Not sure if it is obvious but this story needs an editor/proof-readers. Anyone interested please PM me. Editor's will get to see the chapters weeks ahead of their release date (I intend to stay about 5 weeks ahead at all times)

Hope you enjoyed the story and thanks for reading

A epic tail, I cant wait to see were it goes.

This story has an awesome beginning and made me laugh genuinely. Not a lot of satyr stories on the whole let alone a single one in the chess universe. Let me congratulate you on a job well done. From one piece to another much luck to you in your future endeavors.

-Sturrn

>>913780913780

Thanks! I'm gonna add your story to my read later list for now until I have more time to read. The premise looks really interesting, don't think i've seen many undead in Equestria much less a skeleton...think I read about a lich once

>>913802913802 Thank you it really helps when other writers read things. It offers new perspective on things. I have read about the lich as well but there is also a Bone Lord and that encompasses the entire undead community of the game as far as I know.

>>911464911464 so far this is a lot better than horns hoves and fur thay are just over powerd in that one

we will se haw this one turns out

i love it soo far and cant wait for moreand moustache

*looks at comments*

Ah good im the first one here!

Anyway I am Troutking the unofficial greeter of our game.

I like the story so far its actually pretty funny so far!

So Good luck and thanks for the feeding

>>913802913802

how DO u add stuff to the read later list?

looks like a good story, but ill hafta check it out later :P

I like this story, mainly because the main character is an awesome gambling satyr magician who gambles, smokes pipe and has a top hat, but everything else is cool too i guess.

Seems legit

tracked for now

>>913904913904

yeah, I have no intention of giving Ace any god-like super powers. I can't stand OP protaganists, it removes any tension from the story when the main character can just activate his mega-ultra-death-lazer and destroy whatever gets in his way.

>>914008914008

Thanks, glad to be here. I have sent a link to the story to Rust, BlackWing and Tamara Bloodhoof and am waiting for their permission to add to the group.

>>914367914367

Next to the title there is a little icon of a book with a stopwatch over it. Just click on that and, when the stopwatch turns gold, that means it is on your read later list. Thanks for the read

>>914521914521

I think he lost his top hat when he arrived in Equestria. I'll have to re-read to make sure thats clear.

Wow!  This looks brilliant.  I'll be following this one for sure.

Okay, I was enjoying it rather well up until that

Note to self: avoid strippers

line, that just MADE. MY. DAY.

Welcome to the chessverse! May you not die in a gigantic ball of fire filled with spiders.

>>917065917065

*squee* A compliment from Rust BEST! POSSIBLE! THING!

>>917095917095

I shall try my darned hardest!

Could i have a link to this "Chess Game of the Gods universe"?

>>916627916627 awwww, but then can you atleast let him have a new one? Like he bumps into rarity and she is all like "hello, have this awesome top hat for free"

i love the concept of the story and will read it even if he gets no top hat, but i would greatly appreciate it if you took 10 minutes out of your time writing this story to give him one. It woulld after all make the story 20% cooler

This was a quite nice story.

'Chess Game of the Gods' that sounds pretty badass, my money is on Lady Luck.

>>918861918861

Link to the group is here: http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=907

>>918912918912

I'll see what I can do but I've got a couple of story arcs I want to get through before they can go shopping

>>920446920446

Thank you

>>921748921748

Can't take any credit for the group name, it was created by Rust and BlackWing and then expanded on by a bunch of other authors. Link to the group is in this comment.

>>921766921766 you're awesome :D definetly going to read the story now. (not that i wouldn't if he didnt get a top hat, but now i'll have small freak outs everytime a chapter comes out:3)

Definatly watching this one. Really hope the picture you have for this story is what he actually looks like as I fail with mental images of characters. The staff he has in the photo is pretty awesome

Really hoping he actually manages to get that.

Ace needs a sidekick to smack him upside the head when he makes a bad pun, that is my only complaint/advice for this chapter

Well sucks to be Ace right now.

excellent story, I'm definitely looking forward to more

aw shit

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You have nothing to be sorry for, my friend. Puns, when used greatly and appropriately, are the best and most powerful of jokes. For instance: Have you heard about the circus fire? Well I heard it was in tents......... yeah, not the best one.

>>933563933563

did you hear of the kidnapping?

there was a kidnapping?

yeah, but then he woke up!

...her her

hey me wants MAOR ....this story is quite interesting ....also this may be a bit cliche but the giant enraged Minotaur companion could be a nice little ++ ya know

Love it ^_^

Looks awesome so far.

Ace was a cunt.            The End.

More. Now.

I like how he flipped Red the bird. Nice touch.

"Hey, so I just defeated your merciless, unstoppable tank of a Minotaur pit-fighter...so, um, FUCK YOU, BITCH!"

Pretty much.

Argh this type of thing gets old fast. I mean how many guys are writing stores taking place in that universe. My tally is reaching the double digits. WAY to many in my opinion. It literally turning into the conversion beuru all over again but worse. Just how many freaking gods and goddesses are in on this seriously wtf. It was fine the first 4 or so but its turned into about 7-9 with no connection except the universe there in and occasionally meeting.

Anyway now my rant is done I gotta say I love the idea but dislike the overused realm it takes place in. Also, when using this realm you can't do crap with the main six cause they've got other places to be and more 'strange' human friends then you can shake a stick at.

Bugs me about being editor is that I don't see edited chapters in my update list since I have already seen them.

And a small gratulations maybe for the feature box update section

>>940737940737

Won't happen probably. Be patient and wait a time of 3-11 days I think. Somewhere in between there one will get out. (Though there exists one of it already)

>>940764940764

Yeeeeah. There are way too many of them.

I planned reading all but stopped when it got to 16+ or so.

Now I just follow initial 16+ 5 more or so out of the, how many was it, 70 or so stories that exist.

At least those I read I follow since they were good. Even if the universe might get overused some can use it real good. I will shamelessly admit I write a small story of it that I probably will never publish. But it is quite fun simply to run around in the world. Sort of like people running around having fun with Skyrim (bad example).

You're lucky I stumbled onto this fic... See what I did there?

Honestly I love your sense of humor. I can't wait to read more if this story

-Glassed

Be careful with the bird. It can sometimes be disastrous. Skull dancing however, always works!

Fuck ya Flogging Molly love this song

and all HIE fics don't have chronic narca    ZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZzZ

>>941471941471 your pic gave me Diabetus

Wait till Ace is put back in the Hole, all the prisoners wont have a clue how he survived.

"roses are red, violets are blue, i got 5 fingers, the middle ones for you."

behold the mighty skull dancer and btw awesome chapter

Lady luck is being a fucking asshole right now.

Wait, Middle finger with a HOOF?!?

WHAT SORCERY IS THIS???

>>953679953679

He is a Satyr. he has hands.

Otherwise. Nice chapter!

I like it, cant wait for the next Chapter. Good luck on the dig btw.

Nice joke at the beginning.

I'm ok with "clever" titles

I always thought that it was the higher pitch of Rarity's whining that nearly drove the DDs crazy, thus making them give in to her demands.

Oh Ace and his trolly shenanigans.

Barrel! Take back what you just said right now!

Pinkie has no limitations... she was just busy...

Not in that way!

...I think...

-Jorofrarie

I love this story

well I have to say this is one of the more enjoyable chess game stories, bravo

There called

Lockpicks

not picklocks

So... yes... The PUN-ishment will continue...

Wow, just finished reading through the comments since I got back and I've got to thank you all for the encouragement. It really helps to know my writing is being appreciated, thanks a lot guys.

>>984950984950

Fixed, thanks for the help. I suppose this is what I get for doing my final edits at half one in the morning.

>>985079985079

...ow, that one somehow managed to actually hurt

Ah. You like your titles as well? I'm slowly running out of puns on my end here...

-Glassed

>>953621953621

Or, its to compensate for the massive hoard of good luck coming in.

Cant wait for the next chapter. Im hoping for it to be a Bull-y of a time.

You remind me of Missy the cow, though you have more tools worthy of a Spy.

...That Satyr is a spah!

This is madness, I love it. Oh yes, and SPOON!

>>10100991010099

Image: http://www.funniest-pictures.com/wp-content/uploads/cat-asks-if-you-called.jpg

>>10107151010715

Just testing out my Pinkie powers, that was tiring though. I guess the reason she eats all those sweets is so she can do that kinda thing more often.

still loving the story , wishing the chapters were longer tho

Prison break!!! Woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!

I wonder how many explosions and stuff will happen soon ...

all i wish for is the sound of redtooth shitting himself.......and everywhere else too

Time to bring the pain......

i feel bad but i dont want this to get popular... as that would cause it to lose the specialness i see in gems like this, people writing for fun not to satiaite others demands

>>10271621027162

In that case don't feel bad.

Feel that you must protect such a valuable piece from the masses so it won't get affected by showbiz and corruption. And the only method of doing so is blocking all others access to it.

Yippeee... Update!  

I thought this was a Fallout fiction.

*Looks at description*

WHYYYYYYYYYY?!

>>10286811028681

...the picture should have kind of made it obvious that it wasn't...

MAOR

With my bag of tricks now back in their rightful place around my waste *slowly steps back* I think you meant waist

>>10286971028697 I do not even know what Chess Game of The Gods is. Oh... never mind. Good luck with it.

>>10287791028779

...massive facepalm I can't believe that such a mistake managed to get through editing...

I read provisions as Pyrovisions. I'm an idiot.

>>10289641028964

Pyro vision = this

>>10288391028839

Thanks

And this is why imprisoning a  charming escape artist with a bunch of violent people is a BAD IDEA

>>10274861027486 meh... i don't know how to hack websites...

If all else fails, he's got dynamite!

Well.... f**k

Starting out as a satyr sounds like a good reason for me to follow this story.

Yep, this story could use some editing. While I myself lack the skill to be your editor, I can give you some points that you can fix while waiting.

“Your crushing my chest” the beast managed to whisper to her

This part, first, you should add comma to end of the sentence because, um, well it is a convention. Or that's what I heard. Check https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WMMs8H-GpFIXPsQeC0RNu8V-Cq6uyGl_UERpOUK_6KY/edit?pli=1 attribution of dialogues to get a general sense of it. Second part is more obvious; you should put period in the end of each sentence. And third: you're and your are two different things (or perhaps this error is deliberate because the protagonist is crushed under a pony and can't talk properly? So the sentence should be:

“You are crushing my chest,” the beast managed to whisper to her.

But that should be settled once you find your editor. Looking forward to reading it.

And since he is a magician, I wonder if he will meet Trixie? I think he and the showmare can go along quite well.

So...Redtooth's an undead hydra-dog...damn.

Woah

tall dark and ugly to the extreme ...........Fuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu..........MUFFIN............uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu..........

And then one of my top ten chess pieces got featured. Very nice job.

-Sturrn

I like where this is going!

In case of emergency diamond dogs may be used as an illumination device.

Boss fight?  Boss fight.

Wish there was a picture with what Redtooth looks like now! Maybe I would throw up when I see it...

Well that's.........different

Cool flame thrower! "it's like an explosion in your mouth!"

Well Ace, I think its time to stick your head between your legs, and kiss your ass goodbye.....

Now watch as Ace performs the amazing disappering ac- What? hes going to stay and fight? A moment of silence for the inevitable death of Ace, we hardly knew ye.

his intoduction sounded very familiar

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love it XD

Flogging Molly? You now have my eternal respect.