Equestria as we know it has vanished, and in it's place stands a barren wasteland. The ponies that survive live in fear for their lives, hiding in terror. Discord and Nightmare Moon rule the world in a state of everlasting darkness and chaos. The elements of harmony have disappeared, and Celestia has been banished to the moon for all eternity.
But, in this bleak world, a shining light stands out. This beacon of hope goes by the name of... Pipsqueak!
Pipsqueak and his friends find an unusual discovery in the Everfree forest, that takes them on the adventure of a life-time. The six must travel all across Equestria in search of their goal.
Will they find what they are searching for? Will Equestria ever be safe? And will Pipsqueak get the chance to finally kiss a mare? All these questions and more will be answered in...
Hearts of Ice and Souls of Fire!
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Nice idea, They're going to be HEROES!!!
I mean if they could find the lost elements like the older ponies did before and use them properly, then they can save the day.
Plus, I do wonder how Sweetie Belle and Applebloom are taken the news given that their older sisters are Element Bearrers.
Please do keep up the good work upon such a great idea like this one.
Oh, glad you guys like the idea.
Gah! I hate iPods! I tried to respond to a comment, and accidentally deleted it. (Sorry)
Responses: typos in the description? Where? I must fix this!
I know it sounds rushed, that's because it is. I wrote that section in fifteen minutes, just before I left for work. I don't have an editor/pre-reader ATM, so I'm relying on my own edits.
Heroes they shall be!
If anyone wishes to 'apply' for the job of editing, comment here or send me a PM.
Writing will be postponed as of the 19th of January, Cos I'm going to Japan for ten days!
That's all, keep watching for new updates
hearts of ice.......READING
Just fully read your intro I got to say I like how you did it instead of putting a short history then some dialouge you when full blown history and I want to assume quite a bit of dialog next chapter?However I'd think it would be amazingly well done if you did the story like this recalling history instead of a first/third person view.
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Ssshhhh don't spoil the surprise!
-SPOILERS-
The epilogue is going to be written like the prologue, recalling history styled.
Whilst it would be a cool way to write the story, I feel that it would ruin the way I want the story to play out. Mind you, I probably could go back, after I'm finished, and rewrite the story in this format. It sounds like a cool idea.
That's all!
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Oh ho ho, no no. Thats when I stop writing. For ten days at least. (Japan
Don't worry, I should have enough time between now and then to pump out the first part (only got 2000 words ATM)
It shall be done!!
WOOH
now i don't usually track story's, but when i do, there epic
can't hit the Track button hard enough
MOAR
129016 Hmmm i'm gonna foreshadow everything in this story.
Well, there you have it, chapter one!
As always, comments, critism, yadda yadda yadda.
Enjoy!
It's millennium. Millennia is plural.
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Oh, right. Thanks for that!
Eeeeeeeeeeee!!!
I love this.
For the record, your writing style is beautiful. And with regards to action: You don't need action to write a good story; many of the greatest books ever written are action-light.
Just a couple more technicals:
-Watch out for "your" vs. "you're" and "its" vs. "it's"
-That's a single 'g' and a double 'n' in "beginnings"
Also, if you're interested in a proofreader, I'll gladly apply for the position.
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Hey, thanks for reading.
I spelt stuff wrong? Imposibru!
Also, my writing I'd beautiful? That... That's the nicest thing anyone has ever said about me. Sure, I've had things like 'sub-par' and 'It's okay', but never beautiful. Thanks!
As for the pre-reader thing, I might just take you up on that offer. At the moment, I read and edit my own work, seeing ad most of my friends dislike my writing style, so a second opinion would be good. Don't expect anything too soon though, I'm still in Japan (and I have school( can't spend all my time writing when I've got year ten to do!)).
That is all!
Comment on thoughts, kgo!
YAY!
Ya still got it!
I'd recommend adding some sort of visual indication when you enter and exit those flashback sequences, though. And the whole "forgiving Scootaloo" thing seemed an itty bit... jumped over. Or brushed aside. Or something like that.
Keep up the good work!
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Thanks for reading!
I thought the italics were indication enough, but maybe not...
The whole 'forgiving Scootaloo' thing? Yeah, might want to hold onto that thought, got some hectic stuff comin' up.
>> Good work!
Ha! That was a funny joke.
Again, thanks for reading.
I would like to see more.
Well worth the wait my good man.
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It would have been readable sooner, but for some reason it wouldn't let me post the chapter.
I finished it at the beginning of the week, and yet it didnt upload 'til today, WHY?!
Thanks for reading!
Well.
This isn't going to be continued, will it?
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... seriously? Half a YEAR!?
Holy shit.
No, this will be continued, I just didn't realize anyone still cared. In fact, I've got a half finished chapter just sitting on my desktop.
I'll try and update it by tonight.
SORRY!
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And by tonight I mean Australian time.
1063900 I was just going through my Read later-list, when I found it. I haven't gotten around to read it yet, but I most probably will later on.
MOAR!!!!!!
1063900 ...? I thought you wanted to upload a new chapter?
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Well, unfortunately, I've been capped recently. I have the finished document on my laptop, but have had to use my phone for any kind of internet connection. See, when I get capped, my speed doesn't get shaped, it gets cut to less than a kb a second. I should be uncapped when I return home tomorrow.
Aaaaanyway, I'll upload it tomorrow, I promise.
1204535 Thanks.
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Sorry about that, the chapter was on unpublished for some reason.
If you see any problems, please tell me!
Yeah, you have no idea how much I love this story
Continue the good work
A great chapter but I must point out a minor mistake; when Pip gives out the blankets, you say "they all let out sighs and pulled the blanket in loser." Shouldn't that be "closer?"
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N-no way, they must be losers or something.
I would never spell something wrong!
Thanks for pointing that out
I must say, interesting storyline so far.
Do keep up the good work upon these next generation of heroes in the making.