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    Losing a friend is only tragic for those who don't know necromancy.
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    The desert is a hard to place to grow up for a pegasus who loves the rain.
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    Stormy moves to a new town to find her destiny.
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  • E Stormy Nights 3: Darkened Skies

    Stormy runs away from her past.
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    A filly seeks out an ancient treasure.
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  • 37w, 5d
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 2

    There was a blog post here.

    It's gone now.

    4 comments · 147 views
  • 37w, 6d
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 1

    Or: Void Got Bored and Made a Silly Blog Post

    As part of the "Void Procrastinates on Writing an Actual Story" series, I figured I'd ramble on a few ideas that I came up with, but never wrote for some reason or another.

    If any of my plucky readers want to take one of these and run with it, feel free. Non-plucky readers need not apply.

    A Thing I Never Got a Title for

    I'd been playing with time travel for a bit. I came up with Twilight inventing magic rocks that made portals, then modifying them to be temporal as well as spatial. Past that, it was in hindsight a pretty bog-standard plot where Twilight sees a disaster in the future, tries to prevent it, and ends up causing it. Yawn. Also my editor said the rock-portal thing had been done.

    Time for a Change

    Again with the time travel. In this one, one of Chrysalis's minions managed to snag That Time Spell from the show before they got loved out of Canterlot, then used it to get back into the Starswirl Library while everypony was celebrating and looted the place.

    From there, they find out that Starswirl had allegedly come up with a way to alter a timeline (to give the changelings a second go at invading Canterlot), but never wrote down enough details to duplicate it.

    The first attempt, at murdering Twimom before Shining was born, not only failed, but ended up tipping off Equestria of the changelings' existence. Isn't causality fun?

    From there, the minions use time magic to try to hunt down Starswirl in space and time, stopping at various points in history in their search.

    Thing is, I see changelings as being masters of emotional manipulation. And combined with the illusion power on a time that has no way of preparing themselves? Yeah that'll get mighty dark mighty quick.

    Eventually they find Starswirl, and I was always fuzzy on the exact ending. They decide for whatever reason to not alter the timeline, and to keep the future they know instead of breaking it.

    I got about 1000 words in before I decided I couldn't do a plot of that scope well. Shame, I thought the title was absolutely brilliant.

    I finally got the time travel plot out of me with 350.

    What Goes Squeak in the Night.

    Rainbow Dash tells a vampony story one night, spooking the crap out of AJ. The next day Applejack wakes up to find one of her pigs got his blood sucked.

    According to Twilight, the last vampony (created by Nightmare Moon) was killed centuries ago. Applejack suspects Rainbow Dash, but a close examination of her neck reveals nothing. RD does catch her ogling her neck, though.

    But the vampony targeted an animal and not a pony. A kind one, or with a thing for animals? AJ suspects Fluttershy, but doesn't want to confront her openly, despite FS showing no signs of a vampony's weaknesses.

    Applejack makes up a story about zombie rabbits to get to her to visit the farm at night (to lead her to a garlic patch):

    "Oh my. I hope you get those taken care of. I'd hate for something to happen to Angel."

    "That's why I'm here, sugar. To figure out what to do about the undead comin' round the farm."

    (I liked that line.)

    Rainbow notices AJ's sudden interest in vampones plus breathing on her neck earlier, and thinks that AJ is the vampony.

    The garlic doesn't affect FS. AJ decides to go to Rarity to source some silver jewelry. Rarity wants to know why AJ wants a necklace all of a sudden. AJ makes up something about wanting to look fancy. Rarity hears what she wants to hear, and AJ gets the full makeover, and also a mirror.

    The silver has no effect on poor FS. AJ walks away, but finds that Fluttershy indeed doesn't have a reflection.

    AJ decides that, well, Fluttershy is still her friend, vampony or no. Then Apple Bloom gets bit.

    Applejack storms to the spa (where TS, PP, Rarity, and FS are) and confronts Fluttershy. Fluttershy has no idea what AJ is talking about. Rarity points out that the mirror is enchanted to only show the pony looking at it. Helps with dressing, you see. AJ half-heartedly flips up Fluttershy's mane... and finds bite marks. FS is as surprised as anypony that she's a vampony. Twilight is ecstatic at the chance to study a real live vampony, and the ponies reluctantly volunteer themselves to be blood donors should FS need them. D'aww.

    Rainbow Dash then bursts in with a hammer and stake for some awkwardness.

    In the epilogue, it is revealed that the vampire was not Fluttershy. It was Angel.

    The entire plot hinged on Applejack telling lies and having secrets, which rubbed me the wrong way, Element of Honesty and all that. Then a particular Season 4 episode put the nail in that coffin. Pun totally intended.

    I ended up repurposing "main 6 is an undead" into Rainbownomicon.

    I've got one more, but that'll be another post; it's pretty long.

    1 comments · 133 views
  • 41w, 3d
    Void Takes a Long Time to Write Something Short

    It's been, what, close to a year?

    But like the title implies, I am back in business peddling my horse stories on the side of the metaphorical road. Or one horse story, at any rate. The point is, expect something new in the next few days.

    Rainbow Dash will die in the first scene. It's a comedy.

    Coming Soon: Rainbownomicon

    7 comments · 144 views
  • 66w, 1d
    A Big Story Gets a Little Editing

    A fine fellow by the name of JustAnotherTimeLord said a whole lot of critical words in a few chapters about my story, so I did what I usually do and conscripted him to edit it. (Naw, he offered to. But watch your backs.) He helped me tweak out a whole bunch of little things about it, like at least 300 things, maybe 340.  Besides some grammar derps, the scene at the end of A Tree in Canterlot got expanded to hopefully get Sweetie's reasoning across better, and I added a scene at the start of the epilogue. Maybe some other things I'm forgetting; the editing took a while.

    So give the story a re-read and see if it's improved for ya any.

    6 comments · 217 views
  • 84w, 5d
    Void Ruins His Story

    So yeah, the finale sucks. Worse yet, there's no way to improve it.

    The entire story was structured around Twilight going back and Sweetie staying. That can't be changed. Not without what amounts to a complete top-to-bottom rewrite.

    Sweetie goes back? The CMC lasting to help future-Sweetie? Wouldn't happen. Without that, there's no Apple Crisp, no Spot light, no troupe. The Sweetie-statue? Makes no sense.

    Twilight stays? I don't like the idea of Twilight never seeing her friends ever again and being miserable in a world she doesn't fit in for the rest of her life. Maybe that's just me.

    Celestia telling Twilight the truth instead? Completely ruins the tension. And why wouldn't Twilight tell her how once she got back, and Celestia relay that to Twi in the future? The 10 year delay becomes nonsensical.

    From what I see, my options are:

    1) Redo the finale somehow. Having one with the same outcome but still acceptable seems to be beyond my abilities as a writer. If it's possible at all.

    2) Dump the epilogue I have into the fic and be done with this damn thing.

    3) Accept the story premise as unworkable, delete the last chapter, and mark it Cancelled.

    29 comments · 426 views
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My name is Twilight Sparkle, and 350 years ago, Sweetie Belle and I vanished without a trace.

Now here we are, in the future.

Equestria has become a utopia, with everypony living in peace and harmony.

Everything is perfect. All a pony could ever want, and more.

My name is Twilight Sparkle, and I want to go home.

Editing provided by Stereo_Sub and JustAnotherTimeLord.

Cover art courtesy of Geomancing.

As seen on Equestria Daily.

First Published
27th Dec 2012
Last Modified
16th Mar 2013

This.... actually seems like a great story. Will read now

Yup. Definitely a good story.

Now this is what deserves to be in the featured box.

EDIT: Totally called it.

>>1862476

If I had a dollar for every time I wanted to say that, but didn't because I would be saying it too often...

Chapter 2 - Princess Celestia Fixes Everything

Twilight drug her aching feet through. dragged maybe?

Good chapter, I remember reading another where Sweetie Belle turned out to be a cyborg, but I don't remember what it was...well, anyways, when the part about the "clicker" came up, I thought of that. *sigh* memories... hope to see more of this later! :heart:

>>1862529

Well, with a box full of sequels, common crossovers and "My Little (Somepony)s"/"(Somepony)'s (somepony)" knockoffs, I don't think anyone would mind some fresh content.

Nice!

I love it.

Nice writing, and although it's 6000 words, it feels short.

Can't find a grammatical error, which is refreshing.

The future is plausible, which I like.

The author's note and your humor also boost your rating.

Most future fics would just have a lazer that would zap Sweetie back to health.

You made a rational fix, which is good.

Rating:

:moustache::ajsmug:

Moustache-Applejack smug.

Comparison: 9.3/10.

#8 · 96w, 6m ago · 5 · · Prologue ·

Well, this is really something. A story with pacing at the speed of light but actually pulls it off, and pulls it off well? As the first fic I picked out from the featured box in quite some time, I can definitely say that I am not disappointed. On to the next chapter!

>>1863143

From the feature box? What are you talking-- *checks*

Holy crap!

edit: Great I jinxed it.

Ah, fascinating chapter. Loved the idea of everypony having horns and wings through some sort of magic gem-things, and Twilight being Sweetie Belle's surrogate mother should definitely prove interesting as the story goes on. Definitely looking forward to more!

Does "everpony" include the other races? Are they at peace with the Changelings? :rainbowhuh:

I declare this story impossible unless someone changes the character tags.

>>1863166 Heads up! Your story is now back in the box.

This is awesome. One of the best I've read in a while. Can't wait until Twi meets Celestia...only Celstia isn't going to be Princess anymore, is she? Or maybe not remember Twi? I dunno...

this is great.

did you know that the part that your summary gets cut off right after the line "I want to go home." So if you want to see the credits? no that doesn't sound right.....hmmmmm:trixieshiftleft: meh i think you know what i mean

OH MAH GAWD I HIT THE THUMBS UP AND IT CHANGED FROM 43 TO 47 OH MAH GAWD :pinkiehappy:

#17 · 95w, 6d ago · 5 · · Prologue ·

I was reading this story and taking everything very seriously (I mean, a filly's life is at stake! :unsuresweetie:).

Then I fell out of my chair laughing when I reached the author's note.

This is kind of reminiscent of Millenium Wake. Hopefully that doesn't include the three-month-plus waits...

Oh wow i want more.

Great story!! words, sequence, conversations, EVERYTHING!!!

@I'm part mechanical now!!, made me laugh:twilightblush:

Based on the description, I have seen this concept four times in this fandom. I have seen it literally dozens of times across books, movies, and television. I always read these stories, because it is one of the single, best setups I can imagine for a story. I'm going to read this right now, I'll let you know if it holds up.

[edit] Yup. Yup indeed (thus far). Tracked.

I like stories set into the future. More!

??? When did one thumbs up equal 2?

85, i hit thumbs up, 87

WTH?!

Good story though, love it ^_^

"Yes, listen to your mother,"

"What?"

ROFLXD

And we now have Sweetie Bot, v0.001.

>>1864222

*rolls eyes* because someone else thumbs up'd it.

>>1864222 Because somebody else thumbed it up before you, so your thumb made it load that one. Seems like it'd be kinda obvious, but since this isn't the first comment like that on this fic alone.... *shrugs* I guess not :unsuresweetie:

From the description alone, it seems very similar to two fanfics I've read: Lost Time and, as >>1864020 mentioned before, Millennium Wake. I just hope I will not be disappoint by blatant similarities. Will read later to hopefully be proven wrong.

>>1864277

I haven't read either of those, so any similarity will be purely coincidental, promise. :twilightsmile:

(Where's the happy Sweetie Belle emote I want a happy Sweetie Belle emote.)

>>1864277 Like i said before, I KNOW!

Hello Celestia, it is I, Twilight Sparkle, your protege...  

Celestia spits out her tea... "But you vanished centuries ago?"

>>1864277 "Lost Time" eh?

...

Dammit. Now I'm tracking another story that hasn't been updated in months...

>>1864293 When I was reading comments I proceeded to skip a lot of them that didn't seem important, so.... That first one just caught my eye cause of similarities

>>1864290 We shall seeeeeeee..........

>>1864319 Take it! Take it and deeeaaaaaal with it! :trollestia:

Originality. I love it.

Even if it wasn't in the feature box, I'll still read it.

Anyway, I've read both the prologue and chapter 1, and it's already good to me.

You have promising skills.:rainbowwild:

#34 · 95w, 6d ago · · · Prologue ·

:O Omgah, this is really good! To the next chapter!

#35 · 95w, 6d ago · 21 · · Prologue ·

bullshit pinkie pie knows exactly when they will be back

>>1864410

You spoke too soon. I just saw this from said featured box.:twilightsmile:

>>1864508

Funny how that happens.:rainbowwild:

I'm not surprised though. It's a really great read!

I listened to this idea of yours awhile ago and I've this to say:

I'm impressed :yay:

10/10 Mr. Void Chicken :twilightsmile:

timey wimey wibbly wobbly

You did well. In fact, you did so well that I'm going to write a special commendation for you in the "extra credit" section. Ooh, there's LOTS of room here!

this might take a while

either way,

Was the alternate title 'Tree Fiddy'?

Fascinating story. It lacks the menace of other time-travel scenarios I've seen so far, but it doesn't sound like it stays that way. They're probably trapped; maybe advanced magics are illegal? That one pony seemed flabbergasted by Twi's teleport spam.

And thus, Sweetie Bot was born! :unsuresweetie:

Great story. MOAR. :twilightsheepish:

THIS Is a neat idea! I WANT MOAR :flutterrage:

part mare part machine all adorable!:pinkiehappy:

Considering my father has exactly what Sweetie Bell has... and, as of last year, is now the proud owner of a new "ticker" himself, I could relate so incredibly well with this chapter. More so than alot of thigns that I read on this site.

I'll definitely be tracking this.

I wonder how Celestia and Luna has been holding up for the last 350 years.

This. Is. Amazing. No more words.

~Dess

Wow, this is amazing. Great story. At the rate this thing is going, we are going to have here perhaps one of the most popular stories on the site.

>>1864290 I REQUEST MORE INTERESTING CHAPTERS ON MY DESK ASAP if you don't mind :fluttershyouch::moustache:

This sounds interesting. will read later.

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