 92w, 3d ago · 8 · · First Impressions ·

Wow, Rainbow is reverting to GIlda-levels of bitch in this one. The services are not owed as the hotel ISN'T OPEN. Are you sure this isn't Lightning Dust in a wig?

#22 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

So far, I'm liking this. Rainbow is almost too annoying, but honestly, I see it being completely in character. I also like the quip about the computers, it's a nice explanation. Looking forward to later chapters. This is an enjoyable setup for more.

#23 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I WANT to READ

Buuuuuuuut I wait until the end

:fluttershbad::fluttershbad::fluttershbad:

#24 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I find it hard to believe that RD is being such a bitch. Then again, I find other things much more common place that that hard to believe as well. Like stupidity. Anyway, fun story so far. Looking forward to more of this!

#25 · 92w, 3d ago · 2 · · First Impressions ·

>>1948500 That's not the only sensitive side were going to see:ajsmug:

#26 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Oh shit! I didn't realize it wasn't complete yet!

#28 · 92w, 3d ago · 5 · · First Impressions ·

Would it be weird if I thought Lionel was gonna put spoonfulls of ice cream on RD's wing and lick it off? :rainbowlaugh:

#29 · 92w, 3d ago · 5 · · First Impressions ·

I say A-. A+ worth of writing quality (Seriously, you're a -really- good writer), only brought down to an A- by RD seeming a wee bit out of character. There were a few lines where she sounded way too formal, almost Rarity-esque. Still, for writing this good, I can ignore such things :-p. Damn good job!

#30 · 92w, 3d ago · 3 · · First Impressions ·

I can sympathize with this dude, he just wants to be alone but RD keeps butting in.

#31 · 92w, 3d ago · 2 · · First Impressions ·

I want to hug you.

#32 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

My cheeks are fiery red and I do not know why...

#33 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Amazing another Ingress story that isn't a one shot.  Well it's about time Rainbow Dash gets someone.

Aru
#34 · 92w, 3d ago · 4 · · First Impressions ·

Mythbusters episode about unicorn magic? I would like to watch that.

#35 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

You got me interested! MOAR!!!

I agree with some people here though: RD was a bit out-of-character. Maybe it was due to her wing?

#36 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I know RD can act a bit entitled at times, but this seems a bit out of character, even for her. Perhaps it was her stint in the Wonderbolts that made her act all "Do you know who I am?", but still, she could have apologized.

I'm interested in seeing where you go with this, and I wonder why Rainbow came to the resort anyway, it's not like she's there for company.

Also, for the love of god, its PEGASI. :flutterrage: .

Patiently awaiting the next chapter :scootangel:

-Zyrian

#37 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Love it.

#38 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

“Don’t even pretend you don’t feel the same way. If you weren’t bound by the moral obligations of your position here, then you’d have told me rack off the moment I showed up,” Rainbow Dash explained calmly. “And you wouldn’t have given a single care what I thought.”

It's buck off and p.s. if I was listening I would be like can I join

#39 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Tsundere Dash, wingrubs, wingboners, and human/pony clop from the guy who wrote Ingress? I'm not even going to read it before I favorite this! This is going to be good!

#40 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

>>1955377

P.S.: You had me at "Tsundere"

#41 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

OOC RD is a dick:rainbowwild:

#42 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

Love it

#43 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

>>1951946

All of my this.

Can't wait for new chapters, this is seriously awesome so far. It's like I can imagine myself watching this story, because the description is also awesome. :D

#44 · 92w, 3d ago · · · First Impressions ·

:duck:

#45 · 92w, 2d ago · 1 · · First Impressions ·

Oh man your imagination is the essence of your talent in writing.

#46 · 92w, 2d ago · 1 · · First Impressions ·

>>1951946 Well, you have to consider it was 3 years since Ingress, and she's spent a bit of time with the Wonderbolts already. She's bound to sound more mature and formal at times.

#47 · 92w, 2d ago · · · First Impressions ·

RD seems a little out of character but other than that, I enjoyed the characterization even though I found the flirting to be a little rushed since the MC and RD sounded like they were one step away from a fist fight a few times the first chapter. You have my attention.

#48 · 92w, 2d ago · · · First Impressions ·

I feel that RD is a bit OOC, but it's good otherwise.

DF
#49 · 92w, 2d ago · 1 · · First Impressions ·

This was funny. Really looking forward to the next chapter. As stated by at least one other person, RD seems a bit OOC, but not much. Completely acceptable in the framework of the story. Hell, it can easily be explained by the time passage and her change in occupation.

On a side note:

Rainbow Dash was sitting in one corner of the restaurant, hooves crossed in front of her, head resting on them, watching the door like a half.

I think that was supposed to be "hawk".

#50 · 92w, 2d ago · 5 · 1 · First Impressions ·

I'm not noticing the ooc Rainbow. I mean, she seems a little different, but understandably so given the circumstances. It's not like she's hanging out with any of her friends. I act different around people i don't know too. My assumption was that it's a sort of defense mechanism, so to speak. When RB met this human, she couldn't just take no for an answer, that would make her look weak, and looking weak is not cool. If she just rolled over and admitted to being wrong or making a mistake, that would have been out of character. Rainbow is obviously a dominative pony socially. She may be sensitive on the inside, but that's all the more reason for her to be a bitch around those she doesn't know well enough to trust. This is more a side of Rainbow that we just don't see. We usually see her around her friends, where admitting fault is ok, because her friends already know her and won't judge her for it.

That's my assumption for her behavior, anyway.

Edit: Oh yeah, awesome job so far.  Usually not into human fics, but this is good. Usually human characters in fics like this tend to have no personality, but this is different, and i'm all about it. :rainbowdetermined2:

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