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Pinkie Pie would never pull a prank on Fluttershy, at least not until Fluttershy asks her to! Now she has to come up with a special prank just for Fluttershy without ruining their friendship. The only problem is, she has her eyes set a little bit higher than just
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Rainbow is right. This is sappy in the way gives me warm fuzzies.
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There's no better way to end a story than lots and lots of sap!
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!
This one is beautifully good. I love it! It gets five cute Fluttershy yays out of 5.
This story is really nice. Let me begin by saying that you simply must add a Comedy tag — don't get me wrong, you did an exceptionally well job on handling the romance... It's just that your writing style here is very amusing. Quite a fit for a story focused on Pinkie Pie, I should say! I probably laughed more than I should have, to be honest, though the 'aww's were frequent as well.
Like I said before, I enjoyed the way you portray feelings: you manage to present them with just the right amount of light humor, without making them faux or exaggerated, something I have seen done in many other fanfics.
With that being said, I do have some... criticism is not the right word there, suggestions — yes, a couple of suggestions. First, I believe that additional proof-reading may have prevented minor mistakes like
Second, I'd say that you could enhance the romantic side of the story by slowing down a little in the confession scenes (Pinkie telling Twilight about her crush, and, more importantly, Fluttershy reassuring Pinkie in the end). The pacing here leaves quite a bit to be desired.
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I'm alright with criticism. I've long since stopped caring how well my stories performed. I've gone over this stupid story repeatedly, and still failed to catch this stuff.
I've never been able to fix this. For years now, I've dulled the effect some, I've directly compared it to other stories at the same time... I just can't fix it. Quite honestly, once I finish my outstanding stories, I'm probably going to hang up my writing chops for good. It's so frustrating to do something wrong, KNOW you're doing something wrong, try to FIX what you're doing wrong, and still do it wrong simply because you don't quite know how to do it right.
Thank you so much for looking past the garbage and seeing the good stuff beneath. I'm lucky enough to have a small following of people who do the same. Thank you for the suggestion about the comedy tag. I honestly was planning to add it, but wasn't sure if I should given the sad bit at the end.
Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment and try to help. It means a lot.
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I don't think Pinkie's relationship is strained with her friends at all. I think they may get annoyed at times, but at the end of the day, they know she'll be there to make them smile. Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Oh, please! I refuse to believe you'd let complications stop you from enjoying the hobby (or passion, or what writing is to you). You already know your problems, which means you're up on the way to overcome them.
This story is not perfect. It doesn't have to. I know very well how cliché that sounds, but a thing doesn't have to be perfect to be wonderful. Please, do restrain yourself from calling it 'garbage'.
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I LOVE making stories. There's no feeling I've enjoyed more than coming up with a unique twist or angle on the same tired stories we see everyday. It's why I wrote a PinkieXLuna fic. It's why I have a PinkieXTrixie fic in the works. They just haven't been done, or done rarely.
I HATE writing. I hate it with a passion. It's this gigantic barrier that keeps me from showing people the ideas and events I come up with in my head. I'm a terrible artist as well, so that's out too. I wish there was some way I could just project the crap straight out of my mind, but I can't. It's the most frustrating feeling I've ever had.
As far as the garbage comment, I know the whole story isn't garbage, but the pacing and the missing details are garbage. Thank you for the kind words, and if you have any suggestions, I'd be all ears, but as it stands, this is the way I'll go.
Well... wow.
I don't have a single nitpick. Nothing, nothing at all. Your characterization of both Pinks and Flutters was spot-on, just downright perfect... a word I don't use lightly. As was your portrayal of the others. The pacing was great, the ending was the perfect, Rainbow-repellent amount of sap and cute and boy, was that prank fun!
I always loved how Flutters and Pinks interact, their special dynamic with one another, the potential hidden in there. Sadly, it seems there's only a few authors out there sharing that opinion and writing FlutterPie. With fewer stories out there and some of them being... well... not nearly as good as this one, there's only so much great tales to find and read.
This was awesome. It gives me back a little piece of hope for FlutterPie.
Thank you so much!
Oh wow! This is one of the very best FlutterPie stories I've ever read (and I've read a crazy amount of them)! Characterization is super spot on, the storyline is believable, cute, and funny! An instant favorite.
Rainbow is right, this is way to sappy...
BUT WAIT, DON'T STOP READING THIS ISN'T AN INSULT! It's sappy in a totally amazing, totally awesome, really sweet way, this is my first Flutterpie fanfic, and I don't usually read this, but this just drew me in, and you did not disappoint. 
Good job.
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Sappy is how I roll. You'd be hard pressed to find a romance story I've written that doesn't end with more sap than the Cutie Mark Crusaders after their ziplining escapades. Glad you enjoyed it!
By the way, you should try reading more shipfics outside your comfort zone. As long as the author is decent, and you like the characters, you'll probably enjoy them.
Flour and water??? Oh lord, that was funny!!! Lol!
Take me this point in the story to realize Pinkie Pie is actually saying the wood gasp, I know that something she would do but the first gas I thought she was actually gasping