Derpy Hooves tells her story to her filly about her work in Canterlot in a Spa, how her eyes became the way they are today, and how she met her loving husband and dinkys caring father, Mystic Guard.
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Hello everypony! I'd like to thank you for reading the Prologue to my first Pony Story: A Story About Bubbles. Please, tell me about any mistakes, and why you love or hate my story and why. This is a story im writing for my birthday, coming up on 9/20. Thanks for reading and commenting, and ill see you in Equestria!
-Creation62 (Will)
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Well hello to you too!
Well, you wanted to hear about your possible mistakes. So here goes:
- I see grammar. Not much, but still a little.
- Other than that, your writing is pretty good! An interesting concept with limitless possibilities. I'm sure to stalk you!
And yeah, happy upcoming birthday! As a present, I'm offering a fav and a thumbs-up for you!
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I always wondered about Derpy's private life...
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Lil bit creepy. lil bit.
Hey guys! chapter 1 is out! i'm surprised how long it turned out to be... my original draft of this chapter was closer to 800 words. It is going to be a little less well edited for grammar, as i had some trouble getting it out of the gate. but i hope you like the update.
Next Chapter: Crossed Eyes, Broken Heart. Ominous!
Any by "its less well edited for grammar" i mean "No one else could edit it but me"
Woo! Chapter 3! Right, so far we've established what Derpy's Cutie mark is, what she did in Canterlot, and what caused her eyes to go the way they are.
Currently, its looking like its gonna be 6 chapters, though theres probably gonna be an epilogue. i know Chapters 1 and 2 were worse then the prologue, but don't worry, i feel confident about chapter 3 :3
See you tommorrow guys and gals!
I love your fanfic! Doing good
1306346 well, you have terrible taste XD
Guys, i am deeply sorry, but theres going to be a delay in the story uploads. Not only did i go home late, but i'm having a birthday dinner tonight. On top of that, i have a ton of homework to do. Normally, i would push on through, but i've been getting less and less sleep as time wears on, and i have 2 tests tomorrow i need to be prepared for.
Basically, the third chapter will probably be delayed a day. I don't want to put out terrible content. To help, since tommorrow is a friday, I will DOUBLE update if i cant get the one in today. Sorry again for the delay, and i really do hope i can pull it all out and finish my editing before i pass out tonight.
-Creation62 (Will)
That was pretty good. That's one shampoo I DON'T want in my eyes...... Unless I want to look like Derpy.
>>manperson well, i guess that is one thing you dont want. the GOOD news is that the new chapter will probably make it tonight! *Huge breath*...yay...
And i made it! Which sadly means no double update for you guys tomorrow. daw. i wanted my fingers to break :P
I probably made a few mistakes, as to be expected at this point :P
Also, i seem to have no dislikes yet. What is WRONG with you people? XD
Well done
..........Sorry, lost the seriousness
1314232 activate serious face
And there we go. my first dislike. i also accidently liked it, so its 7:1 right now :P
ok guys, due to reasons ill get into later, there wont be an update tonight. sorry :/
I'll double update tommorrow to make up for it. Ditzy's getting trained! oh, And her name change to derpy will probably come in very late in the story: i'm unsure at this point where exactly to fit it, but i've got several good ideas if i do say so myself :3
FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU FORGOT TO SAVE WORK.
One chapter today >.<
Double update tommorrow.
oh i did it AGAIN! GOD FU-... CURSE IT.
It doesn't help that im trying out a new editing style. Basically, i write out the dialogue, edit, write out all the descriptions and tidbits, edit, and publish. i know that its probably a terrible style, but it seemed to really help my content. of course, now i have a basic rough draft of something that was probably gonna be 1500 words. i hate fate.
I'm pretty sure im the human male Derpy Hooves
Well, now i'm tired, and i cant write anymore. i need sleep. I can't even promise a triple update tomorrow, that's 6-9 hours of solid work. i'm sorry guys, but i can't update today either. I feel really freaking stupid.
Did i mention this is my first time writing a full on story? Clearly i am doing a fantastic job. I am obvoiusly being very professional.
Seriously, this is me the past hour and a half.
Right, lets finish this up.
OH crud, i deleted it.
Alright, time to start all over...
Hey, this is turning out pretty good.
Oh for christs... AGAIN?
Thats it. i can't take this anymore.
I am officially in writers block.
I'm not gonna update for another day or so just so i can hammer everything out so its just better. in its current state, i wouldn't be comfortable releasing the new chapter to 6 year olds.
Why is Derpy SO HARD TO WRITE FOR
I did it! woo! Other good news is theres maybe 2 or 3 more chapters left before the end, although it could end up longer. stay tuned and welcome back
Haven't actually read the story yet and maybe I shouldn't because I'm getting icked out by the summary.
I'm assuming her husband and father are two different ponies right because the way you wrote that makes it sound like they're one and the same.
1360547 holy crud didn't notice that. thanks for pointing it out, fixed now.
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No problem.
All in a day's work.
Sorry guys, got sick and after i woke up feeling better, i had to work all day.
very good, I liked the "Avatar the last airbender" reference.
Not bad but for some reason the story reposts itself halfway through. You start where Ditzy is stunned at Sapphire being there and then the whole chapter begins again in mid sentence.
1397777 weird, im not seeing it, not in chapter 1 or 2. hm.
in other news, i feel like an idiot for not finishing this stupid thing off. the mean truth is i've been writing for pretty much 2 weeks straight now on papers and other storys and poems for school, so i've been absolutely pooped. (Translation: I've been doing a lot of work for school and i'm lazy)
I'll get the next (and probably last) chapter out saturday, or at the very least have a story i wrote for school about ponies up as consolation. Mah bad.
BROHOOF!
you know, it just figures i missed my mark. The final chapter is always the hardest, and i left myself too little time to be able to write at all. with what i've got right now, i'd be working well past midnight and the fact that i'm practically sleep deprived would destroy any resemblance to quality. i'm just gonna release it tommorrow so that it isn't horrible. Gah, from now on, single chapter stories.
well, i failed.
The good news is i finished a single chapter, 1200 word story, which you guys can read before anyone else here.
have fun!
... Right. So i threw out most of the newest chapter and starte dover today. the good news is i will have an update tommorrow... almost a month after the last one.
Yep.
i did it. good luck. part two coming in 2 days valve time.
Hooray! I've been hoping for an update for forever!!!!!
1534088 do not get me started on the horrible timing this story had. should have started it around now at the earliest. From now on, anything more then one chapter is going out the door completed
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Oh, I'm not saying you have bad timing, I'm just saying I was really wanting a new chapter and was getting impatient. Sorry, please forgive me?
1545900 daw, dont fluttershy me. she's too freaking cute to say no to.
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Ok. Still, sorry if that came off as mean or rude or butthole-ish.
1551203 Don't worry, i understood what you meant. I was going to make a halloween short one chapter story, but what i think i'm going to do is take the one hour challenge and make up a story and kick it out the door with an hour time limit. in fact, maybe ill record it and shorten it down to 5 minutes...
This seems like something that seems fun to do. remind me to do this.
Welp... That's it. Thank you Everypony for tuning in, it's been a blast. honestly, i think this last chapter is my least favorite, mostly because i'm terrible at writing endings.
I can't say i'm done with this universe forever, but i know it's not going to be my next story. Currently i'm debating whether i should have a Ponyville gang war, or a flat out full on battle, each substituting bullets for pies and death for tummy-aches. Not sure about the rating yet, but i like staying E.
Anyway, you can follow me on twitter (@Penguin_EMPORER) if you want updates, or if you want to message me directly that's the best way. I'll see you all later!
BROHOOF!
-Creation62 (Will)