Princess Celestia has dispatched her prized pupil, Twilight Sparkle, to oversee preparations for the Summer Sun Celebration. An unfortunate accident, however, cuts her student's life short. Now another must recover the Elements in her stead, or else Equus will be plunged into eternal night.
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With so many of those "X becomes Y in Equestria" Fics bouncing around, I got an idea for one of my own that just wouldn't go away. Rather than let it distract me from my writing any longer, I decided to take the idea, put my personal twist on it, and get to writing! The story is already 100% finished, Epilogue and everything, so you don't have to wait long for updates like my other stories.
Huge thanks to The Spirits Demise for the wonderful cover art, and Azriel for editing and proofreading!!
I have a Discord server for my stories, y'all are free to drop in and check it out if you want.
NO you dont get to kill of best pony
Great opening! :)
Oooh, I like this as entrance. This fix, I like it so far. Another!
Ooh this gon b gud
At least until it’s cancelled right before some good stuff happens
Come with me, men! We must pray for completion!
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Story is already 100% written, just staggering the updates
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Colon D
A first!
One who has written what shall be write and shan’t leave us scrambled by in the dark seeing the last update was 2 years ago!
Praises be to writerman
Alright, so I'm intrigued. It seems like out replacement is inheriting Twilight's memories, and only time will tell how different she acts as a result. Wouldn't be much of a story if she acted exactly the same with at least no inner changes.
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Twilight is worst pony.
Something to read in my new place! Yay!
Seems rather promising, but the chapters seem too short to enjoy properly. Can't wait for the next update.
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I usually write long chapters (8k+) but I was trying a different writing format with this one
I'm askig to see if I already understood the idea before I continue, is this a human in Twilight body after she probably died? This looks interessting, but I hope he/she isn'T just following Twilight footsteps. That and in a way I would hate it if Celestia again would kind of predict Twilight to be the element of magic, I don'T remember the detail, but I don't always need her as the allknowing being.
Like usually I hope that at some point they are going to notice his change.
This is going to be interesting since it's days later then it should be so NMM wouldn't be there to try to stop them.
Well, I appreciate the slight change in that Pinkie is explicitly about raising their spirits, even moreso than in the show where it looked a bit like she "beat" the trees.
However, I think I'm more looking forward for Twilights replacement to matter a bit more.
I think this is a good departure from vanilla canon. Can't wait for the next installment, but I should probably only tune in every 4 days; I prefer reading longer chapters that show up semi-frequently over short chapters that update really frequently.
See, THIS is why if this kind of thing were to happen to me, i'd want to be reborn, in a new body that has no conflicting memories.
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Your memories won't conflict if you have none.
8572719 Pretty much. I'd prefer to have my past knowledge intact, but even if i didn't i'd be golden.
Exasperation.
No sh*t, that is actually pretty good
And now I can't wait for the lasts bit of the story, he you could even push it trough the nexts seasons, just to see how your replaced Twi deal with it
CATS: YOU HAVE NO CHANCE TO SURVIVE MAKE YOUR TIME.
Why is NMM even there, if it is days after summer sun then she should be in Canterlot securing her rule.
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My reasoning for her being there works off of the theory that, while she didn't want to attempt to move them until her rule was cemented and no one would oppose her, NMM still knew the Elements presented a very real threat to her. Kinda like if you knew that the only thing that could kill you was in a hole in the middle of the woods that no one knew about, would you attempt to find/move the item and draw attention to it, or would you leave it buried until there was no one that would use it against you? As for how she knew they were there, well, just because she didn't want to move them yet, doesn't mean she left them unguarded.
Side note, it's been nearly two weeks, not a few days. Twilight went into her mini coma the day before NMM's return, and she was under for 6 days. Add a good 4-5 days minimum of laying in a hospital bed (I might not have specified, other than mentioning that she spent a few days recovering) and that's 10 days minimum since NMM came back.
I'm quite interested to see how this whole situation ends as in cannon Nightmare moon didn't really get much chance to do much damage as she was defeated on the same day while in this case she has had weeks and is a lot more violent outright admitting to murder and plans to commit more of it, leading me to believe in those weeks she has been purging/fighting against the rest of equestria.
As such, if the elements do cleanse her, is Luna going to be welcomed back as I could easily see the nation demanding that she be punished regardless of what Celestia says.
Also is this story only going to cover the first episode or is it going to go further?
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Was she, in fact, defeated on the same day? We don't actually know how long the journey took to reach the castle.
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its not stated but even if it did take longer the entire time nightmare moon was attempting to stop them, not hurting anyone else. In this reality she has had weeks to terrorize equestria
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KO!
There, fixed that for you.
And i do hope this isnt another Luna and Nightmare Moon are completely different beings story (which more accurately is differing personalities) and that Luna is absolved of all her sins.
That is THE 1 single thing that irked me really badly, Luna as a character is relatable and pretty cool but everybody seems to forget she created NMM.
NMM is a representation of all that Luna is or could be WHILE lacking a filter + not caring what she has to do to get it.
(aka ''Evil'' which we would all be by labels of society if we did what we wanted no matter who we hurt)
Not to mention in this story ''Twilight'' knows she is not the real Twilight. That means Celestia should immediately know she is different by her Aura/magic and that the real Twilight is dead while ''he'' now has her personality and memories but also understanding what happened due to destiny being at work and the fate that HAS to pass.
It could be a nice chapter where Celestia mourns the loss of Twilight but also realizes she still has a part of her left in the new Twilight and tries to get to know her and reconnect with her. She could also explain this to the new Twilight and maybe do something with her brother, parents or even Cadence.
I would be interested in at least an aftermath chapter. What Twilight shares and what she keeps to herself.
A lovely piece of work regardless. There is always a satisfaction of have a story complete instead of wasting away after losing the thread from trying to draw a story out.
I would preferred to she this continued, at least cover key events.
I’ve really enjoyed this story! I’d love to see more. The timeline is so derailed that everything changes.
I hope it comes a sequel this story is real good.
Well, you have a few options, as I see it if you continue this.
You could continue this story outright, either on the end of this story or as a sequel, until you reach the point at the beginning where Twilight is starting her memoir, covering the events of the show with how they would be changed from canon before closing the circle, so to say.
Similarly, you could start a new story as a vignette series that basically does the same thing and update it more sporadically without the commitment of a long running story hanging over you.
Or, you could put out a comprehensive series of epilogue chapters that cover all of the major events in a less detailed manner than option one, but would still get the pertinent points across.
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Clearly.
Love the story man keep it up like to see how it ends I like the idea can't wait to see what happenshe next
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Nice profile pic love jojos
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Why thank you.
I need more im addicted
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It's so addictive.
Damn, I really do want to read more of this.
Absolutely continue this.
It was a very pleasant read)
Great story. I can't wait to see if you do anything else with this one. Probably should have done this earlier, but I'm going to favorite this one.
Is this bit supposed to be italicized?
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It was not, I forgot to close out the italics. Good catch.
I have to say, this was really sweet.
It had all the right elements to it. It went from tragic to dramatic to triumphant! It took an angle that i never have seen before.
In short, I liked this.
However, the fact that this is concluding here just leaves me unsatisfied, so i can only give it 8 on the
itude meter. 
But that's no reason to be discouraged!
I hope for a bright future for everypony involved!
Gotta admit I was a bit skeptical about the 'male human in Twilight's body' premise, but you did this amazing well. It was a great read.
not bad.
meh