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  • T The Longest Night

    On the first night of Luna's banishment Celestia finds two alicorns in a crater.
    6,218 words · 17,146 views  ·  1,736  ·  28
  • T Tiger Bloom

    Applebloom finds herself in the Everfree with a guardian that may be more dangerous than the forest.
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  • T Velvet Sparkle and the Queen in Stone

    Myths and Birthrights side-story: Velvet Sparkle recounts her younger years in a nation north of Equestria and the events leading up to her becoming the mother of Shining Amour and Twilight Sparkle
    64,499 words · 2,109 views  ·  205  ·  5
  • T The Apple and the Fox

    Apple Bloom undergoes her final trial to become a shaman; capturing a spirit on her own.
    4,417 words · 1,231 views  ·  140  ·  6
  • T The Pacification of Crystal Valley

    Cadence rallies herself and her troops before a battle.
    1,303 words · 627 views  ·  120  ·  5
  • T A Dream of Pride and Envy

    The hidden history of the events leading up to the Long Winter is uncovered. A Myths and Birthrights story.
    27,662 words · 642 views  ·  98  ·  5 · gore
  • T Sins of the Ancients

    Adventure with Twilight finding her way home from another world.
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  • T March of the Marauder

    A young girl and her unicorn friend must use all of their wits, tricks, and tools to save their mothers. This just so happens to include a twelve metre tall war-machine from another world.
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  • 3w, 3d
    Halloween Art Blog

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  • 6w, 6d
    Big October Update

    Hey everyone,

    It's been some time since I updated people on where things stand with my stories, and my writing/self in general. The start of the month seems as good a time as any. I'll start with the more personal stuff and have each story afterwards in order of importance.

    The last couple months have been rough. My mother got sick at the onset of August and had emergency surgery. This was when I wrote The Pacification of Crystal Valley as a means of keeping focused on something other than the terrible, churning fear. While mum hasn't fully recovered yet, things have settled down on that front and things have a semblance of normality once more on the domestic front, at least. All the worry and upheaval has, naturally, had a debilitating effect on my writing. Coupled with a bout of the 'all my writing is terrible' blues, and I've made very little progress on any front until very recently.

    Which brings me to the actual information on the stories, oh, and There will be general plot direction spoilers for those who haven't read the original version of Myths. Just a warning. Those who read the old version before I really got into my Edit All The Things silliness, you know all this already. Unless you forgot it.

    Any ways...

    Myths and Birthrights has had the next chapter roughly figured out in terms of the scenes and what each should contain and convey, who'll be involved, and who wont. One of the things I've had beaten into me has been that my lack of focus is an issue. There are too many sub-plots and the story just leaps all over the place. So, what I did was sit down with my senior editor and we figured out just which plot-lines are important for the remainder of Book One.

    Twilight and Fleur de Lis are obvious. The events surrounding Trixie and Shyara tie nicely into what Twilight will be dealing with, so they will be getting page time. Ponyville is being moved to Book Two: Name To Be Decided, as it ties into Zebrica, Maatsheptra, and so-on. Where Fluttershy and Artemis were left off has a nice closing ring to it that leaves the door wide open for their arc to be picked up after the next few chapters. As for Zubu and Gilda, they are, to my great regret, being put aside much longer until Twilight and Fleur start to head towards the griffons. They will get, perhaps, a couple scenes during the twelve or more chapters of Book Two, but nothing more than me getting them ready for their arc to properly kick off.

    Tyr's sub-plot, for example, might be 'moved' to Queen in Stone, with what is happening in that story, it feels a fitting place for a lot of the resolution to the Tyr-Cadence-Celestia dynamic. At the same time, it sits wrong with me having the remainder of that arc in a side-story. A lot of people don't read them and focus only on Myths. That is okay, but it would leave them confused if Tyr and Tia have a scene in Book Two or Three where they are now bestest buddies with no hint of the tension that's been built in the first Book.

    There are the other sub-plots that some may remember, such as Shyara on the train with Rarity's mother, that have large question marks as to whether they will even happen any more. While I am attached to all the myriad plots and arcs that the original story possessed, I really have to get my priorities focused. Twilight and Fleur are meant to be the Protagonists, I need to focus on them far more than I have.

    Bonus is; more excuses to write sailing stuff! YAY! Cue the sail-tage!

    That's the... oh, never mind...

    And yes, there is a possibility of the Great Pegasus Hordes at long last being visited and explored, he typed thinking that line in the voice of John Green. But not in Myths. More on it below, in fact.

    Lastly, before I move on, I am going to attempt to write the remaining portion of Book One before publishing it. This will mean a delay, naturally, but will allow me to tie things together better. Knowing me, I'll get part way through Chapter 14 and go, 'I can't wait to share this glorious story any longer Honey Mead and Company! Time to post stuff!' But I will attempt to make an honest effort to hold myself back.

    Velvet Sparkle and the Queen in Stone is very, very close to getting its next chapter. Honey Mead and I have been hammering the mess I cobbled together under the pre-tense of 'Any progress is at least progress' and it is on the cusp of completion. But I may hold it over a few weeks while I get the next portion of Queen in Stone into a workable state. I have large chunks of the remainder of that story written and/or plotted out. There was a nice bit I am sure Honey Mead will tell me to cut I wrote last night for Part 10.

    My Muse has been rather focused on Queen in Stone since she came back from vacation. But I've said that before and she's thrown me curve balls. If everything goes the way I imagine and Calliope... continues doing what she is doing as she is a perfect being whom I worship (please, don't leave me!)... then, with luck, I'll continue plugging away at Queen in Stone over the fall and it will be done 'soon'. My current expectations after the next chapter is published is one of falling action, then the denouement, followed by the resolution. There may or may not be an epilogue.

    After Queen in Stone is done, Myths will have my (relatively) undivided attention.

    See, there are a couple projects that pop up on occasion in the back of my mind. One is the Fall of Marelantis, and the other about Sombra, and what he did during the Long Winter. The Sombra of Ioka is a character I've taken a rather liking too, and I'd like to explore him a bit more than I really can in Queen in Stone. This would be where the afore mentioned Great Pegasus Hordes would appear, much of the story taking place in their lands. That's all hypothetical, future ideas, and much like the one I had for the Rariad, may you rest in Story Heaven with all the other unformed ideas writers have, neither may see fruition. Someday I do need to get on with writing some original works, after all.

    But, I rather prefer the safety and comfort of writing about ponies. And you are all too nice to leave behind.

    That's the Big October Update,



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  • 14w, 4d
    The Pacification of Crystal Valley (Art)

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  • 21w, 21h
    Request for Pre-readers and a Question

    Hey everyone,

    I find myself in need of pre-readers once more. 11 is really close to being done, but hasn't been totally edited yet. I also keep tinkering with things. It could be posted this instant, but I want to give it another go-over in a few places. So, I'm opening it up to general viewing and comments. I'll be working on it tonight and tomorrow morning, with it posted sometime in the afternoon if all goes well. Remember, it is in flux still and stuff could and will change between now and the chapter being posted.

    (Usual caveat of me and plans applies)

    Myths Chapter 11   

    Next, I am thinking of adding a proper Foreward with character lists, sail chart, and what-not.  However, I still have the old Appendix chapter that can be re-posted with all it's many, many, many spoiler-ific comments. I could re-post that and thus prevent the dreaded "Aw, I thought there was a new chapter," response. So, choices are this:

    A: No Foreward/Character List

    B: Turn old Appendix with its comments into the Foreward/Character List.

    C: New Chapter (with New Chapter ping) for the Foreward/Character List.

    Darn it... There was something else... Can't recall now... Ah well, it will come to me...  

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  • 21w, 1d
    I'm in a book...

    As in me, the real me, is in a book written by a friend about his time in the Caribbean and voyage to England across the Atlantic with his family. I've not read the book, or spoken to Carl in years, so I'm not sure what he says about me or my family, or even how much we are in the book. We knew them in Trinidad when they were refitting Kra, and encountered each other in St. Vincent, Martinique, and St. Martin. I think I am missing an island along the way... Probably one of the ones out to kill me... Like Saba... I'm on to you Saba! You wont get me! *fist shake* Blake (Carl's eldest son) was a friend of my youngest brother, and they spoke for years after they went across the Atlantic and we continued westward towards Puerto Rico.  

    You can find his book over on Amazon (link down below). For the next few days it's free, apparently.

    The Backward Ark, by Carl Gedye

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  • ...

This story is a sequel to The Longest Night

As her twenty-first birthday dawns, Twilight Sparkle finds her simple life turned upside down. While her birthright forces itself into her life, Twilight also has to deal with the arrival of three Alicorns. No pony knows where they came from or what they want, and the Alicorns seem intent on keeping themselves and their purposes hidden. To uncover the truth, Twilight will set sail for distant, ancient lands with old and new friends.

Side-Stories: Velvet Sparkle and the Queen in Stone, The Apple and the Fox, A Dream of Pride and Envy, The Castle Canterlot, by Honey Mead

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Pre-readers/Editors: Honey Mead, WNA, Cerulean Voice

Cover art by Companda

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Comments Contain Spoilers

First Published
3rd Dec 2012
Last Modified
9th Aug 2014

keep up the good work:twilightsmile:

Hmm...Trixielion...Trixie...does this mean that The Great and Powerful Trixie will become a dragoon?

I'm guessing that the three OC alicorn fillies are from a parallel world.

That Sirius, being all sarcastic and witholding information from Twilight!:rainbowlaugh:

So we finally get to find out the identity of Twilight's real mother, and it's a doozy!

Please, don't let this be the end for Gilda!:fluttercry::raritydespair:

"N-no, I am f—" Shyara's voice faltered as she became aware of heading straight towards her.
Aware of WHAT heading straight towards her? Otherwise a great chapter. But will Talona come quietly when she sees Gilda fall? Does she have a choice? Dangit, cliffhanger

Gotta love me some worldbuilding. Little bit of history, a little bit of why Fluttershy and Dash are different fliers, little bit of Lion King...

"Nope!" the blue terror responded as she started to chase a meerkat and warthog that had been silently watching the trio pass.

Yea, I saw what you did there.

then loosing the glory of discovering Talona would be the least of her worries.

losing not loosing.

Can someone post a "Well that escalated Quickly" image too lazy to get one.

Peregrine sub-race of Pegasi

I do like this world building. Makes me wonder if there's going to be any earth or unicorn sub-races. With Shy as an Imperial Pegasi, I'm also curious to see if we're going to get any Raven Pegasi.

Oooo, and Twilight's mother shows up. I can't wait for that side-story.

"N-no, I am f—" Shyara's voice faltered as she became aware of heading straight towards her.

There's a word missing between of and heading I think

Ahead she could see her destination, Polaris, the Lodestar gentling sparkling as it slumbered.

Gently sparkling

28 view, yet 634 likes....impressive

It's safe to asume that Twilight's mother isn't a Titan, but is actually on the good side?


Most pegasi, especially background pegasi, are of the Raven variety. It's like a catch-all I'm using for those not specifically one of the other three. Though she's not in the story beyond a cameo, Derpy is a Kestrel Pegasi. In the lore for the setting part of her problem and clumsiness comes from her being a coastal pegasus living inland. Her wonky eyes don't help. :derpytongue2: This is almost entirely 'under-the-hood' details that wont ever really come to light or be of particular importance in the story itself, unlike Dash/Peregrine Pegasi and Fluttershy/Imperial Pegasi. It was just a little light-bulb moment while writing the Pegasi details and history in my setting file and researching the different types of bird wings.


Thank you. Corrections made. :twilightblush:

okay by betraying Gilda you just doomed your entire aerie. and that alicorn foal will not remain in your talons for long especially since you betrayed her benefactors to get her.

other than that Twilights mother seems nice enough so long as she remains repentant enough.


First of all I have to say I think you're getting better with each chapter, so keep up the good work!

I didn't see Twilight's mother coming... but that whole bit raises more questions than it answers. The first of which is, "can we trust her?" So many questions that need answering!! Ah well...

And as for the griffins, I'm sure they have a terrible past that's made them the way they are... I still want Tia and Lulu to go and get that alicorn child away from them! The griffins will make her into a weapon... they'll get their weapon. And the filly will be cheated out of her childhood. Of course I'm wondering if the filly might try to leave because the griffins cast out the two griffins that found her and named her. I know she hasn't seen that much of the world yet but she really liked 'em.

Anyways, looking forward to the next updates.

"You sure you're okay, darling?" Rarity asked for the tenth time. She'd been growing increasingly concerned by the twitch in the corner of Twilight's eye and how the alicorn constantly glanced towards the windows as if searching for an easy escape route.

Reminds me of my wedding:twilightblush:

She Who Shall Not Be Named

-just wow

I enjoyed reading this for the second (wait, or as it third) time.  I am throughly drawn into this story now, I envy your editors for being able to read it sooner...  wait a tick...

There are more to the griffons than meets the eye

They're like Transformers!  Though, I really want to see Gilda survive and return to kick some ass and save the filly.  Yeah, yeah, I know Gilda was a bitch, but the other gryphons are more bitches.

I'm sorry if I missed this or I'm just forgetting, but what was he deal with Fleur in the beginning? She's mentioned in the description and in the story but I completely forget what her significance was.


There's a story called "Within and Without". The griffins are still a bit of militaristic people, but they're much more... non-violent(?). It's the biggest deviation from standard savarage race I've seen so far...

>>>"A pegasus?" the officer sneered. "I hardly think bringing back one little meal is worthy of deserting your flock mates.">>>

Ok, they would freely eat the ponies.  That's strike 2 against them.

And they just abandon and kill their wounded.  You know, some of the worst nations the human race has ever produced don't even abandon or kill their own wounded soldiers, especially not with a family member watching.  This makes the griffons worse than humans.  That's right, WORSE THAN US!!!  

Strike 3, and now I prepare to exterminate them all.  None can stop the power of the Deux Ex Insert!  For I have all the powers.  Of everything.  :trollestia:

>>1826352 Fleur was originally visiting Ponyville to talk to Rarity after an argument with Fancy Pants.  Now she's a foal-sitter for the alicorn filly that Fluttershy found.

Hope that helps.:ajsmug:

>>1826726 Your Deus Ex Insert is no match for my Super Macguffin!:rainbowwild:

What? There are people who don't like the griffons? Why don't you hate the buffalo while you're at it?

durn injuns


Close. She (Fleur) offered to raise Tyr, but Celestia selected Cadance as Tyr's primary care-giver. Fleur does foal-sit on occasion, such as during chapter 5.

>>1826827  I have Falcon Punch, the Super Spirit Bomb, , Ultimate Shinging Finger, all three of the eye-thingies from Naruto plus 10-tailed beast hyper-sage mode, and the Hogyoku from Bleach.

When I sneeze, a galaxy asplodes!  

And I am this old...    .....

(Notice he didn't say anything.)


>>1826823 oooookay, that makes sense, and I guess there's still more to come, thanks!

>>1826944 Well, I have Nyx!  Even Super Kami Guru is helpless before her cuteness!:rainbowwild:

I also have Super Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann, which is so massive it can throw entire galaxies like frisbees!


This is a standard Griffon laugh;


>>1827013  Barney would know, since he's actually Doctor Horrible!  :pinkiegasp:

I wonder if the griffons will ever get a story in which they're not brutal, savage killers and devourers of ponies and zebra...

Though, "The Best of All Possible Worlds" has given them quite a bit more advanced society.  No pony-eating has gone on so far.  :yay:


Well the Griffons feature very heavily in the future, for obvious reasons. Maybe they'll get more depth (World-building, YAY!!).  But there have been lots of world building elements that have had to be left on the editing room floor. My 'Vault' file where I store such things is over 15k words long just from the first four chapters. Somehow, chapter 5 didn't have anything huge snipped. :twilightoops:

the under laying power
I think you mean "underlying"

Taking her queue
"Queue" is a line for an event or such; the word you want is "cue"

gowns similar to Twilights.
Forgot an apostrophe

trinkets and artefacts.
It's spelled "artifacts"

>>1827067  Too late!  They ate ponies and zebras!  THEY ALL MUST DIE!!  NO MERCY FOR PONY-EATERS!!  :flutterrage:

awesome chapter!:pinkiehappy:

i very nearly began laughing out loud when twilight's mother appeared and was named (which is bad; considering everyone else is sleeping), i find the fact that twi's mother was a merciless warlord bent on exterminating pony life very amusing. it's good to hear that she's generally not a cold heartless warlord, and that unique circumstances lead to that, similarly to NMM.

i don't like the gryphons, i know you've said to view them with an open mind, but seriously...

also; twilight and celestia/luna are cousins!:pinkiehappy:

Shyara is 85 years old, and still a foal? But Twilight is 21 years old, and an adult? It's looking more and more like the three new Alicorns are from a parallel reality. And I'm not sure if it was supposed to be clear about Iridia, but I didn't at all understand what she was on about, talking about people being mad when they discovered a simulacrum in her place. Enemies of her own creation? Who? These "Lodges"? I have no idea who they are, if the word "Lodges" was supposed to make it clear, it failed spectacularly for me. :unsuresweetie:

Either way, I can't wait for the next arc, or this side-story.


Well as one of the editors for this story I can say this about most of your questions...

As to the age thing... and feel free to correct me Tundara...

But because Twilight was 'Fostered' she grew at the age of a normal pony until she 'Awakend'. Since the others did not go through this process they grew at the standard rate of an Alicorn, i.e. very slowly.

So its time for someone to save Gilda's rear end and give her a boost a hand to ether get help from a old friend or save the Alicorn Filly (and get revenge for the death of her cousin and her almost death) OTHERWISE RIP Gilda and welcome the next Nightmare! :pinkiehappy: in all posbilites this seems awesome and you could even go past them and kick my rear end HOPE TO SEE MORE FORM YOU SOONER OR LATERS! :twilightsmile:

Gentle breeze guide you home, a warm smile to welcome your return. :twilightsmile:


Iridia, Luna/NMM, and Twilight are all very tightly intertwined. :twilightblush: Iridia's fall and Luna's descent into becoming NMM have the same origin actually. It's all very involved and in the back-story. Overtime details will come out. Likewise, why Celestia forgave Luna right away but still is harbouring a grudge against Iridia will be explained, even though the threat of NMM lasted *double checks notes* 8 years longer than Iridia's reign of terror. :twilightsmile:


The Lodges wasn't supposed to make it clear, but to lay ground-work. It simply wasn't the time in the story to go into super massive huge exposition and detail on Iridia's enemies and back-story. As it is I feel a bit like there was a bit too much of an exposition dump in chapter 5.

Ah, the ages of the foals. I'm torn about telling all the details and reasons why Shyara is 85 and still a filly, while Twilight is 21 and an adult. It's liable to be fully explained in the second arc, so for now I'll keep it under my cap, so to speak.

I guess all I can say is, awesome story so far:scootangel:

I hope Gilda isn't dead, though. Maybe you'll set her up as a 'ghost', terrorizing the griffon army as she tries to assassinate the general and steal back Talona. There are my hopes and dreams for you to crush as you see fit,:pinkiesad2:


yes, i did think it was a little strange how celestia was very hostile towards iridia while she had been very forgiving towards luna, you could say that it's their bond as sisters, but with beings of celestia's age i think that still qualifies as hypocrisy. will be interesting to hear her reasons.

and in case you didn't catch my edit, this makes twi and celestia/luna cousins, right?:raritystarry:


Mostly correct. I can't remember now if I had the details in any of the drafts of chapter 4 or 5 that had Celestia going into detail about fostering and it's effects.

Um, how do you do spoilers? test did that work? Yes it did! Alrighty, on with the spoilers!  Remember folks, as River would say!

For the first few years of an alicorn filly's life everything seems mostly normal. Until they reach around the age of 10, or when ponies get their Cutie Marks. At that point they plateau and get 'stuck', physically, emotionally, and mentally, until they get their mark. This leads to a whole slew of emotional and mental issues even after they Awakening and 'growing up'. Hence Celestia's comment in chapter 4 of 'This is why we foster our foals'. And that isn't even everything written in the back-ground and world-details about fostering and alicorn aging. Shyara isn't even the oldest foal. Tyr is 135 yo. Then there are... well, you'll learn about them soon enough. I'm not going to spoil everything.


Correct, Celestia and Luna are Twilight's cousins. Cadence is Twilights 1st cousin once removed. :twilightsmile:

The revelation that Iridia is Twilight's mother needs work. I actually passed it twice without noticing it so it definitely needs to stand out more. Also please don't inundate us with too many alicorn OCs. those should be used sparingly at best.

Ohhhh I think my heart jumped a bit in excitement when I read "Sure on this Shining Night." :raritystarry: Kudos for referencing that amazing song.

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