Lyon has the kind of life everyone sets out to have: a perfect one. Great friends, a great home, a great job, all while living in one of the greatest towns his eyes have ever been set upon! Life is perfect for him!
But nothing is ever set in stone, it seems. As the past creeps its way back into his life, Lyon must remember to swear to the duty he set and fought for—Never Again.
Set during the season 2 finale. Also, I've been meaning to make a multi-chapter, T-rated story for years now. Alternate story tag in accordance with the series finale (unless it isn't needed since this is fanfiction anyway).
Chapters (14)
Yay! New I Am The Night story!! Fave!
Hmm. Off to an interesting start.
Interesting take on the premise, looking forward to more.
Oh, also, panting rather than painting?
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Thank you! I always thought this type of concept was interesting, but all the main cast were taken up. Figured doing another OC wouldn't hurt...
And fixed!
Not great, not terrible.
Thank you, Twilight Dyatlov.
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That didn't take long for someone to notice. Damn.
And here I thought this story didn't have a romance tag
I'm digging the vibe so far. Keep it up!
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I knew I was missing something! My bad!
Glad you're liking the story so far!
I am quite curious as to where this story is headed. I like it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pMQ-t3nGzrI
Mr. Lyon...
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That's actually why I wrote out that line.
The mention of “re-education” is intriguing. Is there something about this Twilight we don’t know about?
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Honestly, I hadn't even thought about it. But it's really just a euphemism for them saying, "We're taking your friend and brainwashing her so she doesn't blab her mouth about our plans."
I think the overall pacing is fine, and the scenario with Lyon and Chrysalis was pretty neat. If I had something to say, I would say that this...
...happened in an instant for a pony who was right beside Lyon and in front of Chrysalis. Explaining how she was able to get to Cadence would benefit the pacing of it far more than just explaining in a single line that she had managed it.
But that's being nitpicky, and I am still enjoying this story so far! I'm curious to see how Twilight and her friends will react to this revelation, and I like the way you gave us some exposition on Chrysalis and Lyon without explicitly explaining what it all meant. It's a cool mystery!
Keep at it!
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Good point! I kinda wrote that little piece based off the actual scene, since she kinda just crawled her way over to Cadance without much of an effort. But I'll go back and add onto that, now that you mention it!
But I'm glad you like the story overall so far! Some of this will be explained over the next couple chapters, and I'm hoping it won't take away the mystery of it all!
Thank you again!
This is really interesting and suspenseful!
Interesting choice by Lyon to tell Shining and AJ two different stories. Not sure that’s going to help him in the long run...
Can’t wait to see what his plan is, especially since everyone he knows is inside the castle. Keep it up!
This was well paced for how long it was! I think Lyon saying "sorry" while running through the kitchen was very on-brand for him.
Curious to see how the rest react to Spike's claims...
So much mystery. I love it!
Can't wait to see Lyon in action a bit more. His archery scenes a few chapters ago were already pretty cool, and it seems like he has plans to show his skills again...
I'm sure the others will come around soon. Lyon would be a powerful ally to have against Chrysalis and the changelings.
The suspense is killing me!
Glad to see the gang coming around. I have a distinct feeling that Lyon won't be facing Chrysalis alone when it comes time to confront her.
Any updates soon?
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Yep! About 12 hours after this comment is posted! Sorry for the wait!
From what I've gathered, it depends on how much you deviate from canon.
I like the method of introducing your own Changeling lore here: Lyon is the first to tell the group these things because up to this point, Ponies and Changelings hadn't interacted for years.
Glad to see this back. Keep em' coming!
Really loving this story!
Glad to see this back again! I've been waiting.
I have a good feeling the character in the flashback at the beginning has quite a bit to do with Lyon lying during that little mini-interrogation. I'm excited to see how that develops!
this a deadfic?
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Not necessarily. I've been away from FIM for a while. Busy irl and also on other sites, but I do want to get back to making stories here too.
Have You Worked On The Next Chapter of This Story?
When the world needed him most, he returned!
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I guess he was.
Was pleasantly surprised to see this got an update again
It's Great to know your still kicking around here
Just finished binging this story, and I have to say I am ecstatic you're looking to have it around 60 chapters. It's a great story.
Keep up the good work!
Any updates coming?
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Probably not for a little while. RL has been a bit taxing as well as other projects. But once I have the time, I'd like to write up a bunch of chapters and release them once every few days, but I want to be sure I'm not pacing it too fast or too slow.
Aww twilight loves him, and realizes he’ll long out live her and doesn’t want to hurt him so she’ll ignore the feelings. She’s probably telling herself this kiss is the only thing and the last time because anymore would hurt Lion when he blinks and she’s dead and gone.
She’ll probably try and come back to him when she’s an alicorn.
Overall I really like the story you have here. Changeling OCs are tight! One critique I have is that the last several chapters have all been heavy/dark/sad. Unless that is the direction you want the story to go, maybe it's time to brighten it up a bit? Otherwise, very nice!
Intriguing plot, good grammar, and intricate worldbuilding make for a good story. Not to mention that I like how you used the most underutilized, but arguably coolest MLP character there is: Zecora rules!
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Thanks! I didn't entirely realize how dark it'd been, but assuming I return to this story in the near future, my initial plan was to continue the dark path a little bit, but then add a bit of lightness to it so it's not just nothing but dark and depressing.
I've been meaning to get back to this story proper, and I hate that I haven't taken the time to do it, to the point where I still know how the story is planned to end, I just don't remember how I was going to get it to that point. But a reread or two should jog my memory, I hope!