Hey, it's me, Shadow Dragon! I love MLP and DBZ, and I wanted to bring the two closer together. I also made my OC in Mugen. You can find him here: http://shadowdragoncave60.blogspot.co.uk/
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With the threat of the other Shadow Dragons approaching Equestria growing closer by the day, Princess Celestia decides Oak's training regimen is not enough. She has found a new champion to train their ace in the hole. And his name is... JOHN CENA!
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Wow, four upvotes and four downloads already. Maybe I should start up a chant like John Cena did.
Have all of my yes!
Your authors note is bigger than the story, bro.
6632823 I wanted to tell people I'm serious about writing and not a troll and stuff.
(look at my picture) Tfw author note is longer than story. :( (good story doe)
The John Cena Madness continues...
Why is the authors note so long and why is it almost identical to this blog post?
I really hate to comment on something like this, but at the moment I feel I have to. This story is a mess of telling much more than showing. Instead of telling us what every character is feeling, why not show it with actions and even with dialogue? I think it would be much easier, honestly. You should probably get an editor and a prereader.
Anyway, the content is kind of okay. John Cena is a meme now, so I figured that he'd become the subject of a large number of fanfics on this site, but you seem to at least know wrestling. That's good, I guess. I'm a bit disappointed that the line was
As opposed to
Also Cena sucks, but what can you do.
Another big problem is the overuse of blatant references. While you provided context later, I believe John's line:
Could have easily been:
And it wouldn't have changed much. And the South Park bit made little to no sense aside from "It was funny, so I added it."
Also the blatant hate on Orton is really uncalled for.
Yes I am a hypocrite.Lastly, it's not "Appledough", despite it sounding better. The beginning of Cena's entrance theme is a sample from M.O.P.'s Ante Up, and it's actually saying Amadou in reference to Amadou Diallo.
I talk a lot about so little. My comment is about as long as your author's note.
CM Punk is Better
6634806 I was trying to show more emotion. How do I do that better?
6671338 No he's not
6633004 that's so silly. :)
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Man, I don't know. I wrote that comment last year. And also, is that all you have to comment on? Really. Finally, CM Punk and Randy Orton are better than Cena. Hell, Heath Slater is better than Cena.
DUUN DUUN DUUN DUUN JOOOOHN CEEENAA