A man with only enough memory to recognize his new body is not his own is thrust into a new world with more power than he ever believes he wanted. He will need to get use to his new body, new customs, and new abilities as Fecto Elfilis.
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Kinda disappointed Elfilis declined her proposition, but I can see why... I think. I also liked how you played into the Kirby being love incarnate...
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There's too much to do! I don't want to disappoint anyone, but I don't know how in-detail I'll go when I get to those scenes. I could go absolutely off the walls with it, I made it Mature, but I don't want them to seem out of place with the more comedic tone of most of the chapters, you get me?
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Meh, it's not a big issue, I find that personally... to have it be something that is implied can be more entertaining than reading explicit scenes. I do like how Elfilis is wanting to take a step back from all the shenanigans in Canterlot... and I still love how he kidnapped Carina
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You CAN'T please everyone, that is literally impossible.
You should always write for your own enjoyment first, then ignore trash talking and griping, listen to the constructive criticism.
Last, if you wish to you could implement ideas from your readers.
I can't wait to read the next chapter when it comes out.
That in my mind is just too funny. Keep at it, good sir
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Just dont burn yourself out
Please tell me he planned to ditch Toby into the Hive. I can clearly see Shining sulking at Toby's growing reputation.
Well the train left the station and immediately jumped track to...I believe the changelings were season 2 end game if my memory isn't failing me. So with this they will basically be around the...whenever it was that Changelings went from looking like dark bug ponies to colorful bug ponies. Which I think was after Starlight Glimmer wasn't being evil. So yeah this train certainly has skipped some tracks. Well at least the future wedding will go off without an issue due to the most powerful source of positive emotions to ever exist being weaponized against the Changelings before they even have a chance to attack. ONWARD TOBY! SPREAD FRIENDSHIP AND LOVE UNTIL THE ENEMY SUBMITS! Which is basically what is gonna happen since Kirby's sheer ability to pump out friendliness, kindness and love is as endless as his stomach.
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I concur with this, an author who writes for fun is many times better
the dialogues are difficult to understand so I don't know who is talking and where to stop
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I usually mention the speaker by name right before or after their dialogue, or I try to imply it with context. Sorry if its a little unclear, but I don't want to go Twilight said, Rainbow said, Pinkie said, etc. That drives me crazy when I'm reading.
And now I'm getting odd looks on the bus from giggling at just how sideways this went.
Have to admit he can't be worse than Blueblood.
This actually makes sense.
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I love that idea 💡
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I really hope Chrysalis isn't evil for the sake of just being evil. It's such an old routine.
Well you lost me with using the dumb kind of changelings that had to change who they are just to fit it