Spoilers for the Movie.
What if instead of tricking her friends into distracting Queen Novo so she could steal the Pearl, she tries to talk things out with the Queen while venting certain recent frustrations out.
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see this? now this is what should've happened
Not bad, I have to say. I think it could use a bit of an editing run ("Applejack" instead of "Apple jack" for example) but this was still pretty good.
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Fixed that bit
Thanks
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No problem. If you ever need a proofreader or something, I'm happy to offer my services.
Not bad.
Great work.
8649202 Well, except then I don't see how Twilight would've been captured by Tempest. Even if the pearl did nothing, Tempest would have a hard time capturing Twilight when she had all of her friends around to protect her.
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she's a powerful pony she'd find some way to neutralize the others
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Then why didn't she when she had the chance?
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plot
I found the story to be a bit blunt, to be honest. Twilight says something and everyone just more or less agrees with her.
I also have to wonder how much help the hippogriffs can be if Twilight "oh right, I have magic" Sparkle can browbeat them into submission.
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Well I wanted to write them as off guard and against an alicorn and plus it was the pearl they needed
8649388
Well she could have sneaked up on them and I didn't write this to fit in with the other events exactly
It's Awesome!!
Well I enjoyed this story, after all Princess Skystar was one of my favorite characters!
hey look another MLP Movie FixFix, we get it you hate the movie
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On the contrary, I really enjoyed it
I saw in the cinemas twice
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I find fixfics to be a cop out
a lesser skilled writer tries to fix what they didn't like (and potentially screws over the people who did like it)
a good writer works with what already happened
in my eyes retconning a story out of existence is an easy way out
writers should never take the easy way out
here watch this video, this guy makes a better point of it than i could
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I do like fix fics myself and I do like those that take place afterwords
I am a big linkara fan myself and I do agree with him on this, I never want to go against anyone who liked it (especially since I did myself), just that some people want an alternative
THANK YOU!!! This was what I was thinking. While I wasn't happy with the way things went with Twi in the movie I understood it. There's only so much pressure you can put on someone before they crack and do something that only makes sense in their heads, in other words, stupid lol. I'm happy that there's a fic where they argue but don't leave one another like in the Canterlot Wedding episodes. (Doesn't mean I hate the movie just that I like head cannons too lol)
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Considering the rest of the princesses didn't stand a chance before they were turned to statues i don't think twilight friends can do a lot. And they were getting distracted from the fact they are on the run and don't know many non pony species and they know very little about the enemy and his territory.
This was pretty nifty.
Though now if only Novo gets called out on why Spike was reduced to a pufferfish instead of being a seadragon..
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Every single character in the movie that wasn't Tempest was holding the idiot ball for almost the entire runtime.
With the exception of Cadance all the princesses are capable of teleporting themselves out of harms way instantly; or somepony else who cannot, like Cadie.
That ability alone would've lead to Tempest's defeat in less than a minute. Instead they just stood there like morons, waiting for their turn to be written out of the story.
Laziest script I've seen in a long time. Zero efforts were made.
In terms of capability the bearers could've taken one crippled unicorn no problem, the writers simply didn't allow it. Any character dropping the idiot ball before the showdown would've ruined their masterfully crafted story.
I mean, that initial confrontation could've just ended with five seconds of stress relief for GlimGlam and grumpy servants cleaning up the gore.
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You mean something like doing what needs to be done in order to save your kingdom, regardless of personal repercussions? Yeah, how stoopit. Silly ol Twiggles.
But that isn't the actual issue I have with that scene.
The writers were so desperate to make her the one in the wrong, they flipped the entire main casts personalities and priorities.
With everyone properly in character, it would've been Twilight who'd've been insisting they do it by the book and solve the issue with friendship no matter what, while the others -let's ignore Fluttertowel here- would've opted for the pragmatic approach to get the orb, save ponykind, and apologize later.
But they needed a reason for them to abandon her friend -and sovereign btw- behind enemy lines so Twi could later mutter that "I failed friendship" nonsense.
Gawd, if it isn't obvious already, I hate that movie with fiery passion.
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They probably didn't think about it considering how often did you see anyone telport considering except for when twilight was showing off her many talents before she goes to the crystal empire the first does anyone do that. Well rainbow is in character considering she never was one for looking before she looked. Considering upon finding that nightmare moon has taken Celestia away she tries to attack directly and when the dragon didn't want to move she decided it would be a good idea to kick in the nose. As for the other girls the only experience with criminals is either defeating villains or flimflam artists neither of which give them much experience or knowledge of what bad stuff people can get up to. They did mess up by not noticing that twilight wanted getting stressed out with all the trouble and not showing any concerns for the country. But twilight was dumb in forgetting that the hippogriffs aren't their only allies. Twilight went to them because her playbook is if Celestia says jump you jump. Since Celestia tried to send Luna to the hippogriffs twilight is taking over because Celestia wanted their help. Though the hippogriffs were cowards. They acted like they planned to spend the rest of their lives underwater without even trying to fight back.
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And they probably also just forgot Discords existence.
Some random edge horse just attacked his waifu. That little invasion would've been over even before an angry Glimmer could've gotten the chance to melt Tempest's face off.
Strange. A literal god and a powerful mage who would've retaliated with violence, both absent for some reason.
Those creative geniuses "forgot" a lot of things that would've made their simpleton plot impossible.
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True but considering they only asked for his help once and it seems like they were making the barest effort in teaching him friendship considering everyone else had some clue about it but before fluttershy he didn't have any clue and considering how powerful he is shouldn't they make sure he gets it as much as possible before he does something stupid. Discord of all people should have been a student at the school but they never really were his friends.
Technically, Twilight releasing everypony through the escape hatch of the ship and Tempest noticing it is what got the ship destroyed. Twilight was so worried that the pirates would rat them out, but they didn't. If she had just remained silent, Tempest and her crew would've left the ship unharmed.
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Thanks for the review and are you the actual Hewy from online as I saw your collab with Rowdy C reviewing the Mighty Ducks?
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Yes, I am.
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Awesome