A man with only enough memory to recognize his new body is not his own is thrust into a new world with more power than he ever believes he wanted. He will need to get use to his new body, new customs, and new abilities as Fecto Elfilis.
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This was fucking legit! And I loved the scene cuts!
LOL This put some pep back into my step.
If Lunas horseshoes hadnt taken out the Joker, then Batmans Dead Pan delivery wouldve Wok'd?
You keep on finding ways to make me laugh, I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Stay funny.
First of all, the chapter was great. Cutting between worlds for the portals was unexpected and neat, and yeah... Luna needed to be pushed, no matter how much it would hurt at first.
Second, I hope you're doing alright. Take time for yourself, if you can - don't let writing this get in the way of that, if it's putting too much pressure on you.
Very good on the action scene.
Most fight scenes either go one of two ways, they spend too much time going into excessive detail and the readers get bored. Or they don't give enough information and the fight just feels rushed.
This feels like you hit a good middle ground, you gave enough detail to give a clear impression of what was happening, but not so much that it dragged on.
But I do have one question. If luna's front legs went to DC, and her back legs to Skyrim, where did her horn go?
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I figured that her horn appearing somewhere was the least likely to get noticed, but maybe I'll bring it up later. Maybe it popped Pennywise's balloon.
Oki.just got to this chapter and I got to admit...the action part was better than half the story's on this site...gona keep reading to see more of this story.
that skyrim bit was awesome, lol