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Void Chicken

Joined February 2012
513 followers

I wrote a horse story once.

Stories (6)

  • Three Hundred and Fifty
    The future has everything that any pony could ever want. Twilight Sparkle wants to go home.

    48,448 words · 12,760 views · 2,013 likes · 60 dislikes
  • Rainbownomicon
    Losing a friend is only tragic for those who don't know necromancy.
    3,621 words · 7,520 views · 1,247 likes · 37 dislikes
  • Stormy Nights
    The desert is a hard to place to grow up for a pegasus who loves the rain.
    8,704 words · 1,982 views · 164 likes · 4 dislikes
  • Stormy Nights 2: In the Clouds
    Stormy moves to a new town to find her destiny.
    7,159 words · 1,359 views · 117 likes · 3 dislikes
  • Stormy Nights 3: Darkened Skies
    10,722 words · 776 views · 109 likes · 5 dislikes
  • Ember and the Orb
    6,384 words · 392 views · 36 likes · 2 dislikes

Blog Posts (12)

Source

My name is Twilight Sparkle, and 350 years ago, Sweetie Belle and I vanished without a trace.

Now here we are, in the future.

Equestria has become a utopia, with everypony living in peace and harmony.

Everything is perfect. All a pony could ever want, and more.

My name is Twilight Sparkle, and I want to go home.

Editing provided by Stereo_Sub and JustAnotherTimeLord.

Cover art courtesy of Geomancing.

As seen on Equestria Daily.

First Published
27th Dec 2012
Last Modified
16th Mar 2013

Comments ( 1,879 )

#1 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 20h ago · 7 · ·

This.... actually seems like a great story. Will read now

Yup. Definitely a good story.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 20h ago · 34 · ·

Now this is what deserves to be in the featured box.

EDIT: Totally called it.

#3 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 20h ago · 1 · ·

>>1862476

If I had a dollar for every time I wanted to say that, but didn't because I would be saying it too often...

#4 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 20h ago · 18 · ·

Chapter 2 - Princess Celestia Fixes Everything

#5 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 18h ago · · ·

Twilight drug her aching feet through. dragged maybe?

Good chapter, I remember reading another where Sweetie Belle turned out to be a cyborg, but I don't remember what it was...well, anyways, when the part about the "clicker" came up, I thought of that. *sigh* memories... hope to see more of this later! :heart:

#6 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 18h ago · · ·

>>1862529

Well, with a box full of sequels, common crossovers and "My Little (Somepony)s"/"(Somepony)'s (somepony)" knockoffs, I don't think anyone would mind some fresh content.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 18h ago · 4 · ·

Nice!

I love it.

Nice writing, and although it's 6000 words, it feels short.

Can't find a grammatical error, which is refreshing.

The future is plausible, which I like.

The author's note and your humor also boost your rating.

Most future fics would just have a lazer that would zap Sweetie back to health.

You made a rational fix, which is good.

Rating:

:moustache::ajsmug:

Moustache-Applejack smug.

Comparison: 9.3/10.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 17h ago · 5 · ·

Well, this is really something. A story with pacing at the speed of light but actually pulls it off, and pulls it off well? As the first fic I picked out from the featured box in quite some time, I can definitely say that I am not disappointed. On to the next chapter!

#9 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 17h ago · · ·

>>1863143

From the feature box? What are you talking-- *checks*

Holy crap!

edit: Great I jinxed it.

#10 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 17h ago · · ·

Ah, fascinating chapter. Loved the idea of everypony having horns and wings through some sort of magic gem-things, and Twilight being Sweetie Belle's surrogate mother should definitely prove interesting as the story goes on. Definitely looking forward to more!

#11 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 15h ago · · ·

Does "everpony" include the other races? Are they at peace with the Changelings? :rainbowhuh:

#12 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 15h ago · · ·

I declare this story impossible unless someone changes the character tags.

#13 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

>>1863166 Heads up! Your story is now back in the box.

#14 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

This is awesome. One of the best I've read in a while. Can't wait until Twi meets Celestia...only Celstia isn't going to be Princess anymore, is she? Or maybe not remember Twi? I dunno...

this is great.

#15 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

did you know that the part that your summary gets cut off right after the line "I want to go home." So if you want to see the credits? no that doesn't sound right.....hmmmmm:trixieshiftleft: meh i think you know what i mean

#16 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

OH MAH GAWD I HIT THE THUMBS UP AND IT CHANGED FROM 43 TO 47 OH MAH GAWD :pinkiehappy:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 14h ago · 5 · ·

I was reading this story and taking everything very seriously (I mean, a filly's life is at stake! :unsuresweetie:).

Then I fell out of my chair laughing when I reached the author's note.

#18 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

This is kind of reminiscent of Millenium Wake. Hopefully that doesn't include the three-month-plus waits...

#19 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

Oh wow i want more.

#20 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

Great story!! words, sequence, conversations, EVERYTHING!!!

@I'm part mechanical now!!, made me laugh:twilightblush:

#21 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

Based on the description, I have seen this concept four times in this fandom. I have seen it literally dozens of times across books, movies, and television. I always read these stories, because it is one of the single, best setups I can imagine for a story. I'm going to read this right now, I'll let you know if it holds up.

[edit] Yup. Yup indeed (thus far). Tracked.

#22 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 14h ago · · ·

I like stories set into the future. More!

#23 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

??? When did one thumbs up equal 2?

85, i hit thumbs up, 87

WTH?!

Good story though, love it ^_^

"Yes, listen to your mother,"

"What?"

ROFLXD

#24 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · 6 · ·

And we now have Sweetie Bot, v0.001.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864222

*rolls eyes* because someone else thumbs up'd it.

#26 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864252 I know, i was joking.

#27 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864222 Because somebody else thumbed it up before you, so your thumb made it load that one. Seems like it'd be kinda obvious, but since this isn't the first comment like that on this fic alone.... *shrugs* I guess not :unsuresweetie:

From the description alone, it seems very similar to two fanfics I've read: Lost Time and, as >>1864020 mentioned before, Millennium Wake. I just hope I will not be disappoint by blatant similarities. Will read later to hopefully be proven wrong.

#28 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864277

I haven't read either of those, so any similarity will be purely coincidental, promise. :twilightsmile:

(Where's the happy Sweetie Belle emote I want a happy Sweetie Belle emote.)

#29 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864277 Like i said before, I KNOW!

#30 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · 11 · ·

Hello Celestia, it is I, Twilight Sparkle, your protege...  

Celestia spits out her tea... "But you vanished centuries ago?"

#31 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864277 "Lost Time" eh?

...

Dammit. Now I'm tracking another story that hasn't been updated in months...

#32 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864293 When I was reading comments I proceeded to skip a lot of them that didn't seem important, so.... That first one just caught my eye cause of similarities

>>1864290 We shall seeeeeeee..........

>>1864319 Take it! Take it and deeeaaaaaal with it! :trollestia:

#33 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

Originality. I love it.

Even if it wasn't in the feature box, I'll still read it.

Anyway, I've read both the prologue and chapter 1, and it's already good to me.

You have promising skills.:rainbowwild:

#34 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

:O Omgah, this is really good! To the next chapter!

#35 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 13h ago · 21 · ·

bullshit pinkie pie knows exactly when they will be back

#36 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1864410

You spoke too soon. I just saw this from said featured box.:twilightsmile:

#37 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

>>1864508

Funny how that happens.:rainbowwild:

I'm not surprised though. It's a really great read!

#38 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · 1 · ·

I listened to this idea of yours awhile ago and I've this to say:

I'm impressed :yay:

10/10 Mr. Void Chicken :twilightsmile:

#39 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

timey wimey wibbly wobbly

#40 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

You did well. In fact, you did so well that I'm going to write a special commendation for you in the "extra credit" section. Ooh, there's LOTS of room here!

this might take a while

either way,

#41 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · 6 · ·

Was the alternate title 'Tree Fiddy'?

Fascinating story. It lacks the menace of other time-travel scenarios I've seen so far, but it doesn't sound like it stays that way. They're probably trapped; maybe advanced magics are illegal? That one pony seemed flabbergasted by Twi's teleport spam.

#42 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · 7 · ·

And thus, Sweetie Bot was born! :unsuresweetie:

Great story. MOAR. :twilightsheepish:

#43 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · 1 · ·

THIS Is a neat idea! I WANT MOAR :flutterrage:

#44 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

part mare part machine all adorable!:pinkiehappy:

#45 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

Considering my father has exactly what Sweetie Bell has... and, as of last year, is now the proud owner of a new "ticker" himself, I could relate so incredibly well with this chapter. More so than alot of thigns that I read on this site.

I'll definitely be tracking this.

#46 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · 6 · ·

I wonder how Celestia and Luna has been holding up for the last 350 years.

#47 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 12h ago · · ·

This. Is. Amazing. No more words.

~Dess

#48 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 11h ago · · ·

Wow, this is amazing. Great story. At the rate this thing is going, we are going to have here perhaps one of the most popular stories on the site.

#49 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 11h ago · · ·

>>1864290 I REQUEST MORE INTERESTING CHAPTERS ON MY DESK ASAP if you don't mind :fluttershyouch::moustache:

#50 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 11h ago · · 3 ·

This sounds interesting. will read later.

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