Upon creating event, of Princess Luna and Celeste, known as the eclipse they find out they causes a mystical convergence, in order to minimize the destructive problems that a mystical convergence can cause, they hold to organize this version of the tournament! As in the previous tournament, that was not organized created the Alcorn's themselves!
And to make this even more interesting. The royal family has picked their prized pupils, and made special wagers on them! Will eventually find out what each wager is but, first off, will here are exactly what the pupils want when they become princesses, or a prince?
Who will come on top! And I don't mean the sexual way, although there is some in the storyline!
These are anthropomorphic ponies, but yes there are boobs as well as assets!
PS: beautiful artwork supplied by ~JaxStern256
Get an editor, STAT! Your use of " is improper and it looks more like a script than a story.
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ok, thank you. I assure you that next chapter will be better! It's just setting up the prologue is always going to take a lot more work, and I used to having lots and lots of dialogue! When you're sitting up a large story!
I love the concept but the lack of a good editor seems to be causing a high amount of negative votes.
side note ...
Ponies are anthro ... how are they different from cannon?
Full pony head on a human body?
Human appearance with pony colerations and pony details (pony ears, horn, wings, tail, etc)?
other side note ..
Has Trixie grown out of her third person speach habits?
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They have the pony facial structure(from the series which means they do have large heads not looking like actual horse Head, and they would have their wings and tails, etc., The horns included!) Yes she will still referred herself in the third person, but she doesn't say Trixie will now asked Princess Luna to thy room. She is more or less a little bit straightforward on that regard. She does referred herself in third person though! Just not a whole lot because that can get annoying, also she tends to go little flustered around a certain that, tending to slip into normal speech.
1079300I sent it to my editor your of this current chapter he writes the Zora dialogue.
Well I say this is pretty good, so far I'm on chapter two, I give it four stars
Is English not your first language? You seem to be using a lot of incorrect terms that are similar to the correct words. A good example would've be "A contest to the terminal", which looks like it should be "A contest to the death".