Pit is pretty happy. He has saved the earth from aliens, a interdimesional super parasite and the lord of darkness himself so he has reason to be. Plus HE CAN FLY ON HIS OWN NOW, so he's pretty happy about that to. But the univserse has a wired way of messing things up all the time and it comes in the form of a banishment spell from Pandora. He and Dark Pit are thrown into a place that neither of them were really expecting, a place where friendship is one of the most powerful forces around.
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Put a space between Ithink and immediately is spelled wrong and the second world and balance is also wrong and instead of effect it's either effected or affected but I'm pretty sure it's affected.
you got me interested,
few misspellings and a couple incorrect words such as using shore instead of sure
You got me interested. I think i may have played the game for to long because i can read all of this in there voices.
I'm sorry but this is kinda bad.There is alot of mispelling and the characters kinda of seem OC
For a first fic this is well done, and nice intro for magnus
1820335 It's my interpretation of the characters in a more fleshed out context and this is by no means finished, I need to edit nearly everything I've doen but would rather just have something out there to get peoples feedback on.
I'm gritting my teeth in frustration at the obscene amount of grammar errors throughout this chapter.
Please, for the love of Celestia, ask someone to edit your chapters! If you don't want us to wait for these chapters to be posted, find an editor to work on them after they're posted!
1824062 Ok then, anyone wanna help me edit?
1825051 I'd be willing to.
You need
1. A proofreader
2. To double space your writing, I had a hard time reading the wall of text
3. MAKE MOAR
Spell check some stuff and you're good.
Dark Pit...Why you so dickish....
I'm expecting later in the story "HADES"
2678457 just look at the name it'll answer your question.
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Maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaybe........
i was gonna write a KI:U/MLP crossover myself...
but i might just have to give this a try!
and you updated recently which makes it better!
KID ICARUUUUUUS~~~~
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Pit!
3023471 Hades!
ok,for starters you mispelled alot of character names and i'm pretty ocd so don't feel too bad. their names that were mispelled were pittoo,palutena,viridi,luna,etc. pay more attention to your words than your fingers. then...well that was it actually. just fix spelling and you're A.O.K.
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Yeah I've been meaning to edit this for ages.....
I'm making a Kid Icarus fic myself about the one and only Hades. We need more Kid Icarus fics!
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Fucking favourite villain of all time! Do it!
1811854 No your perfectly fine. I haven't even played the game, but just watch someone play it for a short time, and I can still imagine their voices in it. But then again.... That happens to me anyways. Where I can just imagine how the character would say it.
This completed my life.
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Why thank you!
i hate Pittoo. Dark Pit sounds too evil. i call him "Litip"
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I call him Chuck.
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WHAT THE FU-
BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!
"Welcome to MY Underworld, Pitty Pat. You too, pretty Palutena."
Love the story but plz plz plz fix misspellings.
But I love the story
When does the crossover start?
*finds this* sudden fangirling commencing in 3.... 2.... 1.... YAY A KID ICARUS MLP CROSSOVER YAY! AND FROM ONE OF MY FAVORITE AUTHORS TOO! Ahem.... yeah haven't read yet but as you can tell I am excited for this story, can't wait to read it
Well I've read itnow, and I really like it
but you really could use a spellchecker 
(like a person one, not a digital one because those are useless)
5111321 He said in the authors notes around the 4th chapter, so very soon
Also when will this story update? The last time as about a year ago...
5353413 that's why I asked, update this story man.
Wow, has it really been year.... Wow I'm a real lazy bastard aren't I? This isn't over, I've had ideas for it for ages I've just had everything from breakups to uni in America. Oh and writer's block....looooads of that. I will continue it and amend it proper. You'll get an update next week, promise. :)
5355197 yeah ok I see what you mean
5357461 yay
can't wait
5357461 finally I have been waiting man, since this seems like a good idea for a story.
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I call him d also UPDATE PLEASE IM DIEING HERE
please tell me this isn't dead
Puberty's really a nuisance, no matter the species.