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Twilight has been living in a fantasy world; one with Discord in stone, one where everything appears to be peaceful. But fantasies can't last forever, and Twilight has to get accustomed to the new, twisted reality—even if it doesn't seem so real.

But there's no time to adapt when the clock is ticking. And when time runs out, everything that was real will never come back.

Featured On Equestria Daily February 5th, 2013

First Published
24th Jan 2013
Last Modified
31st Jan 2013
#1 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Oooh, new yip story?

I had an idea for a story like this once, and I bet there are other people with ideas like these as well. You managed to pull it off well and I hope for an update soon!

#4 · 97w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

I haven't finished reading it, but you keep using a ' instead of a " around quotes.

>>2080427 Yes, that's the "single quotation" style that some authors use. Some notable examples of its use include J.R.R. Tolkien, Aldous Huxley and many others.

Plus I just really like the look of single quotation marks

Your wording is a bit awkward in places, but I like where the story is going. I'm currently writing a similar story (with Chrysalis instead of Discord), so I'm glad to see I'm not the only one who enjoys exploring this kind of "what if".

Ah, now here is a Discord I want to kill...

*sharpens his Vorpal Sword*  He'd better hope he loses... I've never failed to execute the ones who won.

The narration is pretty straigthforward along with the dialogue, making me at least read faster and concentrate less on the plot. This is a feature shared by quite many new writers (me included), though. Foreshadowing, even in short stories, offers a handy tool for author to build up tension for the critical parts and make some twists and turns to the plot.

All and all I liked it, the main idea offering some intriguing options and possibilities for later chapters and even though I myself fancy more fics that try not to be like an authentic episode from the series itself, I get that it is a good way of building a fanfic. And this is a solid example of one - a good fanfic.  

In terms of percentages, (ex:10%) how close is the next chapter to this fanfic to being completed?

>>2132087 I've been busy with other real life things, so it's about 10% completed. I'm free for some time, though, so don't be surprised if it comes soon. I'm on an irregular schedule.

Are you planning on continuing this story any time soon?

>>3710134 I continuously have the need and then the lack of need to revilatize this by writing more and fixing up what's there. This will continue at some point, and I have resolutions for the new year to write more--expect more soon or months from now, all by lady chance's hand.

I'm other words, it will continue. At what point? I don't know.

>>3713439 Then why does it say cancelled?

>>4083910 I should change that. I am on an extended hiatus from that account, but I'm just checking in—I originally thought I was quitting the site, so I marked it cancelled. Thanks for noticing that so I can correct it.

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