Yay!

Huzzah! Well I know what I'm reading this Friday. I have been looking forward to this story for awhile now.

Oh man it hit while I was commenting on the blog post!

Screw sleep!

Finally!  I have been waiting for this forever!

It's here! It's finally here! Now to read

yey I wake up, check my Internetz and what do I get?!  Ponydora Prancypants epic story continuation! Thank you god for small favorers.

Will read it ASAP.

On the side note that picture is beautifully made but ... well that smile of hers is .... disturbing. That Rarity is so judgmental and full of herself. When I look at this picture I can’t shake that feeling that she’s thinking that she’s sooo much better than everypony else ... and I’m about to be conned. Ofc. it’s just my humble opinion and I’m probably wrong.

<note to self> Stop staring at the picture and go read the awesome story… work can wait. If it would be important work they wouldn’t give it to you any way.

:) Seaponies!

I trust that you will forgive me if I that scenario implausible.:

Missing find and a rogue :

“I still do not see what was supposed to be funny. You tell PInkie that we shall have words about this.”

Pinkie is not to my knowledge a private eye.

Aside from that, awesome. Fluttershy and Rainbow were perfect, as was our reluctant heroine, but I'm not entirely sure Coral is a pony at all.

Love that Luna. Rarity snapping at that innocent stallion was probably the best moment in this chapter: in my head it played out as if it was in the actual show.

Also, feature boxed already. Congrats?

Huzzah!

Assertive Fluttershy, realistic Rainbow Dash, hilariously awkward Luna, and...

*sigh* Berry punch. You know, in my story, a murder mystery, Berry is the first to die. Now, every time I see her on screen or read of her in another story, I feel so bad. I'm sorry, Berry!

Also, doth mine eyes perceive Sea Ponies?

At any rate, Ponydora, this is a great start to what is sure to be, just like Alicorn, one hell of a ride. Brava!

Also, just received my Hardcover copy of Alicorn! I lurves it!

Huzzah!

Ger? Gertrude, perhaps? Not as awesome as 'Danger', that's for certain.

Being an Element of Harmony apparently means never having a calm evening, huh. Well, I suppose you'd get that in any group of close friends that has Rainbow Dash as a member.

Looks like a pretty good opening night after all.

>>19023991902399

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Any comments on Rarity and the Princess of the Moon sounding a little similar?

Also, amused to see that Rarity still likes her spirits.

And so the Saga continues and with a great start non the less.

! Ponydora Prancypants has posted a new story called The Abyssal Forge

"Hmm, what's this? So, Blueblood has reverted to his old jerkish self? Or maybe he's actually in some sort of trouble? Is that what this is going to be about? "

"Mm, I wish I could  make a reservation to the Cobblestone for a fancy dinner and some mulled wine..."

"Uh oh, this business with Rainbow Dash is not sounding good at all. Sounding doubleplusungood in fact."

"Wait, what? Who's this creepy, crazy mare and what does she really want with Rarity? The plot is thickening at an alarming rate already..."

*Suddenly, Luna!*

" ... (Oh, Luna, you and your melodramatic, old-fashioned ways! I love you.)

...wait, do we know it really is Luna? I have a bad feeling about this..."

Another amazing chapter. You certainly have a talent for creative writing, especially when it comes to pacing the story. Can't wait to read more!

And the next adventure begins, i can only wonder where your words will take me. I am looking ever so forward to it.

Oh yay :3

I think I had a heart attack

Marvelous start of the second part of the story. Your work reminds me that descriptive narration is really enjoyable when done right.

One word:

YES!

Wait, Fancy Pants is going to be in this? Now there is a pony that can pull off gentleman adventurer.

Blueblood can pull off a kind of rakish skypirate lord thing when he gets a bit scruffy but he's not quite a gentleman.

...the fathomless depths beneath tormented seas...

Yes.  We need more sub stories.

First I would like to say that, as always, I enjoyed reading your story very much.

The characterization in your story is brilliant. After “The Flight of the Alicorn” I’m not surprised in that department, as I know you truly mastered Rarity character. As always I have to praise thou for your skill as it is truly impressive.

You manage to stick very closely to the canon of the show in the process of creating something new. This is also the reason so many people like your stories. You give us show quality characters in new and interesting situations. Something many writers miss to accomplish.

I very much like how you expose Fluttershy in your story. Writers often have no idea how to characterize her well enough and leave her outside the action and don’t bother to add her complex character in the plot.

I know I did on many occasion expressed my admiration for your work in terms of characterization but I consider this very important part of reason why your stories are really worth reading.

There were many unanswered questions at the end of your last story and I’m very happy to see you have not forgotten about them and the second part directs us back at them, from the start. I have in mind the mystery of the Gallopitan pearls.

I have just one question. Time line. I understand that your story takes place now somewhere at the end of second season but did the events of Canterlot Wedding or Crystal Empire unfold, or are we yet to await them?

Btw I’m looking forward how are you going to implement the Crystal Heart from the show into the plot of your Triskelion series.

Hooray, I've been looking forward to this! I almost missed it, though - did you not tag the blog post to "The Flight of the Alicorn", so that people following that story would be alerted?

Anyway, great opening chapter! It sets up a lot of different plots nicely. I really feel sorry for Rainbow Dash trying to work a desk job, and I'm not surprised that it didn't work out. I'm glad she made the effort, though.

If Coral isn't a sea pony, then I have no idea what she is. Between her warnings and Luna's arrival, everything is very ominous already! I also look forward to seeing just what Blueblood is up to.

\o/

That is all. For now.

And thus begins a new journey towards another printed book in the trilogy.

Oh, and adventures about Rarity.

I've been looking forward to reading this. I might go so far as to say that this is my favorite adventure story out there. If not, its close to the top

Take my like, take my favorite. This story is gonna be epic and I wanna be there for every part of it.

It begins...

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>>19027871902787 where did you espy Fancy Pants?

Ponydora, as incredible as always, and seaponies? Whee!!! It's like christmas all over again!

Hooray! It's here!

A rather riveting start that I find unexpected. Suffice to say I'm dissappointed Blueblood starts this out as being a bit of a borish lout, but I suppose that just adds another layer of intrigue.

Your characterization is, once again, spot on. You manage to capture the Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash very well without making them cariactures. There's a good amount of subtelty and roundedness to your writing of them. Your Rarity is excellent as always.

You weave in what's happened over a year very well. I didn't expect a time-skip like that (I figured if it was a significant time-skip it would be longer), but you add a lot of interesting elements to what Rarity has been up to without making them overbearing. It is really cool seeing the places the mane 6 have been going, and I look forward to hearing perhaps more of it.

The intrigue and mystery being wove is excellent; not forcing things too deeply, but giving enough of a taste to leave the reader hungry for more. It seems to me like this story is getting off to a quicker start despite your prior warning.

An excellent and enjoyable chapter all told, despite my dissapointment of the lack of some Rariblood (which I'm sure will come). Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

Also:

I’m sure that he’s gone from designing air yachts and racing ships for the idle rich to developing some top secret invention upon which the fate of the entire nation rests, which he cannot disclose to me on account of its classified nature.

Talk about your not so subtle foreshadowing.

So.. Steampunk Submarines?

Please be Steampunk Submarines, Please.

Maybe an epic 10k Steampunk Submarine battle or two...

Can the submarines also be airships that are launched by cutting the envelope away and dropping nose first in to the sea?  

Can one of them be modelled on the nautilus? with big glowing eyes? maybe just a background sub that doesn't get any lines?

I think I need to have a lie down.

(sketching out brass Triskelion propeller designs in my mind, just in case)

Excited now

>>19032391903239

He's going to be one of the featured characters.

And I've already recommended this to Spacebattles, so you may see more views Ponydora.

>>19033651903365 ahh, I always forget to check character tags glad you've got sharp eyes to notice

Rarity-centric fic that hopefully doesn't involve her being a prissy bitch? insta faved and liked.\

EDIT: i did not notice it is in the same series as FoTA. i don't have enough thumbs!

I clicked that gold star so hard it went supernova.

Wow, Ponydora, what an opening! Not only do you give us bits and pieces of info about what has been happening to Rarity and the rest of the Mane six in the time between stories, but the way you built up the suspence over the course of this chapter (pardon the pun) was masterful.  Seriously, if every writer/director/artist could use your writing as a template, there would be many more awesome movie and book sequels out there.

Glad to see Luna is still her adorable, archaic, fish-out-of-water self from season 2.

I haven't been this excited by the opening scene of a sequel since I saw The Two Towers and The Dark Knight. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Well I knew this would be waiting for me today, I did have to wait till I finished work to read it though so I was a little distracted. Lots of set up here so I am excited to see where it goes.

Okay, that anise-and-turnip dish scares me a bit, but I'll assume Apple Cobbler knows what she's doing when she's not trying to sun under a tree.  Really, all of the dining details added a great backdrop to the story as exposition is offered to set up the changes since we last checked in on these characters in the Triskelion series.  The Cobblestone seems like a wonderful setting with a fine selection of spirits, not to mention an interesting array of party crashers.  I quite enjoyed the added comic relief of Luna's grand appearance and Rarity's resignation that she will never quite be free of crazy circumstance regardless of how stridently she tries to live a normal life.

Other touches I quite liked were the ongoing efforts to determine the pony-type of her mysterious, insistent, would-be client.  Seeing Rarity check off the clues as they were offered was a nice insight into her intelligence and shows that she has a bit of a mind for intrigue, although she wasn't apparently prepared to make a Fox Mulder-sized leap that might have been necessary to grasp the right answer.  I also liked the set up to Dash's need for an adventure, as it seems one is quickly brewing whether Rarity wants one or not.  (I'm curious to see if Rarity is quite as content to avoid excitement as she claims, though.  Certainly her relationship seems to need some new forward momentum.)

I'm also wondering what Twilight is up to, as while her name popped up it was never in reference to current events.  AJ and Pinkie attended the rehearsal (and I suspect have some small involvement in the restaurant, through crops or family or dessert offerings), and Fluttershy and Dash made the opening (although only one was invited, and that one as a last-minute replacement).  Admittedly, Twilight and Spike aren't exactly movers and shakers or opinion makers around Ponyville, so perhaps they were simply on the "post-opening" invite list, but you know I get curious about them easily.

All in all, an excellent jump back into the world of heroic-lead Rarity!  I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

Yay!

A magnificent and intriguing beginning to what is doubtlessly going to be an amazing new part of this story!

So many thing to look forward to!  What Bluebloods' deal is, Who Coral is and the dangers she talked about, and what Luna wants with Rarity! I anticipate them all!

Fluttershy being assertive was adorable, and those dishes sounded delicious!

This is gonna be great!

Also, yay featured box!

Pink pearls?  Fancy concealing cape?  Strange pony?

Shoo-be-doop~

And Luna Causes Excitement!

Can't wait for the story to start off for real!

Saw this on the front page, feature place, and immediately thought: Darksiders 2. I was a bit let down after my hopes went up a little. Hopes are for the weak.

Y'know, that single spoonful of turnip just so happens to be a great analogy for this chapter. A single little taste of awesomeness to prepare us for the excellence that lies ahead. ^_^

Great! I was hoping to see soon the continuation of "Flight of the Alicorn". Way to go!

In the future, are you gonna get another cover pic, with a title and all that?

Fluttershy shrugged. “Oh, I don’t know. I never go looking for danger or adventures or giant monsters or fire-breathing dragons or magical spirits of disharmony and chaos.” Her voice reached a crescendo before she had to pause for a breath, then she continued much more quietly. “They just seem to, um, find me. I really wish they would cut it out.

I came for the Rarity, and then Fluttershy stole the show!

Seriously the whole scene between her and Rarity was very well done. Nice to see Fluttershy showing off a bit of her new assertiveness while still being true to herself.

Ha. I should've known better than to expect a quiet establishing chapter. But babbling seaponies and party-crashing Lunas are better, anyway. So,

points of interest:

- Blueblood is apparantly back to being Blueblood. I suspect that he has a legitimate reason for not leaving Canterlot; the description's mention of a

sick Princess may have something to do with it. He'd better hope so, in any case. Nopony stands Rarity up without a good excuse.

- Dash has a desk job. Something about that image is just hilarious. And hopefully she really is prepared for another adventure...

- Coral. I didn't think we'd be seeing seaponies so quickly, or that they'd be amphibious. So she was a welcome surprise. Can't wait to find out what she really needs Rarity for, and learn more about her mysterious warning.

- Rarity herself. Seems like, Blueblood troubles aside, she seems to have recovered nicely from the events of FoTA. Co-running a restaurant and considering opening a new store in Canterlot? Not too shabby at all. Too bad the Powers That Be can't just leave her alone. But that would make for a boring story. Also, nice to see her alcoholic tendancies are still present. Drunk Rarity is Best Rarity.

- Luna. Gotta love her ability to make an entrance. The question, of course, is why she made it...

So, a typically awesome start. Thumbs-upped, and now I can finally fill that unsightly hole Alicorn's departure left in my Favorites list.

...Saddle Arabians?

So much WIN in this chapter!

First off Rarity and Fluttershy

Secondly Fluttershy using Rarity's line. "...... the worst possible thing!"

And best of all The Raiders of the Lost Ark soundtrack plays nicely while reading this gem.

YAY!   new story!  though i was also wondering if "the flight of the alicorn" was shipped back to you, as i haven't recieved it yet so i'm a bit afraid for it's location.  I'd be happy to pay the shipping again if it came back, I just want it on my bookshelf so i can indulge whenever i want

I LIKE THIS CHAPTER! *smashes glass on floor* ANOTHER!!! (only, you know, Luna instead of Celestia...)

And HO SNAP SEAPONIES. Something tells me Rarity hit it right on the head re:Blueblood. Then again, maybe he's just arranging OTHER super-secret important plans. (The most perfect marriage proposal ever, anyone?) Anyway I am JUST SO STOKED for this to have begun! I'm sure it'll be just as fantastic as FotA!

Leave your hammers at the box, come inside, come inside. Be careful as you pass, move along, move along.

I can sympathize with Rarity, when she started to laugh. I certainly was cracking up.

Ponydora confirmed for white pony supremacist. What have you against other colors, missy?

Kidding, of course.

So, I just found out that you can buy "The Flight of the Alicorn" in book form.

NEED. WANT. NOW.

Now to read! So excited!

Hm, i rather liked this.  You know what, you just got a reader back.  Keep the chapters comin!

I've been looking forward to this, and I can tell it's going to be good.

>>19075881907588 why'd you leave in the first place?

open bar! whooooop!

Barely a chapter in and ALREADY we have an assertive Fluttershy, an interruption from Rainbow Dash and Luna, not to mention, ski-badgers??  

Gearing up for another adventure right here. TALLY HO!

I knew I would not regret favoriting this story, sight unseen!

Once again, your Rarity is pitch-perfect, and her dinner and chat with Fluttershy was lovely. (And good descriptions of food are a delight!) The mounting series of interruptions, first by apologetic Dash, then by mysterious Coral, and finally by Her Most Metal Nightliness worked great, too. I'm eager to see what new perils and adventures await our heroine, her friends and her possibly loutish-again boyfriend.

Rarity in the cover art looks scarily like Miss Piggy....

Anyway, great start- got me hooked all over again!

>>19089011908901

Miss Piggy is also a Fashionista, so no problem!

>>19098631909863

And both dream of stardom...

And both have a green reptile pining after them as well....

Mother of Celestia! They're the same person!!

>>19099141909914

A romance/ adventure story with Rarity, Prince Blueblood and Fancy Pants. I MUST READ this.

I have NEVER seen ANY pieces of fan-work that have Rarity and Prince Blueblood together, so this, surprisingly, will fell new.

I hope he reforms.

>>19099141909914

... I would read that.  Does that make me a bad person?

>>19040521904052  Well, it seems pretty likely that Twilight is involved in the museum Rarity mentioned that was to open Soon™, which would make Twi involved in Rarity's more general project of making Ponyville more upscale.

Okay, before I read...

INSTANT STAR. INSTANT FOLLOW.

I'm one of the fortunate ones who have been WAITING for this since FotA finished. Whoever you put on for the cover of that, PUT THEM ON FOR THIS ONE. NOW.

Reading. BRB.

Edit: End of chapter. Adele's Skyfall begins to play.

At the risk of sounding dumb, I have to ask

Was this inspired by Darksiders 2?

I said on your blog post this would be featured, and you doubted me!

I'm thrilled to see I was correct. This story so far deserves its feature.

Came because the title made me curious, stayed because of an errant comment about the picture and Miss Piggy of all things.  Was totally worth it.

Poor Rarity! When we left her, she was in a happy place with her prince at her side. And now we meet her again on night that should be full of triumph for her, but instead she's angry, unhappy and lonely. Oh, cruel fate!

The whole chapter reminded of an intimate theater play, which is quite the contrast to most of the scenes from FOTA. Here we have Rarity just sitting in her restaurant, hardly interacting with the many other guests (like they are invisible), instead only sequentially talking to Berry, Fluttershy, and later Rainbow, a waiter, the mystery mare and Princess Luna. I don't know if it was your intention to evoke this theater atmosphere, but that's how came across to me – and I liked it.

But then Luna teleported them away, so I think the play ended there and the next grand adventure begins.

I like the idea of Rarity expanding her business (and apparently small fortune) into new directions with the restaurant. It fits her generous character to go ahead and bring a little bit of the fancy lifestyle she favors so much to her beloved hometown. Nice to see Berry Punch as an expert sommelier not the mindless, funny drunk mare many others portray her as.

What else?

I think Rarity's sarcastic remark why Blueblood can't be with her might be spot on (at least almost). The mysterious mare is part of a long forgotten water affine tribe of ponies in peril (I'm not saying sea ponies! ). The conflict between Fluttershy and RD was resolved rather quickly, but I think the main purpose of it was to get Rainbow away from her desk and out into the world, she can somehow join Rarity's adventure later on.

Well, I didn't get any "Blueblood in Ponyville" scenes – c'est la vie. But wouldn't Blueblood go by his name Polaris now since he stepped down from the title? After a year I would expect Rarity to call and refer to her boyfriend by his real name (I don't think it's a nickname he'd like).

The short mention Applejack and Buckeroo being together made me smile. And it reminded me of something else concerning Khufu's crew: When I first read your description of Zips looks I thought it was quite the creative idea to make him look half pony, half zebra. Turns out that's what zebra hybrids look like in real life – learned something new there.

Anyways, apart from a few spelling errors, this is quite the quality work again and I'm eagerly looking forward to more.

Keep up the great work!

NTL

P.S.: Do you want to have the Abyssal Forge to have its own TVTrope page or have included with FOTA's one?  

Yay!!! The sequel for my favorite story has been started!

And it doesn't disappint! Very intriguing, right off the bat, and as always delightful in the descriptive and true to character.

The only thing I wished differently (and of course, I realize it's probably part of the plotline and will eventually resolve) is that Rarity should have more faith in Blueblood! I mean, after all they've been through!! I think their bond is stronger than some of the complaining and second-guessing uttered at the opening of her restaurant. Hopefully, it was just the brandy speaking or her melancholy at being alone.

I, for one, still believe in him and think that he must be busy doing something for her, unbeknowst to our fair unicorn. Perhaps building her a new airship called 'Rarity,' I might venture a guess? Or a mansion/castle nearer Ponyville for them to eventually reside?

Who knows? (Well, except our great writer, Ponydora-sama!) But I know that Blueblood WILL be true, (he is too in love with her and what she had done for him, in his eyes) just perhaps a bit clueless as to what Rarity REALLY wants---to have him in her world.

We'll see what the next chapter will bring!!!

Thanks for the great opening and for continuing this amazing story!!!

>>19078051907805

I really didn't like the last three chapters of Alicorn.  Eye of the Storm was a great chapter, but Stratusburg was one climax too many.  And I'm not a fan of the whole "prophecy" thing.  this was an enticing start, though.  I think I could warm up to the idea.

Haha! Luna is so awkward.

I'm not sure if someone already caught this, but

receive her just deserts for taking advantage of you.

Desert as in the sandy place?

Also, shouldn't there be a "her" in this sentence?

Coral suddenly leaned forward and touched Rarity with foreleg.

Great story, assertive Fluttershy is assertive.

Excellent, the sequel to Flight of the Alicorn is here at last! Lots of great characterization at last. Oh Rarity, you would think she would know better about taking vague threats seriously. I have to wonder what trouble Luna is going to get poor Rarity into… And specifically Rarity… Things are in motion, that I am sure of.

Also a nice backdrop with the Cobblestone. I really felt that was a real place there.

A couple minor typos:

“Whatever his reason for not visiting,.you’ve

-Punctuation issue.

I trust that you will forgive me if I that scenario implausible.:

-I think there is something at the end of that sentence that doesn’t belong there…

“I know, I  know,”

-Extra space between the second I know.

she might need to order a third dessert a stronger drink.

-dessert and a stronger drink.

>>19181171918117 the proper spelling is actually "deserts." I admit I was having a little fun by using that phrase in the midst of a dinner conversation.

>>19022721902272

Yay!

>>19027951902795

I know, right?

>>19138041913804

I would be absolutely thrilled to have a tropes page for Forge.

>>19109601910960

You might be a bit confused if you read this without reading the first book in the trilogy first! At any rate, thanks for tuning in!

>>19067191906719

I was waiting for someone to call me out on this! At any rate, it's not my fault that Hasbro makes all the ponies in positions of wealth and prestige white unicorns/alicorns.

>>19028091902809

Good question regarding "Crystal Empire," "Canterlot Wedding," etc. There is no Crystal Empire here, or at least, not as it appeared in the show. At this point, I've more or less constructed a self-contained "Equestria 2" that diverges from continuity as of "Canterlot Wedding," though I'll continue to be very aware of what is happening on the show, and make nods to canon wherever possible.

>>19138041913804

Rarity doesn't care for the name Polaris, and she at least gets to call Blueblood whatever she wants. Also, who said anything about sea ponies? I know I didn't! Good to have you onboard again! Until next time, shoo-be-doo, shoop shoo-be-do!

>>19204791920479

"Trilogy" ????

I will look it up.

>>19205251920525

It's dangerous to go alone. Take this.

>>19205391920539

I put it under "Watch later"

>>19205441920544

No friend read the first part ASAP ... it’s worth every minute you spent over it. It is best Rarity centered story this fandom has to offer… in my humble opinion. Moreover I would be so bold as to say that “The Flight of the Alicorn” can be placed in top 10 fanfics of the fandom.

>>19205691920569

Fine... i will this chapter first then read Flight of the Unicorn

>>19205391920539

Surely you mean

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>>19206991920699

That is exactly what I mean!

>>19207221920722

Good

“She’s my oldest friend, Rarity, but right now I’m just so mad at her that I could … well, I don’t even know what I could do! Probably something!”

Rainbow Miriam Jennifer Gertrude 'Danger' Dash?

I have just spent the last 5 hours reading FoTA from start to end, then started CH1 of this. It is now past midnight. I regret nothing.

In all seriousness, this (series) is now right up the top of my favourite pony epics. Comparable (for me) to "It's a Dangerous Business Going out your Door".

If I start adding the facts (and not) together...

Abyssal - from the title, I'd say we're in for some sub-surface exploration/expeditions (possibly aquatic). Forge is an interesting choice of word though - you aren't thinking of journeying to the core of the planet are you? Or perhaps deep-sea thermal vents? Lava is (hopefully) required. Phoenix? Falls would be a nice location...

Coral - a character which leaves more questions. I suspect seapone, but cannot be certain. Coupled with the fact she is not offering standard Equestrian currency, but rather solid gold suggests she has access to the raw minerals or large amounts of treasure - but lacks communication with modern Equestria. Gold also requires a forge of some form to shape it into other things, melt it down to ingots, etc.

Hazarding a guess here, but here's my take on all this.

Blueblood hasn't changed, is just building a secret submersible and doesn't have much time to spare (ominous/foreshadowing). Seapone is aware of Rarity and her recent accomplishments, and is asking for her help (quests!). Rarity goes with seapone, but doesn't tell Blueblood. He panics, rushes to finish sub, gathers the motley crew from the last book and pursues - after all, a submarine is just an airship underwater, right?. Seapone have their own (older) version of the prophecy, given from the (whatsit)stone, and it's a lot more detailed and darker. Since then, they've lost the stone to the abyss, where (unbeknownst) some vastly powerful creature (definitely not some giant underwater dragon with a grudge against the world/Equestria) now holds it as part of its hoard. Submarine adventure time! (To be continued...)

I'm going to leave it at that for now. Thought I'd just try for fun.I don't expect to right. I expect to be surprised.

I honestly cannot wait for the adventure to come. Lead on, good sir!

Frostwyrm

I am in love with FotA and AF does not disappoint. I noticed a couple grammar and punctuation mistakes in the book, but not enough to get me annoyed. (as I am a complete grammar nazi)

I can't wait for the next chapter! I would tell you to hurry, but you cannot hurry a masterpiece. This is in my top ten along with My Little Dashie, the Dinkie Doo trilogy, and FotA. Keep up the good work!

I hope Blueblood hasn't turned into his old self. I thought Blueblood wouldn't be stupid Blueblood again.

Who is this strange Coral? Hmmmm......

Anyway, keep up the good work!

Yo!

I noticed a few tense errors, most in the first two or three paragraphs. Always be on the lookout for those, especially at the start of a fic when establishing pacing is all-important. Going further in, I see our loveably marshmellow pony is having a rather stressful venture in both our fics! Of course, I sense the resturant opening here is just an opening salvo, whereas her art festival in TPC is a lead-in from much of the rest of the story.

Fluttershy! So Dash isn't taking to being cooped up in an office, eh? She should be warned that it seems Captain of the Wonderbolts is quite similar. Life isn't all about free flyin, unless she joins a Hells Angels squadron or something.

Crittermasters. lol

An interesting take on the guilded and the nature of what Fluttershy is doing out there. Doubly interesting that it is tied to the lease of her cottage, but that makes sense, too.

I've noticed you're getting into food-porn territory. I've ventured there myself, from time to time, and I partly blame Song of Ice and Fire for it in my case. At least its totally justified here with the resturant opening.

There's a lot of fun stuff following that - what is going on in Canterlot then? I smell the new main plotline on the horizon, ilike smike before a fire - but I had to pause and smirk at 'Museum of Natural Magic.' That's good. I love little touches like that, and it makes sense. There is 'natural magic' in this world, after all!

Check 'reason for not visiting' and 'I that scenario implausible' - got double punctuation at the end of both there.

‘I quit! Gone home to Ponyville,’ and below that ‘I’m so sorry!’ written a half dozen times.

lol

Oh, Flutters

"eat my wild oats" instead of... well! haha! Always nice to see ponified expressions, and that one is amusing comign from RD.

The shored of Los Pegasus...? You know, that's right. I've always thought of it as a Las Vegas analogue, but 'Los' really would refer to Los Angeles.

PInkie -> Pinkie

Ritual smashing of the glasses? Methinks thy Princess is channeling a little of yon Thunder God, Thor.

river serpent from (before) was

"and no ponies were more elite and famous"

for a second there, I thought you'd say 'and no ponies were more sweet and elite"

Don't forget, my friend, I'm happy to proof-read for ya, if you like. To see a sequel forming to perhaps my favorite of all pony fics! Delightful! The sweetest dish of them all! I'd hazard a guess that there's some funny business going on to which Luna is always a handy messenger. BB's absence can be either due to this, as Fluttershy light heartedly prophecized, or simply because he's pulled a Tony Stark/Howard Hughes 'lost-track of time and relationships while working on something new.' Either way, Rarity's newest crisis is sure to delight and amuse us!

Well Rarity, once again get ready to bleed alot.