Alone one night in her castle, Twilight wakes up with an overwhelming feeling like she is being watched. She looks out and spots a shadowy figure looking right back at her. He vanishes into the night, almost faster than Rainbow Dash can fly. She tells her friends and they tell her that she's seeing things, however, Twilight knows that she saw some pony that night. So she decided to venture in to the Everfree Forest and find this pony. What she discovers throws her entire reality for a spin...
Meta- This is a story staring my OC (My avatar) this same OC has an origin story that will be told in time, but for now I want to get him established.
Chapters (7)
The figure looked at her and said to the Princess of Friendship, "I have made a terrible accident mam. I'm talking you to Zecora, she knows about me, and she also knows how to fix the error I made."
Taking?
Is figure meant to be in caps? Maybe interrupting her magic instead of become interrupted?
Good story though I really enjoyed it!
>OC story
>authors username shares OC's name
>OC's "name" isn't even a name
>Vampire Pony
Well, at least you threw it all out there at once. Wouldn't wanna miss reading all this now, would we?
I think you did pretty well with Zecora's rhyming.
Your "OC" comes across as a real Gary Stu. Writing characters OOC isn't doing you any favors either. Perhaps an editor or beta reader?
DARN...I thought he was Deathflame, Zecoras friend. Ive seen a few pictures of Deathflame with Zecora together. I would like to see a story about Deathflame, to give him some background. I think he would be an intriguing character.
When will you learn. Splitting up is the WORST idea EVER