"I have a crush on someone Rarity, but I don't know how to confess my feelings to her."
Fluttershy really likes someone, and tells Rarity for advice. Will it work or will it fail.
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Love's always in season and love is love. The world is changing and everyone has a view.
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Don't write as if it were an online chat. Second, you need a setting. I assume they're at Rarity's place but don't expect your readers to imagine it all without the little details. Describe the surroundings and what's going on. Third, check your work. There are lots of grammar errors in your writing.
That is a very unimaginative way for Rarity to figure it out it must be because of a crush. Also there's four mistakes in that one line (the entire line.) Second how could anyone figure it must be a crush with that info. One might first assume she's depressed before guessing she's in love.
Sleepover/Truth or Dare is the lamest setup for a romance. Half the people who shoehorn romance do this. You need to be more creative.
oh the song you got from pokemon, it's called "together forever." here is a link if you want to hear, for nostalgia's sake.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yEwskt7I3GA
6025117 Thx u it's been nagging me for ages.
6025167 glad i could help. i just felt there was a connection there as i read.so i looked it up and yup that was the song. and the story was beautiful.
6025758 Thx for the lovely feedback.
Spelling errors, grammar errors... not enough detail or evidence behind the stories story line and what it's about.
Consider a rewrite but it was cute though.
6162215 Thanks. I will update it instead of having another incomplete story.