Well done! A great finish to a great story... is it over? If not, then YAY!

Encore!

Commence read.

I like the interactions between the two, how she encouraged him and herself to continue.
Sadly it has come to an end. Though, what now?

> Goes to bed early so that he can write more
> Wakes up
> Golden Harvest Updated.
> Fuck writing, commence reading.

Ah... virgin nerves. They're so cute on Spike!

A very nice ending, but I hope it continues.

Well now, I was beginning to think she was gonna have to drag him to bed by his schlong! Good job Spike!

Oh, I did see one error though that NEEDS to be corrected!
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As good as this story was, and as well written as it is, I feel it deserves to be continued. There is a story here that needs to be told, and I feel you could really turn this into one hell of a story.

Please continue there is so much you can do with this story and i did not like the ending.

Please continue this story. Its so very well written and deserves at least another chapter or five. Be reguards.

Remember when I said that wouldn’t disappoint me? I was wrong.
Don’t get me wrong. You did a great job with Spike being a clumsy gentleman, but a gentleman nonetheless. And even though I usually avoid and HATE Background character’s Main stories, you did an excellent job building Carrot Top’s character. She was interesting, funny and very adorable. And I have to say, this was one of the longest yet well executed foreplay scenes I’ve ever read on a fanfic. I’m still surprised about it.
So why was the ending a letdown? Because you have a “Roamnce” label on the title. And you did a very good job building up an atmosphere for such romance to bloom. Yet, I can’t find any Romance, nor Love what so ever on this chapter. Even though Carrot Top did gave Spike a lot of compliments about how she appreciates him and stuff; In the end you never made it clear if she’s in love or has a romantic interest in Spike. Spike has the same problem. At one point you made it sound as if they were having sex out of pure physic attraction. And the main reason why this bothers me so much, it’s because the romance could have been easily brought into the dialogue by one simple question: Why?
Through the whole chapter I was expecting Spike to ask Carrot “Why?” And that’s the lone biggest problem with this ending. If Spike is such a gentleman, and Carrot Top is such a well known and dear friend of him, and he is scared that the events of the night might destroy his friendship with her… Then ask her for her motives or reasons for wanting to have sex with him all of a sudden, would the first, most logical thing to do, Right?
I could easily talk about this for hours, but the job is done and (as you can surely see by now) my grammar is not that good anyway.
So… Was this a bad ending? Of course not. Mediocre? No way. Disappointing? Yes, yes it was.
But it still had all the elements that made this story so good. The characters are lovable, the story is very interesting, and the deep and detailed narration was wonderful. The sex scene was also good. But then again, it would have been a lot better if you made it clear that they love or have a love interest for each other.
Even so it was a good story and I have a lot of fun reading it.

Are you trying to seduce me, Mrs. Robinson?

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Ah man, I'm sorry. You're right to feel disappointed if you feel that way, though. I mean, I personally don't think I did too bad, but ya gotta understand. When I went into this, I planned on showing the blossoming point of a real relationship between these two characters. I suppose I put too much focus into it and lost track as to how it would come off to the reader as well as the logical "why" you brought up

Still, I'm glad it made for an alright read. Defying expectations is just in my nature, I guess

1894540 So you are done? It is a good ending (which are hard to find) but this story needs MOAR, and I don't even like that.

Good ending, good build, not enough love. The way it is they could be a couple of false love. Or real, but incompatible love. We haven't seen enough yet.

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Dont be so hard on youself. As I say, the ending wasn't bad by any means. You just fogot to add romance to the mix, that's all.
It could have been a hell of a lot worse. I've read wonderfull stories with endings that are so bad, that the only thing I can think of when I'm done reading them, is asking to myself what kind of drugs was the author somking when he decided to f%k#! up his own story so bad.

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*tugs collar and chuckles nervously*
Uhh, yeah, I'd hate for that to happen

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And yes, this is the end of the story as I've written it. There will be no more added to The Golden Harvest, as the idea is finished.

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Yes. But that didn't happen. And even though the ending was a bit unsatisfactory you did manage to deliver us some really good stuff, like I said in previous comments.
And I'm sure, your skills will only get better.

Any chance of an epilogue?

1895786 Totally! They need to have sex at least a dozen more times for it to be real love! *Since that is apparently all there is to love these days in the real world*

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Buildup is like foreplay to me. There has to be PLENTY before I'm satisfied

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Huh, gubahwha?
*COUGH*

I need a choking picture. If that is all there is to love then it really is a choice for me.

1901466 The bulk of relationships I have observed tend to be physically-based. They also don't last very long. Less than 2 years on average. But then, they're just humans. And eventually humans realize that they are terrible creatures!

Now, if it's a pony and dragon... well, who could get tired of that?

Whoosh, that was brilliant! Much better than what I can come up with.

1898020 Dude, any time I read your comments, I imagine a very deep voice to match the picture.
Very good story! I like how it wasn't just clop clop clop, but that there was a story woven into it. It really separates it from the other crap!

1906327 I'm going to take that as a compliment.

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Why couldn't we all have been so lucky as Spike? Damn you Spike! Damn you and your ability to loose it to a cougar!!!

my dick has assploded into a puddle oF blood and seamen, LIKE LITERLLY ASSPLODED..KABOOM.......its that DAMN GOOD, READ AT YOUR OWN EXPENSE OF LOOSING YOUR MANHOOD TO THIS AWESOME STORY.

1913681 Uhh, Well alright, then.

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Well written, very sweet and tender, and I'm so sorry you have to get comments like that on a story like this.

Have some choice insults to brighten your day.

Fucknuckle. Dicksneeze. Man-boy-love-child. Cockholster, as in, "Shut your damn cockholster!". Omniloathe. Anethemalice.

this was a great story to read well done I'll be waiting for the next story that you'll release.

Nicely done. Now there not just friends, but friend with benefits.

Nice story ! Loved Carrot Top here, gotta follow you now

I wish there was more love like in the rarity and twilight fics something more than just a one night stand
The writing was pretty good but the inner monologue got confusing next time use (') instead of (") for stuff the characters were 'thinking'
All in all it was an engaging story

Also more of spike sweet talking the mares spike is a gentlecolt that gets all the mares ;)

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Unless "thought" follows, those are actually spoken aloud. Except for the engage in chapter 2, which are intentionally misleading thoughts. Sorry for that

>As he stares into her eyes, however, he notices them drawing closer slowly.
Random tense change

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Idunnowhatyou'retalkingaboutman

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Yup, that's what I call a feel good vanilla.
It flows like a summer breeze, gentle and refreshing.
Lovely.

Since she BFF's with Derpy, that makes her derp adjacent!

Chapter four, now.

He had seen plenty of mares forbidden parts before, practically every day, even.

Spike, you got to lay off the porn.

Finally spike shipping with somepony other than that user Rarity.

faved and saved!

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I think that line is a reference to the fact that ponies don't wear clothes

Very good. I like this background character too XD

I enjoyed it and it was nice to see some simple vanilla tenderness every once is a while. It was a very nice read. Thanks for writing this.

Spike you DA Dragon!

Well that was some sweet and tender loving right there!
I like it.
Though Spike should have sampled her private orchard

That was so fluffy and good. I love the way you write.

2837082 I think he was just making a joke xD

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I know that's why I made a serious comment and...

wait where was I going with this