Good stuff, although was hoping for a bit more character development. Still, clop is clop. Well written as always AP, looking forward to the next update.
Everything must be a competition with Rainbow Dash, everything, and it works out even better in this latest tryst of needs.
At least she didn't finish "in 10 seconds flat."
I wonder, way back in Season 1/episode 1, if this is what Celestria was trying to get Twilight to do by learning the lessons of "Friendship with benefits".
(get that nerd laid before she went crazy, well crazier than she has proven to be)
At least she's showing more of her dere side rather than her tsun side. Of course Lionel being less of a complaining ass probably helped her make the switch.
I usually don't post unless i have something productive to say, or it's the first chapter, but fuck it. I can't like it again, so i gotta show my appreciation somehow, yeah?
Fuckin' awesome. And the swallowing thing... dammit. I've seen that only once before a long time ago (Not including in Vindicated Depravity recently). So perverted & hot...
Also , this story is not made up of overly long chapters that are so tedious and boring, they make you stop reading it. My thoughts on Xenophilia: just shut up and **** each-other already, we don't care about any social norms, we want to see romance. Celestia, that fic was a waste of my time.
2235528 Everyone have diffrent taste. I don't mind world building etc. I like Ingress, yes but it's diffrent cathegory than Xenophilia. If I had to give a price for first place I would give it to Xenophilia. I really like romance there and world building and all this stuff which is boring for you : P This whole "shut up and buck already" was only a cherry on the top for me. But nevermind, I'm following ingress since...well the first one with Lyra. This was fun ^^
2235528 7-10k words are overly long for a chapter?
I guess everyone has their own tastes. I loved the world building in that story, it made a lot of sense with the gender disparity found in Equestria. They screw each other in about every other chapter anyways.
Now I'm absolutely sure that they will probably go on dates after this.
2239428 Sorry, but you have to remember to be prepared to fight for your opinion when you say you hate something. Just saying you hate something is enough of a flame bait as it is.
Nice work, Anon, but you seem to have some trouble writing in "brash" for RD. Try using more common works, or, if you play TF2, make her speak like the Scout. Her speech in this story is pretty OOC, but otherwise, perfect.
22357782235711 You gush over the world building, and yes I loved the world he presented, but It was supposed to be a romance, don't you think its a bad sign when the main point of your fic is overlooked for the world building? If the story was a world building only fic it would be awesome BUT it was supposed to be a romance focused story, that should be the most liked part of the fic but it wasn't.
What of the main character himself. Can you honestly he didn't make you cringe at points? I just didn't find him to be that likable as a main character.
I'm not even going to get into how the fic doesn't answer a single bloody question about how he got there, or what exactly made him so afraid of Celestia's hair.
If you like it, that is your opinion, and the above is mine, I wish you no ill will and I am not trying to be a dick weed here, I am just presenting my view of it.
A lot hotter teasing this time around, well maybe tease is kind of inaccurate but you know what I mean. Will definitely be awaiting further updates eagerly.
I'm sorry, but the romance was just one side that the story was going to express. From the synopsis...
A romantic story that explores the differences between our societies and how that might effect the social interactions between our species.
Romantic story... Check World building story... Check It did exactly what it said it would.
Please don't say try to claim what a story was 'supposed' to be, when the author clearly intended the story to involve far more. It's famous for both it's romance and the wonderful interactions between the herd and others, as well as it's world building.
2241297 Okay, I thought that the story was good, but whatever. Doesn't really matter if our opinions vary.
I thought that the reason why he was so afraid of Celestia's mane was some sort of joke; like Molestia or something dumped him into Equistria after she had her way with him.
Awesome as usual
Good stuff, although was hoping for a bit more character development. Still, clop is clop.
Well written as always AP, looking forward to the next update.
This is better than Xenophilia
Commence read.
great chapter! keep up the good work
took a long time though... worth it
Everything must be a competition with Rainbow Dash, everything, and it works out even better in this latest tryst of needs.
At least she didn't finish "in 10 seconds flat."
I wonder, way back in Season 1/episode 1, if this is what Celestria was trying to get Twilight to do by learning the lessons of "Friendship with benefits".
(get that nerd laid before she went crazy, well crazier than she has proven to be)
At least she's showing more of her dere side rather than her tsun side. Of course Lionel being less of a complaining ass probably helped her make the switch.
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Attention fellow readers, giggity, that is all.
I usually don't post unless i have something productive to say, or it's the first chapter, but fuck it. I can't like it again, so i gotta show my appreciation somehow, yeah?
Fuckin' awesome. And the swallowing thing... dammit. I've seen that only once before a long time ago (Not including in Vindicated Depravity recently). So perverted & hot...
New chapter?
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Hell yeah
HAWT!
2234700 Yes it is, because it doesn't have an annoying as hell main character.
Good world building is no excuse for a teeth clenchingly annoying main character.
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EXACTLY how I feel.
Also , this story is not made up of overly long chapters that are so tedious and boring, they make you stop reading it.
My thoughts on Xenophilia: just shut up and **** each-other already, we don't care about any social norms, we want to see romance.
Celestia, that fic was a waste of my time.
This story>other story
oh just fuck already!
i still love this story though
2235528 Everyone have diffrent taste. I don't mind world building etc. I like Ingress, yes but it's diffrent cathegory than Xenophilia. If I had to give a price for first place I would give it to Xenophilia. I really like romance there and world building and all this stuff which is boring for you : P This whole "shut up and buck already" was only a cherry on the top for me.
But nevermind, I'm following ingress since...well the first one with Lyra. This was fun ^^
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I've read better romances (This author also wrote "An Affliction of The Heart" so there)
2235528 7-10k words are overly long for a chapter?
I guess everyone has their own tastes. I loved the world building in that story, it made a lot of sense with the gender disparity found in Equestria. They screw each other in about every other chapter anyways.
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True, but they do bog-all in the other non-sex chapters.
i dont think i can read the next chapter... if this almost killed me, the next one will turn my pants into a nuclear bomb
very good sir a give props to you that is all the spartan is out
Guess they're starting to get along...
a great chapter my friend
Hay, no hating on me for not liking Xenophilia
Now I'm absolutely sure that they will probably go on dates after this.
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Sorry, but you have to remember to be prepared to fight for your opinion when you say you hate something. Just saying you hate something is enough of a flame bait as it is.
Nice work, Anon, but you seem to have some trouble writing in "brash" for RD. Try using more common works, or, if you play TF2, make her speak like the Scout. Her speech in this story is pretty OOC, but otherwise, perfect.
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You gush over the world building, and yes I loved the world he presented, but It was supposed to be a romance, don't you think its a bad sign when the main point of your fic is overlooked for the world building? If the story was a world building only fic it would be awesome BUT it was supposed to be a romance focused story, that should be the most liked part of the fic but it wasn't.
What of the main character himself. Can you honestly he didn't make you cringe at points? I just didn't find him to be that likable as a main character.
I'm not even going to get into how the fic doesn't answer a single bloody question about how he got there, or what exactly made him so afraid of Celestia's hair.
If you like it, that is your opinion, and the above is mine, I wish you no ill will and I am not trying to be a dick weed here, I am just presenting my view of it.
Alright an update!
A lot hotter teasing this time around, well maybe tease is kind of inaccurate but you know what I mean. Will definitely be awaiting further updates eagerly.
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I'm sorry, but the romance was just one side that the story was going to express. From the synopsis...
Romantic story... Check
World building story... Check
It did exactly what it said it would.
Please don't say try to claim what a story was 'supposed' to be, when the author clearly intended the story to involve far more. It's famous for both it's romance and the wonderful interactions between the herd and others, as well as it's world building.
2241297
Okay, I thought that the story was good, but whatever. Doesn't really matter if our opinions vary.
I thought that the reason why he was so afraid of Celestia's mane was some sort of joke; like Molestia or something dumped him into Equistria after she had her way with him.
To the author, nice work on this story.
2241297 I have to completely agree with you on that one. I hated the main character and Rainbow didn't seem like Rainbow.
Just a suggestion, when Rainbow finally leaves, and goes back to the Wonderbolts, she could get him a job as a team masseuse.
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Like Minecraft?