I feel the urge to pressure you into writing a chapter where Twilight puts Bright Hoof through excruciating torture. And then have Amethyst return, though only as a friend.
Okay, finally, there's some background story to Star Bright. It isn't that original, but you managed to inspire dislike, disgust, maybe even hate. Though I still have to ask questions. First off - why didn't Twilight broke him? Amethyst Star told her about what she heard and what he did to her, didn't she? Maybe I underestimate her self-control, but the first moment he shows up again, I would've broke him. His legs, his spine, his skull, his neck, every little bone in his body. And for quite some time, I would've felt... like my actions were justified. She had a lot of self-control, she always had - but I can't imagine her being stupid enough not to see through that sort of blunt manipulation. Next one would be a minor irritation - why the heck did Amethyst Star took her necklace with her? And the second-most annoying thingy - Celestia is sort of a princess, isn't she? You imply there's a court she can't simply overpower. So there have to be laws she didn't create. So there has to be a whole government she doesn't have that much influence about. Then I have to ask: Why exactly is she important to Equestria? What exactly are her rights, boundaries and responsibilities? And who the buck thought that, exiling a whole family down to obviously innocent little fillies, is a good idea?
That actually makes me wonder if this setting you're about to create shouldn't be tagged as 'dark'.
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I can't help but ask but is that a good thing or a bad thing?
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Got'cha! And thank you
Alright, lets beat that stallion up. Wheres my flamethrower ?!
I feel the urge to pressure you into writing a chapter where Twilight puts Bright Hoof through excruciating torture.
And then have Amethyst return, though only as a friend.
Is it OK if I want to kill a Pony?
1869981 Yes... because I want to as well. However I think we'll be too late for that...
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Oh and to whoever pony wants to clear the town of fillyfoolers... you better think twice before doing something like that... Otherwise you'll have to deal with her...
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it is ok cuz i can't start to describe what i will do to anypony that dears hurt ether fluttershy or twilight.
Okay, finally, there's some background story to Star Bright. It isn't that original, but you managed to inspire dislike, disgust, maybe even hate. Though I still have to ask questions.
First off - why didn't Twilight broke him? Amethyst Star told her about what she heard and what he did to her, didn't she? Maybe I underestimate her self-control, but the first moment he shows up again, I would've broke him. His legs, his spine, his skull, his neck, every little bone in his body. And for quite some time, I would've felt... like my actions were justified. She had a lot of self-control, she always had - but I can't imagine her being stupid enough not to see through that sort of blunt manipulation.
Next one would be a minor irritation - why the heck did Amethyst Star took her necklace with her?
And the second-most annoying thingy - Celestia is sort of a princess, isn't she? You imply there's a court she can't simply overpower. So there have to be laws she didn't create. So there has to be a whole government she doesn't have that much influence about. Then I have to ask: Why exactly is she important to Equestria? What exactly are her rights, boundaries and responsibilities?
And who the buck thought that, exiling a whole family down to obviously innocent little fillies, is a good idea?
That actually makes me wonder if this setting you're about to create shouldn't be tagged as 'dark'.