Fluttershy was planning to sort out something with an old friend until Rainbow Dash called her up.
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Twyla In Wonderland
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Twyla In Wonderland
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It's a decent start, but this chapter just flew by at, well, Rainbow Dash speeds.
Within a couple hundred words Dash went from heartbroken to making out with Fluttershy, who wasn't at all disturbed or even confused by her friend kissing her out of nowhere.
It's a good premise and the writing is fine, but the story would definitely benefit from being fleshed out a lot.
Still, allow me to give this its first thumbs up.
6502824 Thanks? just one question. Fleshed out?
Uh... I think you missed some paragraphs in the story. Crying one second, making out with Fluttershy the next.
i liked the concept, but to agree with Summer Knight, it felt a bit rushed
but dont worry my fist and so far only fic is a rushed flutterdashhowever, if u want feedback, you can always ask me
but this week and the next are super packed, just as a warning
6502869 yea ya know...... expanded upon. You could make this longer like maybe another chapter or two. I wanna know who was creeping around Dashie's house that's a total cliff hanger ending