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Rethkir

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This story is a sequel to Better Living Through Science and Ponies

She's still alive.

After saving Equestria from GLaDOS’s evil, Chell is finally able to live the life she never had… until GLaDOS sets in motion her plan to rebuild Aperture Science. It's only a matter of time before the experiments begin again, and only Chell will be able to stop her.


Has a TV Tropes page (needs work)


The works that this fanfiction is based on are properties of Hasbro and Valve. I would like to thank Pen Stroke for writing the original story and Flyer for his assistance and advice.

Please note, this is an unofficial sequel. I have received permission from Pen Stroke, but it is not canon to the original. I hope you enjoy it, but keep in mind that this is a fan work (of a fan work), and Pen Stroke holds the rights to the original story.

First Published
11th Jun 2013
Last Modified
21st Jul 2014

Comments ( 1,199 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 1d ago · 5 · 1 ·

yay :yay:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·

How is Chell going to get out of this one? :trixieshiftright:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·

you have to submit all the chapter click the chapter on the bar there should be a submit and edit press the submit so others can read it

#4 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·

nice i dint think you war going to put up 5 chapters rite away.:rainbowderp: ill read in the morning .

#5 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

I thought I'd release it bit by bit :pinkiecrazy:, but why make you wait?  Here you go. All five chapters that I've written. :pinkiehappy: Enjoy. Just take your time, because then you'll have to wait for Chapter 6. :derpytongue2:

#6 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2705657 LOL your right that's y i am reading it in the morning.:pinkiecrazy::heart::twilightsmile: its 12:01 AM hear.

#7 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · 7 · ·

Hell yes

No other words need to be spoken.

#8 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · 6 · ·

Great....Atlas and P-Body: RISE!!!

#9 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2705596

Is Chell going to get out of this one? :trollestia:

#10 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

>>2706398

Very observant. Then again, she did say she'd bring them back. It's a well-known fact that GLaDOS isn't the type to lie. :applejackunsure: (This is the closest I could find to Applejack's poker face.)

#11 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

>>2706476 has Pen Stroke himself recognized this as the official sequal?

#12 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

>>2706617 I contacted him after posting the story, and I'm waiting for a response. Before I was active on FIMFiction, I wrote to his Gmail account a few months ago pitching my story, but never received a reply. I figure it got lost among all of the fan mail he gets. Either way, he'll probably be aware of it soon.  I'm really hoping this gets his approval. I've worked hard on this.

#13 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 23h ago · 1 · ·

A sequel to one of my favorite fics on this site? Favorate, like and read later. Oh also...

#15 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 19h ago · · ·
#16 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 19h ago · · ·

Dang right in the feels man, right in the feels. :fluttercry:

And it seems as if though GLaDOS might possibly not be the same monster she was before. :trixieshiftleft:

#17 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 19h ago · 3 · ·

Did I just catch a Back to the Future reference there?

Anyone wish to start the slow clap? :pinkiehappy:

#18 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 19h ago · 2 · ·

"Once you’ve retrieved the purple pony and brought her back here, your services will be no longer required, and I will bake you a cake.”
Inb4 the Diamond Dogs learn the cake is a lie. Sorry couldn't resist. :eeyup:

#19 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 19h ago · 5 · ·

That was a close shave with razor sharp blades. :pinkiegasp:

Also allow me to post the obvious:

#20 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 19h ago · · ·

"You see, you are my lemons,” she hissed. Using her telekinesis, she lifted a surgical knife, a drill, a syringe, and two identical disk-like devices that had a wire hanging from one end. Her haunting yellow eyes stared deep into their pitiful souls. “It's time to make lemonade ...”
Well it was nice knowing those Diamond Dogs. :trixieshiftleft:

#21 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 19h ago · · ·

The sounds were still muddled together. Chell gestured her head, telling Ditzy to try again. The crystal, however, still spoke, “Hey, what was that for?” Ditzy’s eyes lit up as she was stunned to hear the sound of her own thoughts.

I think you're missing a sentence just before "The crystal, however". Something along the lines of Chell covering Ditzy's mouth to stop her from speaking out loud.

#22 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

>>2707156 Thank you.

Chell gestured her head, telling Ditzy to try again, but before she could speak, Chell placed a hoof over her mouth. The crystal, however, still spoke, “Hey, what was that for?” Ditzy’s eyes lit up as she was stunned to hear the sound of her own thoughts.

#23 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

a neck that was bear and pure

I laughed at the image conjured by the thought of "a neck that was bear". (I think you mean "bare".) As amusing as it is though, you probably want to get an editor to work on this - there are a fair number of typos. Including for some reason ¬ instead of - in some places.

#24 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

>>2707208 Well, I never saw "¬" before. I wrote this in Word and copied it over last night. I was going to have a friend look over it, but he's not the best with grammar, and I just couldn't wait to post my story. I did reread it, but it's hard to get all the grammar mistakes. "bear" is fixed, and I'll remove those weird "¬". If you would like to be my editor, I would greatly appreciate that.

At least Celestia doesn't have "bear hands" :rainbowlaugh:

#25 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

>>2707234 that's right i cant spell wroth shit.:rainbowlaugh: but I'm steal going to read it.

#26 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

Okay, just reached the end of chapter 5. Story-wise it's great, and going on my watch list, but with the quantity of minor typos, you really need an editor to comb through the entire thing. In this chapter, there were several instances where the start of speech was not properly indicated by speech marks, among other things.

Edit: Just seen >>2707234 - while I'd like to, I'm afraid I don't really have the time to do more than comment on things that bugged me. Sorry.

#27 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

it sound's like  minecraft being thrown in a new world  with nothing to do but gather recourse.:pinkiecrazy: chapter 1

#28 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

My reaction to the sequel of the first fimfic i read, also the best fimfic ever.

literally.

#29 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 18h ago · · ·

she dashed towards the wall and jumped threw it

to mask my loneness

I suggest morons not finish that

1. Through.

2. Loneliness.

3. I suggest you morons not finish that. (Not you you as in the author but the sentence:derpyderp1::derpytongue2:)

#30 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

I AM GOING TO READ THE SHIT OUT OF THIS!

#31 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 17h ago · 3 · ·

information that dated sometimes dated back centuries

by replacer her with Wheatley

“Funny, she would always call me fat for some reason, then she defended me when Wheatley made the same insults. Chell sighed.

at Chell’s cutie mark, and though it

1. This sentence is throwing me off somehow...

2. Replaced.

3. Missing your closing quotation mark.

4. Through.

3 more chapters to go... tomorrow. For now, sleep like what Chell is doing and to continue on.

#32 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

Hey, everypony! I'd like to thank you all for your support! :twilightblush: I've been overwhelmed with so many likes and favorites, that I was unable to sleep last night. :pinkiecrazy: To be honest, I think much of its popularity can be attributed to it being a sequel to a legendary fic, but the entire reason that I'm writing a sequel to Better Living is because it really, really, really needed one. You just can't have the villain come back to life and vow to get right back to evil without a sequel! :raritydespair:

Better Living was one of the first fanfics I've read, and I really wanted to see the story arc continue. Since it didn't seem that the much-needed sequel was being written, I thought I could write it myself, and I am proud of what I've written.

That said, I'm GLaD that everypony is enjoying the story for what it is. I want this to be a worthy sequel to the original, and considering that the original was written by Pen Stroke, that is quite a feat. I appreciate all feedback and constructive criticism.

Also, if any of you would like to help with this story, I still need an editor. Thank you, everyone! :heart: Also thanks for the grammar corrections. I'm fixing them as they appear.

#33 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

YES! someone  know that the adventure sphere went to space with wetly and the space core:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

#34 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

good thing you know your portal and portal2 history i thoat on one   cud see the adventure core get  sucked in to space. lolol:rainbowlaugh:

#35 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2707432

Everything I mention has a purpose to the story. :ajsmug:

The video is wrong about the fact sphere. He stays on Earth.

#36 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2707467 i know i played portal 2  and i cud see the adventure core get sucked in to space. bu I'm stell on the 1th chapter and it is great so far.

#37 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 16h ago · · ·

insta-fav!!!

#38 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

You win my fav.

I haven't read this yet, and I don't you, but you win my fav. :yay:

... I might still decide to remove it later, but the point still stands that right now you have my fav. ^_^; :twilightblush:

#39 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

Just listening to the Still Alive song for the entire time I've been reading the series-thing..

#40 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

Who's the art by? :rainbowderp:

#41 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

... This is awesome.  Nough said.  I mean srsly.  this is awesome... After all the crappy featured box fics... I get this sequel not by Penstroke I hoped it would awesome, it is awesome.  You have done a great job creating this sequel and I wish you the best of luck

#42 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

chapter 2 is better thin i thot it wood be.:twilightsmile:

#43 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

>>2707808

The image is a mash-up of various artworks that I put together in Photoshop. I created the title, which uses the same font as the Aperture Science logo. Likewise, chapter numbers use the same font as test chamber numbers, and chapter titles use the font of the "Laboratories" part of the logo.

The image of Chell is the same that was used for the original story, which can be found here. I modified her cutie-mark to be a portal and replaced the companion cube with Wheatly. I can't remember where I got the image of him.

I found Alicorn GLaDOS here, which is also the source of my Avatar, and my head(f)anon idea of what she looks like.

I chose not to disclose the source of the background yet. You'll see why in a few chapters.

#44 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

>>2707822

Thank you. That means a lot to me. :twilightsmile:

#45 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 15h ago · · ·

YES YES YES YES!!!!! No romance but still YES!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

#46 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 14h ago · 1 · ·

We are intrigued. We shall continue reading.

#47 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 14h ago · · ·

Another author attempting to ride the coattails of Pen Stroke...  At least it isn't another Nyx story, I suppose.  And, it seems you're succeeding so far.  Welp, good luck.

#48 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 14h ago · · ·

is the owner of the corrupted turret  the rat man that hide it Aperteure ?

#49 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 13h ago · · ·

>>2708144

Ratman died in Lab Rat, remember? That is a cool idea, but I'm trying to stick with the canon of the Portal universe (at least until the point where the duct-taped portal gun malfunctioned). :derpytongue2:

#50 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 13h ago · · ·

>>2708174 ya how did he get the tape? lol

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