Sweetie Belle is a little bit different then most, she isn't allowed to swim, go near magnets, or stay out for too long. When Scootaloo and Applebloom decide to investigate they may find a little more then they asked for.
AN: In this fic, Sweetie is the only one whom acts like how she is from FiW, so in other words Rarity is not a cult member and such. Blah blah blah, now go read the fic!
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Too fast paced for my liking. But a good idea. I have a feeling that this one chapter could be a whole story all its own spread across a lot of chapters. But that's just me. You get a thumb's up and a favorite.
Finally, a Sweetie Bot story (well, there might be more but I haven't seen any yet, but now with the new search feature, it can be done).
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I am inclined to agree that this could be filled up.
Yaaaa, this was just one short one-shot I have... Sorry if it's bad and stuff, I dont write one-shots as well as I do longer stories.
Filled up? Bah, I say!
It amused me greatly.
Have a
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Why thank you! Thats so nice to hear even if I made this in an hour
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Glad you liked it!
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Ohhh god, I love that pic so much, and yes I know this was very random, I make very random stories...
.... BUT THAT PIC 
extremely sub-par, in my opinion, ends just a bit too quickly, there's no conflict, also, which makes it hard to get into.
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This fic was also so that I could get new ideas, I tried to end it with a moral, maybe the fact that even if somebody is different you can still like them anyways... But hey, thanks for the feedback.
Cute. It explained a different idea, was true to the shows message, and had just the right amount of robot humor.
Another underapriciated fic I say.
I think you were right to leave this short. A seperate story with the same setting might be nice but this worked.
Alright, time for my review. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png
To be frank, It was very fast-paced, and lacked conflict. But that isn't such a bad thing. Random stories like these sometimes need to be ridiculous, but it could have used some substance. Other than a couple run-on sentences, grammar and spelling was okay. The story was chock-full of robot humor, so plenty of laughs. The characters could have used more development, but since they aren't OC, it wasn't necessary.
All in all, a good read, this story will stay in my favs! Mustache for you!
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This is what happens when you write fics in a hour
You are good at packing a fairly developed story into a short piece. It also gets to the point fast.
The criticism: it's way too "talky", as in you rely too much on dialogue and don't spend enough time developing the setting around the characters. The conflict was also not very significant, but this is still good for writing in one hour. Good job!
This NEEDS a longer version. It's very good, and goes a long way towards explaining why Sweetie Belle, at least, can withstand the massive amounts of damage that always seem to befall the CMC whenever they attempt to get their Cutie Marks...