Featured baby! I know people get annoyed by authors pointing it out but I'm flying by the seat of my pants here and I only started this two days ago, so I'm going to do my own little happy dance and fail to fall asleep tonight.

Edit: or at the very least Im in the "Whats Hot" section. I dont know this website.

I'm thoroughly enjoying this story so far, bravo I'm looking forward to the next update

Hope Frontline appears more often as I found her interacts with Elfilis hilarious. BTW, would we get physical descriptions of the characters?

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Later, when she isn't covered head to toe in armor.

Por alguna razón, siento que lo más gracioso del fic van a ser las bromas aleatorias sobre el pene al descubierto del protagonista (espero seriamente que no me sea eliminado este comentario)

I really hope that this story will not end on chapter 10 with nothing (if anything, sorry for google translate)

Wait, so whatever is manifested in Elifilis' dream can be brought into the real realm with a proper method? I know Twilight and Pinkie would go crazy with this news.

Well congrats. You've managed to break me. Have a 9/10.

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My goal is complete. I'm glad people seem to be enjoying it.

not a bad story, for your first
you've got my interest thus far

I love how the Fimfiction is going so far, keep up the good work.

I mean, yeah, sure, HiE has always been the favoured genre here on FimFic, so it's not really a surprise when...

*Checks the author's account* Wait, you made it to the feature box on your first try? Alright, mares and gentlecolts, I think we've got a very good author in their rise to reign.

I'll be back later when it's tomorrow and I have taken the time to read your work. I really look forward to reading it.

Good chapter. I think you went a little fast with the "He is not like Sombraro," and; "I know he is your best friend."

They've known him for what, at this point 6 hours? 12 hours?

Thats one of the oddities that is this fandom. Characters wont fuck someone unless they have known them for a minimum of eight years because thats too fast, but they are instantly blood brothers and close friends after about half an hour.

Were a bunch of weirdos aren't we.

😎

Im liking the story so far.

Monk

"... You couldn't really sense who he was could you?"

"Oh no, not even if my life depended on it."

...

"You look good by the way." I was going to ignore the fact that she was not looking me in the eyes as she said that.

"Yeah thanks, whatever."

...

"... hehe, you made him tinkle."

"Don't be gross, I did not- Oh damn it."

It took me a minute to realize that it wasn't Luna taking to him.

"Shh, let me finish. We cannot force him to become a guardian of our subjects. That would make us no better than Starswirl." Celestia was happy to see Luna care so much about something, but this was something she would not bend on, sister or not.

It is good to see beardy boy get some scorn.

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I think old beardy is guilty of far worse things then forcing Celestia and Luna to become eternal guardians of ponys.

As much as I'm enjoying the story so far... I find some of the dialogue a bit hard to follow... When it rapidly transitions between characters who are talking without indicating who is saying which line. It's not impossible, just difficult at times.

On the plus side though, I find myself wanting to continue reading because the idea behind it all is quite an enjoyable one. Overall a good job on what I've read so far.

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I get better, but thanks for giving my story a read and commenting regardless.

I'm getting hooked :)