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Sorcery!
That is now obsolete...

Edit: Now that i've read this, interesting. Tracking/faving and we shall se how this might turn out :moustache:

looks promising.
could be a bit longer, but maybe its only a prolouge.
let's see whats coming.

tracking

Well, this ship didn't take long at all.:pinkiehappy: Congradulations.

1687135 Hey im the co-Author of the fic. Yes it's just the prolouge of the fic so there WILL be more and longer chapters to it.:twilightsmile:

It's funny because I was just talking about how long it be before someone makes a Babs x Spike fic. Looks like you won. :scootangel:

As for Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara trying to humiliate Spike. Well he's been put in a fruity outfit by Rarity, he got his ass kicked by Diamond dogs, Rarity dumped him a trash can, he has fallen off ladders multiple times, he was forced to play the role of a bull in the Iron Pony competition and he was hazed by teenage dragons. There ain't much they could do to him.

i.imgur.com/rXNIt.jpg

"Meh, it's a living."

Wow only been three days and there is already A Spike X Babs fic up.:pinkiegasp:

You sir get A :yay: for thinking of one.

P.S. Spike get's all them bitches!:pinkiecrazy:

Wow, didn't expect to see something like this...:rainbowhuh: Guess I underestimate the romance varieties in the fandom.

I can't believe this is only the 2nd fic on the site with a character tag for Babs... I'm planning on writing one that's a darkfic...:pinkiecrazy:

Well, can't say didn't see this coming? Or should've, but I didn't. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Derpy_Hooves.png Lemme guess: this was inspired by a NSFW pic that recently came out of these two? At least, my assumption anyways. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Spike_lolface.png

Anyway, not a bad start, few errors here and there I spotted, but easy to find perhaps. I do wonder about Spike's time with the Crusaders, even though there's plenty we don't see behind the scenes, so guessing this is under that assumption; even though in the episode, the CMC (before Babs joined) did say they were its only members. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png Well, curious how Spike'll handle supposed crush on Babs, while he's still in love(?) with Rarity. Tracked to see where it goes!

AND THE AWARD, FOR FIRST BABS SEED MATURE FIC GOES TO...SHADOWMAGE!!!

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Actually, no. Not inspired by anything but my wish to see Spike shipped with many other ponies that he has not been shipped with, and the episode itself of course. Though, I was unaware of any NSFW pic of them. I shall have to go on a picture hunt, or if you could pm me a link i would be truly grateful. :raritystarry:

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I still have yet to get to the mature scenes, but I thank you. :rainbowkiss:

Thank you all. I shall get onto writing and hopefully i can make the chapters go a bit longer.

1693182 I would also like that link, if you don't mind.

1693313 Damn it, now I need an insulin shot.

1687940 Yeah Spike can sure put up with a lot of crap can't he?

1694323

Oh here *hands insulin shot*
With ponies around every corner of the internet I advise you to stockpile these like I do

1699579 I did. You would not believe how much I go through. Unfortunately, I love the CMC and their adorableness. This past episode cleaned me out. Confounded fillies.

1699607 Yeah, and now I look like a heroine addict. :applecry::scootangel::unsuresweetie:

1699625 Don't worry if you're ever mistaken for one, just explain and people will know what happened

thi looks prety promiing

This interests me to the fullest extent. I can expect great things from this most likely :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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Okay, to save the onslaught of possible future askings (not that I've gotten more than you and the other 2 above so far), I'm just gonna edit reply up above after this and post the link in. Though maybe I should remove it altogether, as I've been proven wrong well by this point. :twilightblush: Note: it's kinda anthro though and may not be best depiction of anatomy, but still enjoyable. As it's I guess the first Spike/Babs Seed pic, possibly, at least from someone in the US (not sure when it's been released in rest of the world that gets it, but know Japan usually airs shows first).

And also, Derpy (though I prefer to call her Ditzy) mixed with Hypno-Toad eyes? :twilightoops: That's... hella creepy, but oddly somewhat alluring too.

Not sure I'm getting the whole "Love at First Sight" angle between Babs and Spike, seeing as it's a bit cliche and unnatural to my eyes. I say unnatural because in this story I would've liked to have seen a bit more development, because Spike already fell for Rarity at first sight, so even if he did fall for Babs just like Rarity, there'd have to be some sort of conflict in that situation just to make it somewhat interesting. Also, I hope its explained why Babs moved to Ponyville later on as well.

I see some potential, seeing as this is a somewhat unique ship and all, but this start is kinda rough. You might wanna really think about where you're heading and what's up ahead to make this story worth reading.

Just my two cents.

Dis is gonna be good! I love this ship!

A good start, to which I must have :flutterrage: more!!!

Comment posted by OmegaMajora99 deleted Feb 25th, 2013

My body is ready for more chapters of this. :moustache:

:scootangel: Oooo i wonder what'll happen next. Wait....I'm the writer.....well hell.

:raritystarry: *hint hint*

First. :yay:

I hate when Spike is lovesick over Rarity.:facehoof: If he hasn't gotten an answer yet he should move on.

I want to like this story, but the execution is so lazy and careless that it's struggling to hold my attention. A basic check for spelling and grammar would have taken you fifteen minutes and made this story leagues better.

Also you're using telling where showing would be far more appropriate — for example:

Babs took the answer and asked nothing more, but [sic] still very interested in the dragon for reasons she couldn't put her hoof on.

That's kinda unimaginative. You're not showing us that she was interested and couldn't understand why through her thoughts, actions and behaviours. You're just declaring it to be so by fiat, because this is a shipping story and the ship must sail posthaste!

Also too, the dialogue is kinda tin-eared. That's a little trickier than sorting out simple grammar and spelling, and basic telling issues, but it can still be helped. This is why we read our stories out loud, in full, when we write them. That way, mistakes get picked up and you realise which bits of dialogue do not sound like they come from a human/talking magical pony mouth.

2386199 A appreciate your input. I shall endeavor to improve upon this. I am still inexperienced with actual writing, the only things i have done are short stories for English class, so dialog is somewhat difficult for me.
:unsuresweetie:
Would something like this would for that example?

Babs took the answer and asked nothing more, though she continued to stare at him for reasons she couldn't put her hoof on.

That update was a surprise, but still good. Missed a few caps and an "I" were it said

picking on somepony so stepped in

, should be a "I" between so and stepped.:twilightsmile:

Oh Spike, go for Babs, leave Rarity alone already.:facehoof:

An update! It's a Christmas miracle! Er, in April.

Yaaaaayyyyyyyy!!!!!!

You have caught my interest. In fact this is the first Spike/Apple Seed pairing I've seen. I think I'll see how this plays out.

Tracking

P.S. have a mustache:moustache:

2385897 This comment's hilarious. This is why I joined Fimfiction for the laughs. I do so look forward to your next installment.

I should right now say sorry to the author. I'm supposed to help him with his writing but i never talked to him plus i got other things as well. So again im sorry and hope to help you again in the future.

Not a bad start so far. So this is gonna be Spike/Babs? Was kinda hoping Spike would get with all 4 crusaders.

Bit rushed, but otherwise, nice pairing :pinkiehappy:

Damn the number of spelling mistakes. :facehoof:

Do you want me to proof-read this for you?

Spike is my 2nd favorite dragon of all time!

3386443 RED DRAGON ARCHFIEND FROM YUGIOH 5D'S!!!:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

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