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The freshest beats available any time, here. Also, the freshest ships and editing. Seriously, if you want me to edit something send me a PM. Please. I'm so bored. Also my favourite pone is Vinyl.

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A collaboration by Taranasaurus and SanityLost

Rarity has fallen ill and, to make matters worse, her parents have left for the weekend, leaving her to look after her younger sister and her friends.

Sweetie Belle, noticing that her sister is unwell, gathers her friends and hatches a plan to help rarity feel better.

The plan? Make her some breakfast!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 6 )

No likes/dislikes or comments? Looks like it's once more unto the breach for me! :pinkiehappy:

Not bad, but at a few points the CMC's dialog seemed a little too mature, namely when Scootaloo says "culinary adventures." This doesn't sound like something someone who can't even read would say. And that's another thing, I think all of the CMC can read. Still, it was enjoyable, but you kind of ruined the rest of the fic with the overtly long author's note. Tracking anyway.

I like it! Tracked

Seems pretty interesting. I like that this is slow paced and there is lots of detail. It seems like too many story's now-a-days want to start the story and end it that very instant. I'm gonna track this and see where this goes, i wonder if the CMC will do something right for once :unsuresweetie: And shrederman is right. the authors note at the end wasn't very necessary. Place that into a blog post or do it at the end of the last chapter.

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There, fixed that excessively long author's note.

I'll go through and re-read the dialogue soon, promise!

Also, thanks for reading!

question. I know I'm a little late, but is there an update to this one?

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