EDIT: "Ch 0: Chaos" has been cut for not adding enough to the story and for being boring.

Versions of it are still available in the google doc for the curious

SO far so good, Im liking this already. I read the prologue entirely in "his" voice. :)

Looking forward to the rest.

Nice plot, and did Discord use his powers to bestow common sense? Seems legit.

I do Like this ^_^

tracking just to know what will you do with Pinkie.

Hmm... I gotta say, this looks quite interesting. Definitely gonna keep track of this!

let me get this..So discord "amplified" her elements? in a chaotic way ,huh

interesting

Great concept.

Great fic, but shouldn't this have an "alternate universe" tag?

>>12826091282609

Pinkie isn't until a few chapters in, look up "mania" if you're impatient though

>>12843441284344

Not really, it's a hypothetical that takes place sometime after season 2. I guess Ch. 0 takes place in season 2 episode 2, but it's not deviating from the the show in any, just filling a gap.

This is really interesting, can't wait to see where you take it!

Ohhhh dear...

...watching this.

Hmm... you had me at Discord, lets see what 'presents' he left behind. Funny I am doing the same thing in a story I am working on. It just makes too much sense that Discord would know he was going to lose and leave some bits behind before he as zapped.

Ha, this is awesome. Manic Twi, Brutally honest Jack, and now clingy Dash. Can't wait to see what is next!

I can't think of words to describe this, so I will give you my reactions:

It's looking good so far. Loved how brutally honest Applejack was. Keep up the good work!

That is all I will say about that chapter.

I can't wait for the others.

So tell me, why do you release a fic BEFORE the editor is done? Or to make it more WTF, before he has recieved the fic?

>>13500631350063

'cause my last editor wasn't punctual, and because I like attention?

Iwas sad when Project Saturation was canceled, but now I got this to read. Its all okay.

>>14658131465813

Never heard of it 'till you mentioned it, but thanks!

Hooray for update. Love me some Clingy Dash. Just glue yourself to AJ and you will be all set.

“Easy there, Clingy. Bad enough I agreed to hold your sweaty hand through half of Ponyville.”

“Yeah, no kidding!” Dash draped her arm over AJ’s shoulders as she agreed.

I believe that should be 'hoof' and 'foreleg', respectively.

>>15001491500149

Thanks for the note. Arm is a totally legitimate synonym for foreleg, I'm told, but the "hand" is a definite derp on my part- fixed

Spike, you're gonna have to fix this...

Clingy Dash is even better here than she was in the first draft.

Clingy Dash. New headcannon get.

(Mistake made on purpose)

Their all quite, quite mad. Hooray!

Poor little animals

"Too much of a good thing."

That saying applies perfectly to this fic.  I wonder how long before Spike finally writes to Celestia.  Probably after he sees all of the Mane 6 afflictions.

>>15357321535732

They're mostly fine, though their breath smells horrible.

>>15362061536206

I was going to reference a letter at the end of this chapter but I didn't want to bog it down - it shows up in the next one.

Oh, this cannot end well. Rarity...

Watch, Rarity will end up giving every single thing she owns to random ponies that she doesn't even know.

Looks like Fluttershy hasn't changed at all.

This story is amazing! You did a great job keeping the Mane 6 (or really mane 4) in character, even if their personalities are magnified!

Whoah. Your name is cleverpun, and mine is somethingclever. It's like we both couldn't think of anything clever, so we put something referencing that as our usernames, which in turn made the inability to think of something clever into something clever.

Oh god, Pinkie! Jesus, that's going to be horrible. I mean, Rarity's going to be one ball of wax, but an overdose of happiness, combined with Pinkie's natural predisposition towards physics-breaking...

My god, they're all going to die.

Great to see that you got this up on EQD.  Looking forward to future chapters.

Gratz on the EQD spot, dude. You've earned it.

Applejack! Applejack! Big Macintosh got caught stealing Twilight's Smartypants doll! He needs your advice!

STOP BREAKING THE LAW, PLOTHOLE!!!

Oh dear... Discord would be proud...

Rainbow Dash is now AJ's bitch, whether she wants one or not. xD

I think Applejack is confusing "Honesty" with "Bitch", also loyal RD is best RD.

“Well, that’s an unsettlin’ sentiment—almost as unsettlin’ as the way Dash is caressin’ my coat!” and that line is the reason I'm cleaning canada dry from my monitor and keyboard

huh. I while back, I had this exact same Idea.

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nah, it's cool. you've done this a lot better then I ever would.

I read the first four chapters.  It's just so amazing to see four of the six main ponies have their personalities magnified to ludicrous levels, just as their personalities went the opposite directions in Return of Harmony.  Twilight becomes more obsessed with studying; Applejack is the pony-equivalent of Simon Cowell and Gordon Ramsay: Brutally honest, almost to a fault; Rainbow is as much clingy to her friends as a gamer is to Call of Duty or World of Warcraft; and Fluttershy is putting too much of herself behind her friends' well-beings.  And, in the next two chapters, Pinkie Pie will probably laugh herself and others around her to death (hopefully, not literally, though), while Rarity would give everything in her shop to charity, even the stuff she might need to make a living, like dresses to make and sell, or food on the plate!

And Celestia watches from Canterlot, munching popcorn...

>>18292721829272 But the description says this is Discord's fault. Though that might still hold true (in a Narcissistic way).

  This is a great story so far, flanderizing their elements to the extreme. I'm worried how this affects Pinkie and Rarity. >>18307281830728's guess sounds accurate.

One of these magical virus's!?

Again!?

I better break out Rule Breaker just in case. . .

The Corrosive Creature of the Caustic Caverns?

I recommend a Jakobs shotgun. Or possibly a Maliwan SMG. Those are always good.

>>18307791830779 Trollestia has struck again!

And wonderful story. Rather than finding ways to overpower (like NMM) or reverse (like Discord 1st time), he's actually increasing their personalities.

And Clingdash is best Dash.

“Uhm, Twilight, why are you floatin’?”

“Oh, I got tired of walking everywhere. Too much work.” She didn’t bother to look up from her books as she answered.

Haha oh Twilight.

Nice, I like the first chapter. Will read the rest when I have time.

So, Discord used his powers to turn Applejack into a douchebag. Cool.

>>18307281830728

Applejack Ramsay may be the funniest image I've had in my head all day.

"This apple fritter is mushy and tasteless! This kitchen is disgusting! You're the worst chef I've ever met!"

It just hit me that this is like a humorous version of the Pony POV series.  Which is to say, this is awesome.

>>18487871848787

Heard of it, never read it. Glad you enjoyed it, though

First comparisons to Project Saturation, now Pony POV series, what will be next?

I really like what you've got going here. Especially what you did with Twilight and Rainbow. I think those two have had all the best lines so far.

“Finally I found one of you guys…

Some of you guys. Spike's there, too.

Yep, just as I feared as hinted in the previous chapter. Rainbow Dash does not f****** consider Spike to be her friend. This is not only hurtful (Spike's gonna have to come to terms with realizing one of his only friends for two years actually isn't his friend at all), but it contradicts continuity as established in Dragon Quest. Well, from the looks of it, this story certainly won't suffer much from another downvote.

>>18895781889578

Spike didn't find himself, though. AJ is the only new character at the time he says that.

>>18897751889775

Dash clings to AJ exclusively for chapters 3 and 4 cuz it's funny. Just because she doesn't offer Spike a hug doesn't mean they aren't friends.

>>18897981889798

“Finally, I found one of you guys… I’ve been feeling really lonely ever since I woke up.”

That's not Spike talking, that's Rainbow Dash. The previous paragraph described her actions and the paragraph with that line in it describes her thoughts. It wouldn't make any sense at all for Spike to have said that. So Dash just clung to AJ and completely ignored Spike.

As for funny, well ... there's already tons of AppleDash shipping (and friendshipping) everywhere, which makes this kind of commonplace. And Spike's a short, squishy guy, so picturing him getting snatched up and mercilessly huggled, with his stern expressions and wry comments, creates a far more hilarious image in my own head than what any of the ponies could possibly achieve. That's just my opinion, though, you do what works for you as long as you keep making this story awesome.

>>19108511910851

Derp you're right. That feeling when you forget details of the story you wrote...

Spike not having much impact and Rainbow Dash overfocusing on AJ are both problems my editors have pointed out. Hopefully chapters 6 and 7 will address said concerns.

Looking good and all, I'm gonna read more of this. But... bacon and sausages. Really? I think you might want to go for something a little bit less carnivore there

>>19154011915401

It's vegetarian bacon, which is totally a thing.

(Patiently waits for next chapter)

Fluttershy is best brain-washer... I guess?

Interesting.....

>>19390931939093

You're... going... to LISTEN TO ME!  

Fluttershy is so sneaky and manipulative.

Fluttershy would be one heck of a dictator.

Wait, did Pinkie just eat salami? As in, meat?

Wait wait wait wait wait wait wait wait wait.

The author approves of AppleDash? Or is that just my imagination screwing with me again?

the living blue ornament made the act several types of awkward

Oh, what a nice surprise. I thought this fic was dead. So Pinkie, is just more Pinkish? Okay then and Rarity giving away everything was expected.

MOAR! ( I realize this just went up today, and you probably won't be on to the next in a while ^^) I will be anxiously waiting! Hee Hee

Edible dynamite.

Why I love Pinkie Pie.

Annnnyway, this is hilarious! Their virtues going insane- though I must admit, I didn't see Flutterhy going all OCD coming. And clingy!Rainbow Dash is now the best thing ever. Besides extra-strength-crazy-hyperactive Pinkie Pie, of course.

What's with all the meat eating in this fic? Pinkie with the salami and twilight with bacon AND sausage... They shouldn't even be able to digest those things.

>>19392251939225 >>19395571939557

It's vegetarian bacon and meatless salami, which both totally exist. Since peeps keep asking I have added it to the author's notes.

>>19392401939240

I only ship for comedy.

...unless it's RariJack

>>19396131939613

Eh, works for me.

I like this story, but its just way too similar to Saddlesoap Opera's Pony Psychology Series, with the whole letting the virtues of the elements go too far.

>>19397271939727

This story has been compared to Project Saturation, the Pony POV series, and now the Pony Psychology series. What will be next

I've never watched the former or read the latter two, but I'm confident my execution and plotting differentiate my fic from them.

"There is no such thing as a new idea. It is impossible. We simply take a lot of old ideas and put them into a sort of mental kaleidoscope. We give them a turn and they make new and curious combinations. We keep on turning and making new combinations indefinitely; but they are the same old pieces of colored glass that have been in use through all the ages."--Mark Twain

"...practically perfect in every way."

Image: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mbsxr410PX1qgkq6mo1_500.png

I see what you did there...

I'm not sure how clingyness and loneliness relate to loyalty... I'll have to see

And man, AJ is a killer with that brutal honesty

Nope, still not seeing the connection between loyalty and feeling alone. AJ sure's putting the brutal in brutal honesty huh?

So funny, I want more. I don't normally read tragedies because they harsh my mellow but this one is funny.

Next thing you know, Rarity will be the ponified version of Death the Kid.

  Wow, Pinkie Pie's Attention span is at absurdly low levels Not to mention her IQ is at Patrick Star levels of idiocy. Definitely her element taken to ludicrous levels. We also see Fluttershy treating everypony else like they're toddlers. Rainbow Dash still being clinging and repeating what others say.  Poor Applejack is the only one of the Mane Six who's sane at this point.

  Now what has Rarity been up to...(Patiently waits for next chapter again)

>>19396131939613

You could also have it as soy products that the Griffins brought into Equestria to eat when ponies were around.

>>19399661939966

You do realize this is a comedy, not a tragedy, right?

Edible dynamite.

OH GOD NO! *explodes*

>>19395571939557

OBJECTION!

Horses HAVE eaten meat in the past, and WILL continue to do so!

Evidence!

O’Reilly said he was stunned to discover that mankind had known about meat-eating horses for at least four thousand years; that they had been known to consume nearly two dozen different types of protein, including human flesh, and that these episodes had occurred on every continent, including Antarctica.

“This wasn’t an odd example or two. This amounted to a hidden history of horses.”

TAKE THAT!

>>19403371940337

The tags say it's both.

>>19404741940474>>19403371940337

What kind of madman would use story tags as foreshadowing and/or misdirection?

Certainly not me...

>>19404741940474

It does indeed, but I'm 70% sure it was intended for good guys loosing (mane 6 remaining this way) than for an actual Tragedy, as in a character going from having a bad life, to a happy/content life and then back to sadness/misery/loneliness/etc...besides, the way this story is being told is more for laughs and thought about "too much of a good thing" than for feels.

>>19405601940560

Lol, indeed.

>>19407001940700

As I said, it is unusual for me to enjoy tragedy. That must mean this is an unusual tragedy.

Flavorful flakk! Sugary shrapnel! Masticate-able munitions! Tasty, uhm, TNT!

Comestible combustibles! Appetizing artillery!

“Pinkie, I told you not to eat food you found on the ground!” Fluttershy smacked the bearclaw out of Pinkie’s hoof.

The Cramps have a very important message for Pinkie.

Meatless salami?? what is this heresy?

love the story, keep up the great work. i hadn't realized it would become a tragedy later, i look forward