This was hilarious. And I might even ship it now.

these horses are almost as gay as u~

I enjoyed enjoying this

7316845 How did I know you were involved in this just by reading the title.

I loved it, I have never though of ah SA, Cadance and Sunburst. hope to see more from you.

I know he was caught up in the moment but even out of politeness its would seem weird and creepy to know someone's sibling was giving them erotic gifts like lube and sheet suspenders.

This fic was really a treat. I hope we can see some kind of follow-up in the future

Sounds like they have one big happy and horny family.

All I can say to that (and this fic as a whole) is: unf.

Nice bit of clop, thanks for writing it!

While a sequel could be cool, what I would really want here is a prequel! It could explore the whole "Cadence exudes lust" thing, and show us a young Shining slowly become the stud he is in this story.

Criticism wise, the only thing that I think could have been better is if it was longer. Specifically, if we got more teasing of Sunburst, since that was kind of the premise. But it was still very very good.

More. More plz. Nao. :3

That was the hottest story I've read in a while, and I've been reading clopfics for about 5 hours straight. Please continue with what you're doing, it's a real treasure.

Well. I don't usually get into that, but it was sexy and seductive.

Like an Elder Dragon uncoiling from his cave,

Stallions.

Lube

Refreshing for stories not to neglect that…

it relieves as much pain as possible.

…but then how would you know if you actually caused significant injury?

Corrections offered without malice.

"What was it about," Sunburst asked,

Questions should have question marks.

the princes' skill

prince's

ass ," Shining

ass,"

managing this better than i did,

I

"Can I rest hear for a bit?

here

The dialogue during the sex really added to the characterization and openness of the whole deal.

And now I want a sequel following Cadance that the ponies she influences. Also, you probably want to change the tags to include Sunburst.

Sunburst whimpered something as he rubbed his swollen belly, the stallion how looking thoroughly pregnant. His cock twitched a few last times as it spewed the final dredges of his cum onto the sex-soaked sheets.

How should be now. But hey, I like me some pumped up stallions.

Firstly, I appreciate that you used the word “reneighsance”. Secondly, Shining’s dirty talk was actually really hot, so you did a very good job again.

He was like a ship being carried away by a hurricane, a twig being swept down a mighty river.

Like a bird in a hurry