A lone changeling finds out why One does not escape from the Hive.
An experimental piece I entered into a Writeoff Association short story contest.
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Majin Syeekoh
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Das sum gewd changelin' headcanon, mang.
Seriously though, that was a interesting look at hivemind trying to be an individual.
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Yeah, I had fun playing around with that sort of stuff in this fic.
That is a Lie!
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This is truth!
This is a more than adequate framing of a hivemind, and worth the read. The prose is for the most part consistent, and your voice as an author shines through.
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I appreciate your kind words.
There is so much canon now (some of it not very good) that it limits what a writer can do, unless they set the story in an alternate universe. I look forward to more alternate universes which make things at least 20% cooler.
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Yeah, this was actually written long before season Six was even a thing, so all that new canon necessitated the AU tag.
I’m glad you liked the story!
I liked the bit with Chrysalis.
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Yeah, I’d say writing Chrysalis from both angles in this story was a treat.
8563493 Any comment on whether her perspective was genuine (and 'right'), or if it was set up to deceive the nameless protagonist?
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Honestly? I’d say it was both, because I can’t see Chrysalis thinking any less of herself than I’ve written her and she engineered the situation to make sure that the protagonist was willing to see things from her perspective as well.
8563483
Ah, I see.
It strikes me lately that I miss the fan creations of the first 2-3 seasons, when a lot of the details hadn't been written in yet, and fans were able to create unhampered save by the limits of the imagination, speculating wildly on foreign countries, Luna's backstory, Alicorn abilities, how Equestria had managed a thousand years of peace before season one, Pony cosmology, etc. Now we have a lot of answers: but many of them are sort of lame.
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Yeah, My Little Pony worldbuilding has relied on sort of a "God of the Blanks" interpretation, and I'm sure seeing those blanks filled in by canon must be disheartening enough for people to halt that sort of thing.
However, there's always things the show will most likely never touch on that are safe from the prying hands of canon.
Very interesting.
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The process of writing it was interesting it as well.
It was both equal parts fun and hellish.
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I'm wondering if it was more hellish for the perspective chicanery or the urge to slip at least a little humor into a scenario where nobody's really in the mood to crack jokes?
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Hah!
It was really the perspective chicanery. The story didn't really give me a window to crack a joke.
Stay away from the vore folder, Not-Thorax.
anyway, this was pretty good, but it probably would have been better if Chryssi had a toupee.
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Hah
And yeah, toupees make everything better.
The idea here, i think, is that the changelings are all shards of Chrysalis's own conciousness, and one changeling running away is the exact same as an idea gaining a life of its own.
Really neat idea. Don't see this sort of deeper thinking about changelings often.
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It really puts perspective on Thorax, under this sort of canon. A part of Chrysalis strong enough to form an ego, keep it's wits, and finally break away. And the newlings are just a way of re-imagining yourself.
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strong enough, or psychotic enough?
Thorax seems like an especially virulent meme, more akin to a benign AI Blight.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/460e7c142265f
One does not escape the eyes of the Bug Queen...for those that try, are sentenced to death
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I don't get it.
Or rather, I get the idea to which everyone here arrived after reading this - the changeling is Chryssie's subroutine and is inseparable from her conciousness.
But I don't get how people have concluded that. Or how he himself concluded that. Or how the mind-reading thing helped him in any way - that was literally reciting the scene from a different POV, no extra information besides Chrysalis's self-praise at all.
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Seriously, I was very curious.
How exactly have the drone concluded that he is a subroutine of Chrysalis just by looking at the previous events from her perspective ? What else have he expected ?
*Alondro sliiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiides in like the greasy fiend he is* Soooooo, since THESE icky bug ponies are clearly just hapless slaves... can I exterminate them while screaming "ERMAHGERD!! CHERNGELERNGS!!!" at the top of my lungs?
Cuz... Imma do it anyway. You might as well get comfy with the idea!
This was gold. The perspective shifts were incredibly well done, tying everything together so that the ending felt perfect, rather than rushed in any way. A chilling take on the hivemind for sure. Great job, Maj!