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dinkyseviltwin
Writing the childhoods I wish I had.
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I think I read this in a porn site somewhere...
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Maybe you saw it on Freenet? I don't think anyone wants to post it on any websites besides me.
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Does this version differ at all from the one you've got on tor? Cause, I'm already like, five chapters into that one.
I'm terrified that reading this has put me on an FBI watch list, but it was 100% adorable and heartwarming. They really didn't seem to know what was going on. Chapter two where they find out what they've done.
6497281 Now you've gotten me more than a little worried that I went ahead and read this.
With that being said, this story is strange to me...It's off putting considering how young you make them out to be (possibly younger than I consider them to be) and they're doing something of this caliber; but, at the same time I find it somewhat endearing to read how Sweetie and Scoots are not only learning more about themselves, but also each other. It just feels real, like exactly how I'd expect a kid to naturally discover and make sense of things they don't understand.
loved it
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I tend to revise heavily, so it might differ from what was on Tor, but Tor is a direct line to whatever I'm working on, so if it's eventually going to show up here, you'll certainly find it there.
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There are literally 3 different ways you can read this, which can most likely be undetected by any policing agency, corporation or governing body. I'm a big advocate of privacy protection services, especially considering the content of my writing.
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While it's highly unusual in reality, that sort of relationship is certainly physically possible, and it has happened before. I may write about unusual occurrences and uncanny coincidences, but the only thing that's truly impossible about it in reality is that it's about fictional ponies from a cartoon. That, and I am something of a ...volume queen? What do you call that?
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Wish we can have AB join this activity. I read so many story with similar plot. But AB is alway be left out...
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At this rate, she'll be Sweetie Belly!
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Clearly that's why I wrote about her, just to make sure Apple Bloom gets totally left out and never receives any satisfaction or terrifying revelations.
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Patrick isn't her type...
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Oh...that so sad. No love for you here, AB.
So, who thinks Applejack or Rarity catches on? My money is on Rarity getting wise to these "massage" sessions first, what with Sweetie Belle smelling like sex if she can't sneak to the shower someday. Applejack will prolly just blame the clubhouse or storage shed smelling like bow-chicka-wow-wow on Big Mac and Cheerilee.
OMG, I'm dining. This is too funny!
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No, don't go into the light you still have so much to live for! And can you pass the peas?
6522108 You're right...I...can't...die...a...virgin...
What in Equestria is she doing with them Zap Apples?!
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Wow...what trolling thing to do Sweetie.
Talking with a guy about something serious mid coitus is the absolute worse thing you can do...but it is pretty funny.
interesting at first glance this seems to be a shameless clopfic but if you read it it turns out to be an actual story
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"Scootaloo, I think we should start seeing other ponies."
"WAHT?!"
The really troll thing is she wasn't talking with him about something serious. She was telling him about it, and insecure that he wouldn't cum inside her, so she made sure he would even if she told him. She wasn't doing it to laugh at his thought processes limited to "Thrust in filly, me squirt now," but rather to provoke him, taking advantage of that narrow focus to drop a bombshell on him, so that she could learn more about him and colts in general. And in its own twisted way, trust Scootaloo more, for his lack of self control. She sought a kindred spirit in a time of extreme vulnerability, by trolling the fuck out of him. Also it's sexy when the boy tries to hold back after it's way too late to get off the ride.
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Ohhh ho ho, I haven't even gotten started yet.
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6542839 then i look forward to what you got
When is this supposed to be set? Part of this chapter implied Nightmare Moon, but Sweetie and Scoots hadn't met Apple Bloom by that point (hiding under the same table notwithstanding).
Gender roles suck
I can't wear any cool and awesome jewelry (female) and practical and durable jewelry (male) whenever I want. I am gender neutral, and yet I can't use things from both genders like wearing a surplus jacket, cotton button down, and dress pants while wearing gold wristlets, a number of pins, and a pendant on a chain. And that's what I'd wear to lounge around my flat! Gender roles continue to ruin my life
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Hiding under the table withstanding, means Call of the Cutie took place somewhere between Twilight's arrival, and the coming of Nightmare Moon. What, you thought Twilight made all those friends in a single day?
But seriously, I just didn't see a good place to fit in Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle's introduction to Apple Bloom, and instead of massively reworking the story (again) I figured I'd just roll with it. I could probably excise that stupid flaily stuff at the beginning making a casual mention to Apple Bloom, and stick her somewhere in later, but... meh.
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Gender specific clothing does have a hint of sensibility to it. Humans and... ponies I suppose, want to have sex. Most of them want to have exclusively heterosexual sex. So, if I wanted people not to have heterosexual sex with me, I'd try to conceal what sex I was, but since most people do want to get laid, it makes sense for them to want to see girls in dresses and boys in pants. Just on a grossly practical basis, it helps people with vaginas figure out how to get a penis in it, and vice versa.
That sensibility goes completely out the window though, when you realize that clothing is meant to conceal the genitals... so why would anyone hide their genitals, and then advertise which genitals they have? Your vagina looks sort of like flower petals, so to protect your sensibility, you cover it up with a dress that looks like a giant plant vagina, with plant vaginas drawn all over it? Thus, the My Little Pony world with its open bottomed dresses, lack of underwear, and suits without pants, makes far more sense than human clothing, both advertising a sexual role and not trying to hide it, or else not advertising anything at all.
...then Rarity went and designed those Gala dresses.
Canterlot fashion has never recovered.
It is kind of funny to think about who might know about Scootaloo...I mean does Rainbow know?...how about Diamond Tiara?...of course with this new information Sweetie has gotten there is a high likelihood that Apple Bloom might not be able to hang with them anymore...unless of course it slips Rarity's mind...
Did the last scene also serve to test to see if Scootaloo would still stick by Sweetie's side? Cause, Scoots apparently was able to stop himself for a brief moment, or was he just doomed to be unable to by that point?
I gotta admit, I'm still feeling strange about this fic. I'm still unsure given their age is still fairly young, granted they are clearly slightly older than in the first chapter (and thus a little bit less off putting), but still find it rather...heart-warming. It really like how you're writing this story so far, it still feels very natural how their progressing: maturing mentally as they learn more about what they're doing, but also maturing in their bond as they do. At least, that's how this story feels to me right now. BTW, serious respect for how you handled the last chapter, making that still feel like '"innocent" discovery' couldn't have been easy.
That's somewhat of a bittersweet, but most tender cliffhanger. Though something feels ominous about what Rarity warned her not to do if with foal... Well, don't see a sad or tragedy tag so... *shrugs away bad thoughts* I'm sure everything will work out. On the bright side, she's young enough to a point it won't affect her school life too badly, and she has Rarity. Doubt Scoots would leave her though, though there's the slight issue of how the orphanage will react to one of their colts making a baby with some other filly.
I feel pretty bad for Apple Bloom. Hope she finds something by story's end who can make her at least half as happy as Scoots and Sweetie are with each other, not that they don't love Apple Bloom already but the poor thing still can't help but feel alone and envious of those two despite it all.
Whelp, nice to see someone use the whole "Nopony ever bothered to check or ask or noticed Scootaloo was a colt the whole time" idea. It was executed adorably.
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Scootaloo wasn't exaggerating when he said everypony.
And yeah... it's kind of a swift end to a strong friendship, getting found out after you've inadvertently made your friend pregnant. The clearly sensible, professional, mature course of action would be to force her to give up the foal for adoption, and separate them forever so she doesn't get knocked up again. I'm sure that's exactly how the story is going to go.
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None of us have a choice about what we want and what we don't want. You can't just stop wanting something. Giving up something you want out of necessity sure, but deciding not to want it? It's even more poignant in sexuality, where we can watch ourselves grow from not wanting something, to wanting it more than anything. So if Scootaloo had no choice in wanting to cum inside Sweetie Belle, can you really say he was doomed to do it?
Really if he did stop, that would have made him a lesser pony than he is, lacking that fiery, unquenchable passion that drives him to keep going.
And yes, she was trying to test him, but even she realized that she threw the results, unable to be objective about what they would be.
One thing about me is that I find personality sexier than anything. That's an excuse prudes use to deny that they like sex, but for me it's more a matter that sex can be off-putting and ugly, while still being totally freaking hot, because of what my experience is, and how it makes me feel. Or vice versa. I don't write about hunks and hyper bimbos, but about nice people who might not have the perfect appearance, but love each other, so it makes my stuff feel a bit different from most porn. Though I have to admit Sweetie Belle's ass is objectively the bomb.
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Yeah, kind of weird that Rarity would not want her to be intimate with Scootaloo anymore. Then again, how many of us would encourage our kid sister to go and keep screwing some punk? I'm fairly sure Rarity's concerned with emotional fallout, in her own misguided fashion.
I will confess this story may have one tragedy, but you can pretty much see it coming from a mile away. I wanted this story to be light hearted in general though, so I am certainly aiming far away from tragedy and sadness, even if my imagination keeps cooking up plots like Sweetie dying of anemia, or Apple Bloom giving birth in an alleyway in Trottingham right by the cardboard box that shelters her only remaining possessions.
Sure it could happen, and I could make a logical progression of events to such horrible ends, but I want to write about something I enjoy, not like in... oh no, now I'm thinking of that other story, the one I'm not posting... darn it, Zecora!
I am so conflicted over the answer to this.
6550882 I guess I had a bad choice of words with my last comment, sounding more negative than I meant it to be, my sincerest apologies. What I meant was that him being past that point of no return, where he'd just...peak without any further 'motivation'.
That I can support. Don't get me wrong, looks are still a plus for me, but after a particularly bad crash-and-burn attempt at a relationship, I've found a beautiful personality to be more appealing. With that said, I'm even more certain that this piece truly is one of those diamonds in the rough I can really enjoy reading.
BTW, if you do decide to do that tragedy bit you mentioned, I'm really hoping that it will be light. You're more than welcome to make it as heavy as you want though, it is your story afterall, and in my opinion, you do have the final say what goes into it. Even if it is, I'll try to read it as best I can, just cause atm I feel this story is worth it. I'm really turned off of stories with tragedy tags just cause I get really existential after reading anything of that genre and I don't particularly like it when I do.
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If the tragedy I'm thinking about doesn't make you laugh out loud, then cringe at what you just laughed at, I'll be very surprised. It'll be a...while anyway.
Oh, unless you meant that other story I haven't posted yet. That horrible, awful, tragic, grimdark, edgecrapsacknasty story that is so incredibly awesome that I can't stop writing it. That one definitely avoid, if you ever see it, at least until after it's hit rock bottom.
My "Straight to Belle" story doesn't have tragedy in it, but do avoid it if you have problems with existentialism. I'm somewhat troubled in that regard, and not pulling many punches in that one.
is Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle really pregnant if they are oh that not going to be good at all because when they have the their baby's there going to have give up them or put their in a Orphanage which i don't want that to happen
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Sweetie is pregnant, Bloom is not. And there are enough options other than orphanages.
6567551 ok and yeah they i just hope when sweetie belle foal is born she keeps it so she can raise it with the help of her family and friends
6567551 don't you?
Such good friends!
6567999 yeah they are
Scootaloo is gonna come back...
"I got the box, now we can help...Apple..bloom.."
"..."
*drops the box*
"..."
*shuts the door*
Why do I have the feeling Bloom will gravitate to Scoots again?
I recon the twist is gonna be that Scootaloo is infertile and Sweetie Belle is just having a late estrus.
I like the idea that Scootaloo can't control the urges when the other two are close by. It's not just a whim, it's a compulsion.
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Also keep in mind where Scootaloo is living right now.
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And to think ponies call themselves besties just because of a little rump bump!
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Frankly I think Apple Bloom would gravitate towards a crayon drawing on a cardboard cutout if it was labeled "colt".
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What, and not impregnate any little fillies?
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I hear stallions go a little crazy among real horses, too. Horses are just very sexual animals, both in symbology and literally. It is a lot of fun, in that you can't really blame him as much. I like when I can make it all ambiguous just who's at fault. It adds to the intrigue and makes it easier to empathize with everyone. It's not like he doesn't have a choice though. It's a compulsion even in humans, and lots of guys choose not to have sex. Fewer guys can make that choice when the lady is willing, presenting, dripping wet, and he's hard as a rock, trying not to think about putting a bun in her oven, so mostly it's about not getting into that situation when you don't want to. Mostly it's about people being discouraged from befriending each other in our society, but that's just depressing.
6573939 ok
Dat gif in author's note.
I want to say that I've now read all 3 of your fics on here... And they all feel
extremely different, somehow. Like, almost like the writer or style of writing
was different.... Perhaps I need to check back on a small section of all 3 stories
and really make a back to back comparison to see if I'm recollecting this right.
Note that I'm not making accusations or anything. Just... I don't know. It feels
odd that my recollection of 3 stories by the same writer all feel so different.
So what? The Apples are only still around because the breed faster than they get themselves killed...this makes an odd amount of sense...
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Apple Bloom sure does love that loopety hoop!
Obviously, you feel that way because Coltaloo is being written by Sweetie Belle, Straight to Belle is being written by Not Sweetie Belle, and Boy Stuff is being written by Pinkie Pie the Ascended Draconequus Princess.
In all seriousness, I have no idea. Coltaloo is supposed to be "sort of like" Boy Stuff, in that it's the best smutty concept I've been able to get working, but it does seem to be turning more toward the emotional/social aspect of things than Boy Stuff did. Straight to Belle is... different, yeah. Different than anything I've ever written really, so go figure it's the most popular story I've ever written. You're just lucky I haven't published this other story I've been working on. Even I feel like it must be someone else writing it! It really made me question what kind of person I am, to even think of a story like this one. Not my normal fare at all.
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You also have to ask yourself, how much are the Apples still around? Their ancestral home granted to them by the Princess herself?
Like a game of base ball, sliding into home... right as they catch the ball in their mitt.
I really want some scenes showing the perspective of Rarity as she has to deal with this.
I can imagine her screaming at the orphanage director for allowing Scootaloo to be mistaken as a filly by most of ponyville, since that misunderstanding allowed her little sister to be knocked up.
i've seen some pretty bad euphemisms in my time but this one is a real faceplamer