He a simple stallion, she a simple mare. When both are caught under a tree along the riverside, while deadly creatures roam the Everfree, will some things between them become more than simple?
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I used a much more simplistic, open to interpretation style with this fanfiction, as I wrote it on and off while writing Crepusculum and a dark one-shot.
A little more information here- click clickity
Alternate cover art (Drawn horribly by yours truly) here- clickty click
Nice story! It's very cute.
Also, 787974, your cover art isn't terrible! But maybe you could improve the noses... And maybe give Big Mac some muscle, but otherwise it's really good! It's just your style of drawing ponies.
Much better than my attempts (And no, I can't show you).
787974
The style of your cover art has character, the snouts are a bit small for my personal tastes, but it does enhance that cutesy feeling the image has.
Your greatest enemy in situations like these is yourself, don't listen to that doubt!
edit: I got around to reading the story now, and goodness was that diabetes inducing! It was so sweet, and the little verbal dance was great! It ended on a great bittersweet yet hopeful note that gets just enough angst going for the reader. Hnng!
790441>>790508
Aww, thanks.
This a one-shot? doesnt matter, at least you didnt go TOO fast, now if you dont mind, I need to go re-paint the grey star gold.
790791
I was debating if I should make a second part... Perhaps I will.
Thanks!
790803
I hereby petition you to produce a second part!
I mean ... If you don't mind, that is ...
Would any following chapter(s) be written in the same style? It works great for a oneshot, perhaps even for a story intro, because it hooks so well.
Personally I can see myself getting frustrated with too much of it because the style itself is teasing, it doesn't give the reader much info, but it makes them yearn for more.
791103
If I were to continue it, I would probably add a little more detail and a little less dialogue, mostly because I can imagine writing it in this style and reading it would get pretty tedious.
Innocent and cute. The simple and speedy nature of the story makes it easy to overlook the minor grammatical issues. Not sure how I feel about Big Mac saying 'sugarcube' lol
You've got a good start here. Characters are fun and introspective, and leaves a lot of room for growth in the story. Good luck if you continue this one.
Other than minor grammar issues it's a cute story. I agree with Ponlver about the sugarcube part that's an AJ word only, in my opinion.
Flttermac forever
God that was cute.
Mac is such a stinker, lol. I like the personality you gave him here.
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794229
I only added sugarcube in his dialogue because Applejack says that quite often in the show, and it seemed natural that most of the Apple family said that.
801680
Heh, thanks.
I loved the story so much! I think there such a cute couple, great story epicguy...
806543
Thank you!
Light. Simple. Elegant, in a way. A nice little reprieve from the hefty word counts currently sitting in my Read Later list.
810924
Thank you. A part of me was screaming add more detail! More words!
But I think it turned out a lot better this way than it would have if I described every leaf on the tree and every expression of Fluttershy. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_grin.png
Dawwwwww...
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814408
It's one of my favorite pairings.
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On it!
The style that
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are drawn is kinda strange compared to what they really look like, but it's still a great drawing to go with a great fic. 7 Spikes for you!!!! 
863426
Thanks, I've been trying to work on my drawing style since then. I'd like to make a second version, if I get time.
865693 It's fine. Really. I said it was kind of strange compared to what they look like in the show. But overall, the picture is 100% Perfect. It fits the story in my opinion.
865703
Oh, okay. Thanks either way.