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Applejack went to Manehattan to visit her Aunt and Uncle Orange, she hasn't ever left, and when she gets a letter from her family in Ponyville she decides to go see them. Will this prim and proper pony be able to handle going back to the farm?

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Comments ( 85 )

Interesting concept. I look forward to more! :pinkiesmile:

*Starts singing like a foal*
...And Second is teh best!..

This looks interesting, I'll track it.

Seems to have potential. :pinkiehappy:

One track for you. :yay:

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I'm good as it happens, but thanks for the offer

Want more.. Soon

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So sorry, I'm really lazy and crap... :twilightblush:

D'aww, another cute chapter. :twilightsmile::heart:

Oh plz no shipping!!!!!! That would kill this!

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No worries, I wasn't planning on it

1217909 feeuw I can keep my favorite on :) I am really starting to like this story :)

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Thank you! Oh and just a by the way... I LOVE YOUR PROFILE PICTURE, SO MUCH! :pinkiehappy:

1222073 lol thanks she is my oc Sun Raye :)

Like it, but I tried to thumbs up this chapter too. Sadly to be halted by the fact I had already achieved the goal... previously

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Yayyy! Thanks for all the love! And I hoped you love the chapter, I was very tempted to make Applebloom say, "Woah Applejack you're gonna get a wicked tummy ache." :rainbowlaugh:

I'm loving every second of this, I NEED MOAR!!!!! :flutterrage:

LOl these chapters just get better and better !!!! Haha love it!!!

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Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:

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Its one of the things I would get told :rainbowlaugh:

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Being socially awkward is justtt amazing, I CAN MAKE NO FRIENDS AND LOVE BOOKS FULLY!
(Sooo alone :rainbowlaugh:)

I like where this story is headed so far!:scootangel::pinkiegasp::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

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ALWAYS A GOOD CHOICE! :yay:

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Haha, thanks! :twilightsmile:

Lol I would like to know Big Mac's story at Pinkie's party ;)

Another great chapter can't wait for the next one

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Haha, you don't wanna know his story, I guess my mind said that Pinkie throws everypony a party in town when they turn like 18 or 21, hmmm, I wonder how that goes...

But anyways! Thanks so much for all the love, yoooou are awesome! :twilightsmile:

This story deserves more views.
Still... if I had to critique...
I'm a tad worried with AJ's country accent, naturally appearing... If she adapts too fast at Sweet Apples, the story will fall flat on its flank.

...
At least you tried to cover up that slip... with:
--Applejack said, not able to get rid of her Manehattan accent

Not creative... at all. A tad disappointing, despite it being the correct thing to do.
I love the idea, I'm just hoping your details improve.

Still there is hope! If that Scootaloo-is-a-changeling story could get into the Featured Box (despite its weak writing) you can achieve anything~! Seriously though... best of luck with your writing. :eeyup:

Other than its short length, lack of detail, grammar errors, funny formatting, and maybe some typos...
You've created a wonderful story. :pinkiegasp:

I'm definitely faving this. I LOVE Manehatten-AJs but there's so lil to be found.
And this one has potential.

Sure, it's not perfect. But I'm assuming it's not from lack of talent.
The IMPORTANT part is that you've crafted a wonderful Manehatten AJ. :twilightsmile:

Of course, another FlutterxMac because it obviously hasn't been done before

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I'm sorry? Anyways I mentioned it, its not like I full out put them in a relationsip

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No, it's not your fault. Everyone seems to think that Fluttershy and Big Mac could work because their personalities are the same. I respond with how is a relationship where both ponies barely say anything supposed to work? The only way it does is by going OOC with Fluttershy, making her crawl out of her shell of shyness to start talking to him! Sorry, but that just doesn't fly for me.

You hear that FlutterxMac supporters?! It doesn't make sense!

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AHEM, I got a story for them, at least relating to this:

Okay so Big Mac has one of his animals hurt, he's fearing for the animals life. He wants the animal to live. So he goes to the vet. The vet tells him the animal will die, no doubt. Mac, not wanting to believe it, goes to another one... Who says the same thing. Mac is trying not to cry but he knows the animal will now die. He's walking home when he hears a voice calling to him. Fluttershy say Mac and the hurt animal and wants to help. Flutters is scared but the animal looks seriously injured and she wants to help.

She works on the animal, the animal dies anyways.

Big Mac is heartbroken, he is a sensitive guy so the death of something he couldn't prevent made him feel terrible. Flutters sits him down and tells him sometimes animals don't make it but you have to be nice, you can think about them and know they're in a better place. Big Mac is surprised she would say this since she looks so small and looks very hurt that the animal was not saved. They become friends and Big Mac and her are very happy.

THATS MY VERSION, AJ WASN'T THERE FOR THIS STORY SO THEREFORE BIG MAC MET FLUTTERS! Bam! That didn't really help but whatever! :twilightsheepish:

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Alright, how about this then. Let's say they do go into a relationship, what then? Mac can't move in with Fluttershy due to the distance between the farm and her house, plus he would constantly need to watch his hooves so not to step on the smaller animals.

Fluttershy can't move to Big Mac's because she'd be too far away from her animals, plus if she brought them with her they would start eating the apples and even if they didn't, the amount of money needed to feed them all would break the Apple family's banks. Plus, Fluttershy wouldn't be able to help out around the farm being to weak to deal with manual labor, and considering the fact that animals rarely get sick what would she do?

Besides, Applejack is the one who looks out for the farm animals, not Mac. She'd be the one rushing about to find a vet.

Bam, story blown right out of the water.

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AHAHAHA no! You see, she didn't go to the farm. She wouldn't, what's her reason. Animals? Like they aren't all dying you know. So I mean he's walking and maybe he's by her house cause he has to like bury the animal, he knows its gonna die. So Flutters sees him. And who knows? Mybe they wont be in a relationship. AJ is back now, she can take care of the farm while he is at Flutters. AND DIDNT I SAY THAT THE STORY WAS IN RELATION TO LOST APPLES?! OH YA I DID! :rainbowlaugh:

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Why by Fluttershy's house? Why not on their farm if it's their animal? Plus, remember the last time Applejack tried to take on all of the tree's by herself? She barely got any sleep, made baked bads, and other sorts of mistakes. Applebloom can't do it, she's too small. Granny can't help because she's too old. It takes both AJ and Big Mac to take on alll the trees, or a lot of hired help

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Hired help, there's hired help. And anyways, first episode, WHERE THE FUCK IS THAT FAMILY, THATS THEIR HELP!

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What hired help? The Apple family never hired help. And what makes you possibly think that the other families didn't have their own farms and trees to take care of? If you also recall in one of the episodes Applejack answered that question.

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I dont even know, j-just accept the half shipping I put in! :rainbowlaugh:

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DAMN YOU! Meh, I prefer the least favorite Ditzy x Mac myself, at one point I saw a Dash x Big Mac

MAC IS JUST A LADIES MAN:
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Yeah, kinda like that paring too. I actually found a few good stories that involve them.

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I really don't like that too much, it's because of the whole "forced love" thing. Its bugs me you know? How the crusaders did all this shit and got them both confused. Just didn't like it. I like the Twi x Mac, Dash x Mac, and Ditzy x Mac.. I also like the Caramel x Mac but don't tell anypony!

Completely understandable.:moustache:
The only reason that that is my preferred Mac shipping is BECAUSE of that episode (Not the forced love part) But simply because of the fact that it was that closest thing to a canon Mac relationship, and it just so happen to be with Cheerilie, if it was with, let's just say Roseluck(2nd Fav Mac ship) than that would be my fav Mac Shipping.
But I'm not just limited to one Mac shipping. Mac x any mare works with me:eeyup:(as long as their age appropriate)...lol, your secret is safe with me.

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I sorta wish that some other ponies could be paired, like obviously you can do lesbian or gay relationships because this is a kids show. And I'm not saying that stuff is bad, I'm lesbian myself, it's just that for kids you can't do that stuff. And huh, never heard of the Roseluck x Mac shipping!

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I LIKE YOU! You respond to my comments!:pinkiehappy:
Oh and about the RosexMac, don't ask how it happened, it just did.:derpytongue2:
ROSELUCK IS BEST BACKGROUND PONY!:flutterrage:

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NO! NO SHE ISN'T! CHERRY JUBILEE IS BEST BACKGROUND PONY! OR AT LEAST LYRA IS!

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