When Harry, Ron, and Hermione investigate a rogue Vanishing Cabinet, they end up being teleported to the strange land of Equestria. How will they cope with the vastly new surroundings, and will they ever find their way home?
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cooopercrisp
Author of "Filly Fooling," "Cuddling," and "Spread."
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hm, notification of story pops up, I go to the story within 10 second (flat), story of 3.000 words already has one dislike and one like
wait, what?!
730760
Do you even know how this site works
730767 well excuuuuuse me for assuming the notifications activate as soon as the actual story is posted.
Okay I read the first chapter to see why it had so may dislikes and it was not to terribly bad. I mean this type of story is not really my cup of tea but why is there such a negative response? It wasn't that bad, and with some work it might even be pretty good.
I would offer constructive criticism but my writing is much worse then this so I would probably make it worse by trying to help.
hmm I actually like this, though I have the feeling that going to ponyville will end up in some sort of fight between the trio and rowle maybe twilight will have to step in to stop it.
I suppose that the like/dislike thing IS subjective, so if people don't like it then they are technically supposed to leave a dislike... But I don't mind this. I'll watch it.
Ah yeah this is gonna be so awesome, the only thing that could make this better was if our 3 heros became ponies .(Unicorn ponies preferably)
731173 That would've been nice, for sure. their utie marks would be a bit hard though, so I understand why not.
Still enjoyable, and I'll be waiting for more!
Interesting... i'm going to watch this story and wait for more. Twi is going to have huge problem on her head when trio and death eater start fighting
A very good story so far for a first chapter. I don't understand the dislikes you have received, they are completely unnecessary and in my opinion without reason. Maybe some people just don't like Harry Potter crossovers here...
Well thumb up and I will follow the story!
Hope you upload regulary. I'm the type who really can't wait more than one - two weeks.
Some bronies just hate Harry Potter, and thats just clearly STUPID.
731520 Are people really disliking just because its a Harry Potter crossover and not for any legit reason?
And here I thought tolerance was the brony way. 
I personally want to see more Harry Potter crossovers. I haven't seen many here or over at fanfiction.net.
Two things some times you speak/narrate too fancy or not fancy enough and the entire premise would work better before the dark downward sprial so time before year 5 would be better.
one more thing the beginning seems a bit forced.
Hm...i don't undestand people who like/dislike story when this is even not complete one. I always give like/dislike when i read whole story. Not after the first chapter, damn sometimes you cant give proper rating even if you read the half of the fic.
When you start a new paragraph, you should separate it into another wall of text.
Otherwise, this story is good so far.
The story is actually pretty good.
The characters are well-written, and it actually makes sense how the characters got to Equestria. Which is why I was so surprised that it had so many dislikes. Honestly, this site can be really retarded sometimes. Stories where an average sentence goes "twilight went over to spike and asked for a quill but he didnt have any" get absolutely no negative marks, but decent stories get criticized for being like other stories or having one or two grammar errors.
Anyway, please continue.
I DEMAND MOAR!
Okay, I just did an overhaul of the first chapter, so I suggest reading it through again and making note of the changes. Thanks!
Here's my reaction to the story's first full day of being up on the website:
>First of all, I didn't expect 84 notifications when I logged in tonight after work. About half were favorites for the new story, which I am pleasantly surprised about.
>Second, the dislikes for the story all must have come early on, because a lot of people in the comments were referencing them. I have to say the ratio right now is a bit more positive (about 3:1 in terms of likes:dislikes) so maybe I missed something.
>Finally, thanks for all the positive feedback in the comments. I really appreciate it.
Not sure when I'll be updating this story next, but stay tuned!
An excellent start to the fic! Faved and liked!
One thing bugs me, though... Why the hay was Rainbow Dash all the way out in Everfree Forest? That doesn't make sense to me. And calling the forest her territory is also OOC, since the ponies as a rule don't venture there unless they're visiting Zecora or are on other business.
733446 Rainbow Dash's visit to Everfree Forest has to do with the portal that opened up in the sky. I'll explain it in the story later.
As for her bragging that Everfree is "her territory," she's trying to intimidate Rowle and garner some respect for herself, so she's stretching the truth a bit.
Hope that helps explain things!
730760 Mine was the one like, not sure where the dislike came from.
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Please do more.
I quite liked this story. Rainbow Dash seemed a little out of character though. She's no coward, but she doesn't just slam into a strange monster as soon as she sees one. Also, wall of text. Separate the paragraphs with a double tap of the enter key. It'll look a lot better.
Apart from that, brilliant story. Keep writing!
I weild the sword of FIRST!
A good chapter, and an excellent plot point! So, humans have visited Equestria before, eh? And tried to enslave the ponies? Hm, better not let the Princesses know about Harry, Ron, and Hermione... although I wonder where Twilight teleported Rowle.
Looking forward to more, Cooopercrisp!
749577 I have the axe of constructive criticism
first off you need breaks between scenes, next Twi is a bit too pro-potter group right off the bat, also the paceing needs a bit of work, finally you need to check your facts a bit better the Aurors that weren't evil were already at the battle of Hogwarts.
PS Twi's mention of humans in the past better not be a G1 reference
I WIELD THE NOT-REALLY-EVEN-VERY-IMPORTANT SANDWICH OF FOURTH!
I weild the wand of prediction and I predict that Ginny, Nevillie, and Luna will be teleported to Equestria as well!
Finally found what I was looking for! Keep it up!
Libraries have screwed the wizards in more ways than one, it's so true every time they try to find the answer to a problem in the library they never find it.
Short but to the point. Work on useing less fancy speak for Harry and Ron and you need a tad more slap slap kiss between Ron and Hermione
I sorta have a nasty habit of putting my own fic lore in other stories. So the more mysterious force has been already explained in my mind.
Eeesh. You'd think Celestia would be more open-minded. She of all ponies ought to know there's two sides to every story.
And Harry has got to be pissed about the loss of that holly phoenix-feather wand. That wand was useful.
Before I read...
I happen to be a Harry Potter fan. Also, I like ponies.
I saw this in the "recently updated" part of the homepage.
I literally jumped up and started dancing from sheer joy.
Yeah. I'm that excited.
Not bad although I don't know if Princess Celestia would be SO mad at the wizards that she would destroy their wands, I’d expect that from Luna!
U MAD, CELESTIA?
Just my two cent's here, but I think Celestia is a tad out of character. I think she'd be more willing to listen to the three humans, while Luna would be more rash in her decisions
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^That, right there. Well said, BorderPatrol.
I can't help but think Celestia is way OOC.... I mean Celestia is always cool minded and always ready to listen to both parts of the story, but here she is kind of racist towards humans.
Is it just me or is Celestia holding the Villain Ball and almost everyone else hollding the Idoit Ball.
Also Fun Fact a horse bucking you in Real Life can and will break your ribs. Applejack is most likely between 5 and 10 times stronger than a normal horse.
827860 Celestia can be very grim and determined when she thinks she knows what's going on. The only thing that's out of character is her being wrong about them.
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830609 Wizards are also more resilient to injury than normal humans, so I think it balances out.
About Celestia...i think i can understand her. If humans act even almost like Death Eaters to pony kind... she have a right to be angry and not act calm. Bitches(i mean humans) like to enslave theyre own species so....
832435 Only 2 maybe 3 times higher restance and at the very least Applejack is stronger than an jinked bludger which can break an arm.
P.S. HAVE YOU SEEN WHAT AJ CAN DO?!
hhhhmmm i would have imagined Princess Celestia reaction to be sort of how she treated twilight in the season finale when they all tought princess candace was innocent.
Sorry for the short update, but with this story, I try not to embellish if I'm low on ideas. Next week will be more interesting, I promise!
863224 authors don't count so for the first time FIRST!!!!!!!!!!!
hhhhmmmm when and how did rarity get into the picture. She all of sudden appeared in the story by tying Rowle. I find it a bit weird, she is the element of generosity so she wouldnt just tie somebody up without a good reason. Followinf RD guts, kinds iffy. Other than that seems fine so far.