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Every pony that's ever met Prince Blueblood knows he's a spoiled rich idiot who doesn't give a damn about anything but himself. But what nopony realizes is that his behavior is an act to throw them off the trail. When the sun sets and darkness falls, Prince Blueblood reveals his true identity as the protector of the night and defender of the innocent.
He's the goddamn Batmane
Cover image courtesy of Tiki Snakes from giantitp.com/forum
So yeah, this kinda just... happened. 27 hours from conception to completion. Once the initial idea took seed in my head it more or less wrote itself.
If any of you happen to be wondering where the rest of the Mane 6 are, Twilight was originally going to fill the Riddler part until I realized it was basically MADE for Trixie, and I envision Applejack as being the Poison Ivy of the group, but only for apple-related plants.
Finally, I promise that someday I will write another story that doesn't have Luna in it. But she's just so adorkably awesome, it's hard to fight off the temptation to put her in everything
Write it anyway. If a concept is strong enough, it can't be fully exhausted in a single 5000 word one-shot. I knew I couldn't be the only one to think of this idea, and it would be worth revisiting.
Fair enough, but if he thought he had to drive an interested party away from him because he was afraid of them getting too close don't you think he could be? Also, it's spelled "snooty"
Well, not to brag but I kinda just raised the bar, so now I guess you better knock it out of the buckin' park.
Seriously though, if you want a proofreader or just someone to bounce ideas off of send me a PM. This was just a random impulse I wrote to get it out of my head and now that it's gone I'd be happy to lend you a hand
>>1107087 It's more of a vigilante plot of a story (co-insiding). Other than that, our stories have no similarities (I'm assuming.). I'm not measuring mine up to any standards.
BTW: Just because you wrote a really good story, doesn't mean you 'raised the bar'.
My Little Dashie didn't raise the bar.
Past Sins didn't raise the bar.
Hands didn't raise the bar.
To be honest, the story, though entertaining, suffered from having too many elements jumbled together just for a pony to make a cameo. The plot lost its coherency along the way.
By the middle of the climax, I was wondering if it was a stage play or something that the mane six and Blueblood was participating in. The ending was also a little weak (and bizzare), considering that you seemed to have established that this an alternate universe Equestria where the mane six are criminals.
Of course, I'm also just probably being nitpickery here, so let's leave it at I did enjoy the story, though not as much as I thought I'd liked, given the premise.
The idea of terrible terrible one liners based around Rainbow's hypothetical freeze powers was a Batman and Robin reference because, well...
Yeah, I think this is because I wrote it too quickly. If I had taken a little more time with it and stretched it out instead of just cramming every idea I had in there it might have been a bit less wacky. Rarity was the only one I meant to imply was a career criminal. But right around the time Trixie/Riddler enters it's basically shed any coherent direction the narrative might have once had.
Cottage for Criminally Insane Animals?
and suddenly Angel Bunny makes sense.
Batman lines must be delivered with DKR throaty goodness. "This isn't...(deep breath) a game...!"
Of course, Rarity would be our favorite jewel crazy cat owning feline themed thief.
I thought, Pinkie and Trixie being yet more rogues would do it ...
But then Luna busts out Bane's darkness speech? oh man.
And then the giant diamonds and freezing? The CMCs had the right idea. Best not to even think about such foolishness.
No. I think I can make a kind of sense out of this.
Blueblood is genuinely, and always has been, fighting crime.
Rarity has found/worked out his "night job" and has decided that since he's not his public persona she'd like to try again.
Pinkie has decided to help Rarity's "date" go smoothly. She somehow found out about this scheme and has created a disguise and recruited the CMC to be an effective distraction (Because they're willing to go along with anything. She hasn't considered Child Safety laws because she's Pinkie Pie)
Trixie has gone a bit nutty since Ponyville and happened to attempt her first theft on the shiniest attraction in town at exactly the wrong moment.
Luna has found out about Blueblood's activities but hasn't quite grasped the concept (pretty obvious).
Anything I've missed?
Why do I find this somehow plausible? B-Blood stalking the streets and castle of Canterlot, protecting it from scum. Bringing terror to the hearts of criminals and kicking their flanks to next tuesday.
What's next? The Blue Blood Rises? Blueblood Begins? Supermac: Stallion of Steel?
I smell awesome. I smells like cinnamon buns.
Thanks to everyone coming here from EQD! I'm so excited to be on there!
It does, doesn't it? I thought I would have to strain to shoehorn characters into their different roles, but some of the fits make a disturbing amount of sense.
Applejack would have been Poison Ivy. But only for Apple-related plants.
Heh, this is very much a settled one-shot. I threw in as many different Batman references as I could , and I can't say I feel the desire to revisit the concept. If you wanna write a sequel though, go for it.
This is hardly my only story. Try Writing is Hard, which is probably closest to this in tone.
"Plothole..." "mannequine..." you're a clever wordsmith. Though I have to admit, I was kind of interested in seeing where this was going before it descended into farce. Don't get me wrong, it's quality farce. Still, I was enjoying taking it a little seriously while it lasted. It might be nice to see a more sober sequel, maybe following up on the Fluttershy line of inquiry.
I was going to write one too, but I was going to use
as the Equestrian Batman. Notice how i'm hiding the identity?
Yeah, i'm a jerk. Good story nonetheless, tracking. 
So much insanity in one fic... I've laughed so hart 
So Fluttershy is the warden of the Cottage for Criminally Insane Animals? Suddenly some of the pets of the mane six are making sense... Angel, Opal and Gummy... Fluttershy spreads the madness! 
Besides that... "Thwarting a robbery" in skin tight rubber/leathe suits? Kinky
I wish there was a whole series of those
You know you're doing something right when I start reading Batmane's lines in Kevin Conroy's voice.
You also know you're doing something right when I start laughing hysterically each time one of the villains is introduced.
Or when ‘thwart a robbery’ becomes an euphemism for that activity.
Or when ‘thwart a robbery’ actually was an euphemism for romantic meet-ups, even if they were lacking said activity.
Or...you know what, I'm gonna stop.
If I managed to invoke Kevin Conroy, then the earlier parts of my story exceeded my own expectations. That's certainly the Batman I was hoping to channel (and, if I'm being 100% honest, the best Batman, IMO) in that portion of the story.
But... what makes you thing their next meet up will be lacking in... robbery thwarting ?
Glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.
All of my I don't evens, and all of my yes.
So, anyway, you've established that Applejack would be an apple-themed version of Poison Ivy... did you ever decide what Batman villains Twilight, Rainbow Dash, or Fluttershy would be?
Wait... if Fluttershy's the head of the equivalent of Arkham... ...Hugo Strange, perhaps?
Also, I'm surprised this got on Equestria Daily, what with the running gag about no one caring about Trixie.
Well Twilight would have originally been the Riddler, obsessed with proving how smart she was to Celestia, but Trixie was a better fit. Rainbow Dash would have been Mr. Freeze, which is what the last scene with the CMC was suggesting.
Fluttershy I didn't plan anything out for beyond running the adorable critter version of Arkham. If I hadn't gone with that, then I would have had her develop a toxin that let everypony around her feel the way she felt all the time. So she basically would have been Scarecrow.
Even though Seth really likes Trixie, I doubt they choose what to post and what not to post based just on that.
I still wish the third Nolan film had starred the Riddler. Preferably played by David Tennant
Good catch, fixed now (belatedly)
I loved Dancing with Wolves, Thirteen Days, and Field of Dreams. But I think you need to look up Kevin Conroy's mad Batman cred
Heh, wonderful work.
Crime fighting in Equestria has to be one of the weirdest jobs for a pony to take. All those special talents ponies have inevitably lead to super powers which inevitably leads to delusions of grandeur which inevitably leads to shenanigans. Ponies at their finest!
You. Are. Genius! And a very good writer on top of that! Loved the story! Just the right mix of darkness and humor to make it delicious.
As for Batmane villains, Roid Rage would be an obvious Bane (again here hiding his true intellect behind his brutish civilian identity), Fluttershy would make a good fauna-based version of Poison Ivy, while psychologically starting like Harley, with Angel, Iron Will (who would also work well as Bane, just that he substitutes steroids with sheer willpower) and a Shadowbolt Rainbow Dash (let's just say she took the Myterious Mare Do Well reveal rather badly) taking turns playing the part of the Joker in their relationship, and only later, after a second confrontation with Iron Will, developing into Ivy personality wise.
Rainbow at times also reminds me at Harvey Dent, she would actually make a good base for Two Face. If she gets into an accident or ambush and finds herself scarred and abandoned it could give rise to a vengeful second personality in her.
Twi would actually be a better candidate for Mr. Freeze, maybe an accident with trying to repeat her time travel spell requires her to steal time from her surroundings, freezing them in time for a while as a result, to stay alive until she finds a cure.
Batman Blueblood... "Cottage for Criminally Insane Animals"... Riddler Trixie... Secret identities nopony even tries to keep secret... "Thwarting a Robbery"... Every sentence in this story made me smile like Pinkie on sugar! Fantastic concept and incredibly funny execution! Great job!
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