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So here it is my first finished fanfic I hope everyone at least kinda enjoys it. This was way harder to make then I'd thought it would be when I started. It was surprisingly difficult to write the eating scene without giving to mush away.
1917111 thanks for the catch I can't believe I did that
Forgiven nations? I think you mean Foreign but either way this was funny, i laughed.
Nice job for a first time storyline tale. It was truly short, sweet and surprising at the end. So great work on the story and I would like to encouage you upon such ideas for future tales.
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Did he just alight Rarity's vagina?
t'was nice~
"Nothing dirty here"
"Mature: Sex"
Oh.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA
oh my god that was great I cant stop laughing ow my sides someone please help me
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I really wish more authors think of including flame-play in their Sparity, or Spikerotica in general.
Teeth and claws are a fun way of adding some fire to the bedroom... but Spike has actual FIRE!
Canter lot.... one word
Princess... shouldn't they include Luna?
Couple things, you lied and I assumed it really was a marshmallow. I kept thinking, big marshmallow, He BURNED Rarity? Also, he played with Pinkie a LOT to be the best with Rarity?
What would he have called Twilight?
1917071 I'm sorry to tell you this, but the author beat you to the first reply andcdn.memegenerator.net/instances/400x/31403961.jpg
We all knew exactly what was going on here.
(*upvote*)
it took me a minute when i first saw your title but now i am recovering from a massive side cramp from laughing so hard.
you... you are very funny
OH GOD, MY SIDES.
That was awesome.
Anyone else eating marshmellows while reading this?
Hey! You lied to me! Seriously! Who does that?!
LMFAO
good story bro
1917579 holy shit hey breath fire on rarity wtf lol someone explain
Good show.
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Jolly good show indeed.
Hilarious analogies. (If that is the correct word.)
1919153
I didn't eat my marshmallow.
I devoured it.
Jolly good job, you.
i was a little dissapointd , i thought this this was going to be on a similuar lvl as Equestrian pie.(Sex with food funny as hell)
It was a desire he only felt only when he was eating marshmallows, and mad him want to devour it then and there.
'Wait just a little longer' he thought trying to fight of his hunger.
1919891
heh heh heh
The marshmallow was no more R.I.P
1917340 thanks for the catch. that's what I get for trying to write this on my phone.
1917428>>1917579>>1918062>>1919511 ah was I not clear here? The flame Spike's using isn't hot enough to burn Rarity. It's more along the lines of him blowing hot air into her crotch
1918062 Spike had already left the castle by the time Luna came back.
1917527>>1917728>>1918103>>1918643>>1919505>>1919849 I honestly did not expect this many people to like this.
1921028 Considering it's SIMILAR to what I have in mind... :o
Ha HA awsome
1919153 LOL i am
1917071 I would care, but unfortunately images5.fanpop.com/image/polls/1063000/1063803_1340988031517_full.png
AH so he practiced on cupcakes? Well played well played indeed
that made no sense what so ever
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1928197what part were you confused by?
“It wasn’t uncommon to see Spike swallow gemstones or even entire cakes whole, but that was never the case when he was eating marshmallows.”
Instead of using double negatives, just say:
“It was common to see Spike swallow gemstones or even entire cakes whole, but that was never the case when he was eating marshmallows.”
And better.
1935044all of it
1937356 Alright I'll start at from the beginning. Back in season one there was an episode called a dog and pony show proper where in one scene some people thought Rarity's legs look like marshmallows which began the Rarity is a marshmallow meme I'm playing off that idea her making marshmallow Spike's pet name for Rarity meaning that when I say "Spike eats a marshmallow" what I mean is "Spike preforms oral sex on Rarity"
1936235 You say that like a double negative is inherently worse somehow. I intentionally used the double negative to in this case to alter the context and flow of this statement. Using the double negative forces the reader to pay a little bit more attention to the meaning of the text, and creates an emphasis for how unusual this really is.
1940266
Fair enough. Just thought maybe you unknowingly did it.
1940223Ooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh..... yeah I don't have cable anymore... so I didn't know about that
Spike licked his lips in anticipation as he gazed hungrily at the marshmallow lying in front of him. Spike loved marshmallows more than anything else in all of Equestria; he loved them more then he loved gemstones, ice-cream, or even mustaches. Spike would do nothing but eat marshmallows if he could. Unfortunately, that was impossible; there were always thing to do, ponies to meet, places to be, and adventures to have. Lately there’d always seemed to be something getting in between Spike and his marshmallows.
'But not tonight,' Spike thought to himself, 'tonight is a special occasion, and I'm going to treat myself.'
(...)
Having finished his meal Spike brought a cloth to his mouth to wipe away the generous amount of spit, and any other mess that had accumulated from his snout. Having finished cleaning up Spike examined the prone figure before him. Rarity was lying on her back with a full blush adorning her cheeks, and a pillow held against her snout to muffle her cries of pleasure.
Spike climbed up over Rarity before leaning to whisper, “Happy birthday Rarity,” as he stole a kiss.
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Congratulations my good man! For your first ever story here on fimfiction
actually i thought Spike was just actually eating marshmallows for the lulz but that wouldn't be fun right? 
1917340 Quit reading smut and release the next chapter of Hopes and Shadows, no but seriously I really liked this, quick and hot! Thumbs up
1947290 I'm working on it
1940223makes sense
sorry
Nice! Relized because of this story raity now looks like a marshmallow to me... Like a boss...
You know, for some reason I don't believe you. But I'll read it anyway.
You had me going there for a sec!!
Good on you mate! I thought this was already complete, not that I didn't enjoy it, but future prospects of this is highly enticing.
i like it
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