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Waking up in an alternate universe in which you are a supervillain can be hard.

Finding out your friends are rebels trying to kill or overthrow you isn't very easy to deal with either.

But trying to solve the situation? That's a real horn cracker.

First Published
17th Oct 2012
Last Modified
24th Apr 2013

This premise is delightful!

Ok, You got me. That's a fave.

If this had been labeled dark, I'd leave. But it's not, so it should be something I can handle. It's interesting to see something like this that isn't too dark for me to handle.

Looks like it's gonna be a romp.

hmm, interesting concept.:rainbowhuh:  

Now, how are you going to make a pony who panics if a hair is out of place get through being thrown into a universe where everythings out of place.

I can't wait to find out.:ajsmug:

Oh... This is gonna be goodbaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad...:pinkiecrazy:

I'm conflicted on this. The premise seems like it could end up either really good or really nasty.

It almost seems like, say, the idea of a Reese's Peanut Butter Cup Hot Pocket.

And chapter one seems to have a lot of errors. Even in the first line, it says "Twilight Sparkle: Histories Greatest Monster" instead of "Twilight Sparkle: History's Greatest Monster".

So, I guess I gave a hesitant upvote and I'll see how it goes.

The execution (in my opinion at least) lives up to the promise of the premise!  It's an enjoyable and delightful read.  As much as I can judge based on the length available now, I'd say I like this story.

Love it! Eagerly awaiting more!

I_S

Very good, but i think you meant the night hid their numbers.

For some reason I have a sense that their nearest couple of plans for defeating her are going to be specifically things Canon Twilight can or has solved. You know, send an Ursa Minor, Parasprites, a broken dam...

Heh. Brilliant!

Can't wait for more.

Very good and I will follow, but could use an editing pass. most errors related to lack of apostrophes.

Ooh. I found an error: the chapter ended.

What's up with that?

>>1454551 Indeed! Good catch!

>>1454250 It will be a comedy piece formost, so, consider that.

>>1454185 Nothin like a insta fave!

You know, for a mare that's all about the power of friendship and how to spread good cheer, Twilight seems to know an awful lot on Evil Fortress Decorating 101. What has she been doing in her spare time? Very curious.

Yeah, great concept and looking forward to more!

Also, if you need a proofreader, I'd be happy to help out. Apparently, I'm halfway competent or something. Let me know!

>>1455538 Hell yeah, buddy! I'll shoot you the chapters for proofin, as always! I've fixed most of the typos people commented on so far, so did you notice any other glaring ones?

>>1455721

I noticed a few things when I read through it. Nothing too bad but still notable. Send me a PM with the link to your GDocs (if that's what you use) and I'll go through it again.

>>1455752

I was going to perform a routine error gripe, but I hope RTStephens here will correct them adequately.  There are quite a few.

Otherwise, the story has promise.  :twilightsmile:

I hope Twilight knows the Evil Overlord List and handels things accordingly which would give the resistance no chance to do anything against her.

(maybe she can cut out things like killing everypony and something like that) It also would be fun if she became the genre savvy Evil Overlord.

Very few stories excite me, and this is one of those few.  :pinkiehappy:

Interesting story, but you need to work on your possessives.  For example:

and to Rarities eternal shame even fewer unicorns,

"Rarities" should be "Rarity's".

The good old days of the Sisters rule seemed so far away

"Sisters" should be " Sisters' " (spaces for clarity). The apostrophe is after the second s because it's a plural possessive.

where the weak points were in a Special Oponyrations Magicians armor were.

"Magicians" should be "Magician's".  Also, one of those "were"s are extraneous.

Those aren't all the possessive issues, there are many more, but they should be easy to fix.

My two cents in the cleanup:

“Torture Made Uneasy", "Taxation and Tyranny - A How To Guide", and "Coping With The Urge To Monologue”.
You missed the inner quotation marks for the book titles - I think these are what you were going for.

Still, this is a very interesting premise, and hopefully all you need is a few prereaders/editors to make it awesome.

Okay. This could be fun.

Well...no, not fun per say, I guess.

You know what I mean. :rainbowwild:

Oho, this is gonna be interesting.:pinkiehappy:

I wonder what my alternate universe supervillain persona would be like. Or for that matter, everyone else's.

Twilight Sparkle: Evil Genius! MUHHAHAHAHAHAHA!'

Cue Dr. Evil music.

I haven't even read the story yet and I already blame Trixie for the situation.

>>1455752

Hm...i think i'll set a gdocs up. Should get back to you Thursday or so.

*reads fic*

*favs*

...

profit...

Excellent! I adore the concept of Alternate Universes, so I'm eating this story up like kibble. Definite Upvote and Favorite!

Though, this story begs the question that none of the other viewers have addressed: if Twilight is now in an alternate universe where she's an Evil Overlord... where did the original Evil Overlord Twilight go?

This, sir, is genius. My hats off to you.

Adorkable Twilight switching switching places with an evil mastermind Twilight!? Oh, YES! :pinkiegasp: :twilightsmile: :rainbowlaugh: :yay:

this idea. i like it very much so

Looks at title.

I have to see this.

Reads description.

I have to see this.

Looks at number of stories unread.

This might take a while...:pinkiesad2:

XD It's gonna be hilarious when she tries to ask Flutters what's goin on. :D

Take my upvote, track, and watch. :P

DIS GON BE GUD

Fluttershy smashed face first into an abbatoir? That sounds terrible. An abbatoir is a slaughterhouse. Maybe she crashed into an armoire? :fluttershysad:

Oh, this is going to be fun. =3

>>1457386 , >>1457418

Indeed... Unfortunately, I'd rather not see this go 'Dark' so maybe seeing the other side, the Evil Overlord Twilight stuck in Adorkable Twilight's universe, though potentially hilarious, could be problematic. Though, you could make her over the top, and still have fun with it. See her modifying the tree to have a lava moat?

Then where's the Evil Egghead...?

“ Torture Made Uneasy, Taxation and Tyranny - A How To Guide, and Coping With The Urge To Monologue”
That is a very long title

tunnel in an capture
I think you missedd a d

to Rarities eternal shame
Should be "Rarity's"

YES! Evil Twi for the win!

Espically an evil Twi who doesn´t know she´s an evil one but gets it after a half minute thinking and acts like it while actually helping her not-friend of another dimension.

Just a normal day for Twlight Sparkle. :rainbowlaugh:

Heil Lord Librarian, true and only leader of Equestria! Guide us to a future of knowledge and sience! We shall follow you and crush anypony who dares to steps into your way! :trollestia:

Can´t wait to see Twi trying to talk to Shy while making the others believe she´s torturing her. :pinkiehappy:

Or Dashie´s way too couragous plan with three thunderhead bulls epic fail cause this Twi seems much smarter/got more spells/Spell power in her horn/knows her friends aka the rebells better than this dimension evil Twi........uhm......could it be that the evil Twi is now in Twi´s normal dimension? :derpyderp1:

A bit sad though that Twi´s friends, though they´re probably never befriended her in this dimension, wants her dead and speaks so badly about her. :fluttercry:

Though Dashie´s remark about getting a date made me giggle. You kept them well in character for being rebels. Expect Shy where i was like "the actual fuck is going on here" but i guess we´ll hear soon the history of how Twi became supreme leader of Equestria and Shy such a badass fighter and Dash a pony who actually PLANS ahead!!! :pinkiecrazy:

“ Only when she is relaxed and secure can I truly destory her!

That should be destRoy not destOry. Still love the fic very much those small faults don´t hurt the reader fault much, so i can´t wait to see the next chapter coming up. :3

XD oh man this is awesome :D can't wait for the next chapter.

What's this, a "Twilight botches a spell and ends up in an AU" fanfic that has a plot I've never seen before?

:raritystarry:

Not bad, not bad, even if it features Trixie, whom I don't like (I know, I know, stones here)!

I really loved how you dotted the original humor with a little casual mocking of supervillain clichés - not too much, just enough. Just be careful, and don't let the "adventure" part take over the "comedy" part! Many an amusing story fell victim of the dreaded Cerebus-syndrome.

Oh, and... shouldn't it be "Lady Librarian"?

Pretty good. Quite a few typos and punctuation errors, but proofreaders(which I see you've gotten now) should fix that right up. So, I have some interesting questions/ideas...

1. How will Twilight dismantle her Evil Empire?

2. Better yet, if she doesn't, she needs to follow the Evil Overlord List to a 't' and become all-powerful. Insta-win, and would probably be HILARIOUS.:pinkiecrazy:

3. What happened to Evil Egghead? Is she now trapped in a happy-go-lucky land where she is a national hero?

I demand that this story gets fanart of Twilight wearing a monicle, just so we get a cover image. Get ot it, Deviantart!

Also, Trixie is best kissass.

>>1457830

>even if it features Trixie, whom I don't like

Same.

Too awesome and Too short.  Either make it less awesome or make it longer.

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