Speedy, stylish, awesome, pretty...?
Rainbow has an image to maintain, but after helping Rarity with several projects, she starts to wonder if looking a bit feminine is bad after all. And who knows? When all is said and done, she may end up with something, or someone, she never expected.
Story image was graciously loaned to me to use by wizardglitter. She has apparently moved this picture to storage, so I cannot link directly to it any longer.
Edited By Keytapper, The wonderful writer who brought us What Is A Name.
Chapters (3)
Cute.
Are you going to write more chapters or that was it?
I feel bad for Pinkie (Thirteen) when Derpy gets a hold of her. Nothing says suspicious like pinkie with a mustache with tons of make-over supplies.
Interesting. You're moving a bit too fast for my taste but this is a story with Rainbow Dash after all.
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This is a two chapter story. other one is posted in mere mintues. !
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You're assuming Pinkie is sloppy enough to get caught.
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Naw son, other chapter will be in up just a few minutes. They do have a date scheduled after all.
4385161 O SNAP
! I have faith in Derpy.
This had some great moments that made me wish this was less slice of lifey and more comedy.
The raridash in this felt shoehorned. It came out a little out of the blue and I wasn't sure why it was necessary since the fic's focus seemed to surround Rainbow Dash's guilty pleasure of wearing dresses, rather than her undying love for Rarity. I think on it's own, that concept, would have been more fun to read about and if raridash was a necessity to this, it could happen as a late result of it.
Oh! And you should take that five months later part into it's own chapter and label it epilogue. It'll look better.
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One thing I liked when writing this story wasn't that neither Rainbow or Rarity were hopelessly in love. They simply had spent time together, Rainbow enjoyed Rarity's company, and consequently took a chance. It also allowed Rainbow the chance to say "forget it" so to speak when Rarity thinks she's joking. If Rainbow had been madly in love, her reaction to rejection would have to have been stronger.
In short, I see the "madly in love at the beginning of the fic" thing alot, hell, it's usually my modus operandi, so it was good to try something new.
As for the epilogue thing... there's not much there. Do you really think it warrants just being put into a new chapter? I almost did but it's pretty short. If you think I should, I will.
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To be honest I liked this as well,
which is why I'm confused as to why you choose shipping instead of friendshipping since there was no attraction or desire that couldn't have been satisfied by them just being closer friends. It felt unnecessary and forced in this particular scenario, since it seemed Rainbow Dash was rather in need of a confidant, than a girlfriend.
There's no word limit to an epilogue and and it'd make a great one.
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I broke that bit into an epilogue like you suggested.
I think the difference here between the friendshipping and the shipping is what Rainbow said to Rarity. She needed to feel wanted, and not by just anypony. It's clear in the show that she tries wearing her bravado even around her friends, as seen in several episodes, not the least of which being the last rounderp. The only time she really breaks that mask is when she is either in despair like in testing 1,2,3, or sonic rainboom.
So for me at least, the only way I can see her truly opening up and allowing someone she knows to see that part of her, it has to be special, and a date with someone that might mean more than just a friend would fit the bill.
Also, if I had the time, I would have built up more before the story about Rainbow helping Rarity out more and stuff. I just didn't have a good way of writing that to hold the reader's interest. I mention it in the story though. fat lotta good it did.
that last part was gold
This is definitely something i could see RD be doing once in a while.
Whoahoho! Hatchet throwing, witty remarks, everypony is so sassy!
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Oddly enough, I have no clue where Rarity throwing a hatchet came from, but once it popped into my head, I had to do it.
5792705 That was a fantastic part to this story; I highly enjoyed the entirety of the story, it was well done and beleveable to me... Good going!
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Rainbow strikes me as being a bit impulsive, so the idea that she might one day want to feel "pretty" kinda struck me as being natural... even for a pony like her.
Thank you for taking the time to read it, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Perfect
Loved it. Great job.
Alright, that epilogue earned you a fave.
And I now ship Rainbow and Rarity... Well done
SO AWESOME!
No I mean really, I now ship Dash and Rares.
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I ship Pinkie with pretty much anyone, including Luna.
Glad you enjoyed it!