Rarity has become her worst fear, a spider. Or better said: an arachnid pony. Nonetheless, it doesn't take away from the fact that she isn't really happy about it, at first. The hopes be that the rest of Ponyville will like it, for three little fillies certainly do. Heaven be ready for whatever happens next when the four of them are together.
Though perhaps, things may not have been the way they look at first glance.
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Coverart created by DANMAKUMAN
Featured on 06-13-2014, thank you all so much!
Chapters (3)
That cover art.
The ending was a tad disappointing, but overall a good fic.
I would have wanted to stay a spider personally...
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
I was hoping somebody would make a story off that art piece, good job!
Interesting concept and I wish I could read it but damn, you need an editor.
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I know right? I can't stahp looking at it
I'm gonna drop this off here...
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4538505 Unfortunately, I must agree.
How can I be afraid of you Rarity? You look so adorable as a Pony/Spider hybrid.
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Oh look at that cute SHARP fang.
Well, at least she can spin her own high quality silk now?
And yes, you need an editor.
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Why do I agree with that??
Awww, she's cute as a spider. I want one of those arachnities.
Rarity is maybe the least intimidating spider in the history of forever.
4537876 wow
spoilers you cuntbag
Come on, you know you were thinking this:
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Cover art comes from here.
I have really bad arachnophobia and I'm frightened by the smallest of spiders
Lot of spelling and grammar errors and odd choices of words, but still a nice little story.
4540510 Not to be a prick, but comments usually contain spoilers, and you went and read them anyways. So who is at fault here? The guy who commented about a story, or the guy who went and read the comments before reading? And I know you have been on this site long enough to know that comments often contain spoilers.
~Crystalline Static~
4540979 Damn it
I knew I should have used "cunthammer" instead of "Cuntbag"
in my general experience, people used the spoiler tag as I am right now
it's more considerate, you know?
4541338 Well to be honest, I don't care if I piss people off.
And I know you are a respected member of the fimfiction community, but that just means that I consider it a personal achievement to piss you off.
I tend to be a bit of an asshat sometimes, but that does not define who I am.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4541400 well that came out of left field
I mean, this also hurts the author, seeing as when people read a spoiler, they're less likely to read the story
I mean sure, a good pissing is all good fun, but there's a difference between being tactfully abrasive and being a cockmunch
>me
>respected
>ever
are you sure you're thinking of the right person? I know you could be confusing me, my name does look a lot like "Rainbowbob".
they both begin with "r"
4541479 I use the term respected loosely.
The intent was that you have a lot of followers and many people know who you are.
I make it a personal goal to piss off people who have higher standings than I do in ways that don't result in me being thrown to the wolves or whatever.
I was quite the puppetmaster when I started getting into clans when I was big into online gaming. Toying with people is fun, and I have started (and ended) many a clan war just by manipulating the leaders of the clans. I guess I am like discord in a way... I play all these mind games and enjoy watching the world burn.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4541551 "clans"
2007 RS 4eva?
4541558 Not Runescape clans, but a similar idea I guess... (I am going to assume when you said RS, you meant Runescape... gosh I haven't played that since '08...)
I was quite the conniving schemer back before I got into fanfiction. I actually caused quite a bit of chaos in some circles. It was fun...
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
Oh my glob that cover picture is adorable and I just wanna snuggle her!
I'll be checking out this story soon as I get time away from finals.
>Be Arachnophobic
>See adorable Rarispider.
>does not compute.
Wasn't this fic/the picture that inspired this fic based off the spider Rarity tumblrpon ask-blog? No credit?
Fans of this story might also like this tumblr: Oh Dear I'm Suddenly A Spider.
I do love that cover art. One of my fics uses another one of the artist's many wonderful pictures.
this adorable cover art earns you a read later
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I must agree with these two. You're writing is alright for the most part, but you really, REALLY need an editor to help you at least restructure some of these sentences to help it flow. The concept alone is too interesting just to leave it as it is, and the story itself begs for perfection, much like Rarity herself.
If I may offer a suggestion. Perhaps you could post a blog entry requesting an editor, and then retract this story, have it fixed up, and repost it once finished? Yes, it would be time consuming, but the result will be SO much enjoyable and fluid.
car accident
Jeez you think the first thing she'd do would be to go to Twilight or something
... OUCH... First sentence of the story, and you dun goofed. NEVER a good sign for a story...
Its. Not it's. I-T-apostrophe-S means "it is." I-T-S means it belongs to you. Possessiveness.
... And then another problem in the second? Usually. Not usual. Usually.
I... I'm not sure I can read this right now. The fact that there's two errors in the first two SENTENCES is rather... worrisome for how the rest of the story is going to go. Get an editor, and then I'll come back to read. As is...
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The story still readable. I'm sure if you read for fun then those errors are not gong to make you to stop. Unless you are some kind of grammar freak.
Alternate title: Shades of Spiderses
4541551 Have at thee!
I am the Troll King here, infidel!
Cool story.
4543571 You are the 'Troll King'?
Well that explains why your OC is so ugly...
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4543715 Says the guy who's got a pixellated Trollface.
4543771 At least he has taste. I agree with him. Your OC is rather displeasing. But I suppose, at LEAST it isn't an alicorn...
It does have flaws. Obvious ones that have been annotated on numerous occasions in the comments. However, I absolutely LOVE spiders! Upvote+fav!
I'd very much like to read this. However, my insane arachnophobia prevents me from doing so.
Just have my like and leave it at that. Deal?
4543818 Show me a fashionable mad scientist, and I'll show you a fraud who fakes all of his work by stealing from REAL mad scientists who, when they find out their insane experiments have been pilfered, strap the perpetrator to a table and let the Greys do their worst!
You need an editor for your grammar. It's not entirely wrong, but I can't not read it in a robotic voice. It's like you're trying to be very intelligent with your text, but it just seems to lack character because all of the characters are speaking in, more or less, the same way.
At certain points I skipped parts of, or entire paragraphs. I like words sure, s'why I read. You get too wordy though, and the constant placement of verb before noun got grating.
I like this story. I like the premise, and the spider-pony crossing as it's done here. I would like to be able to read it and enjoy it more.
This is probably going to read more harsh than I'm intending. . .
The cute picture drew me in, but that prose was kinda painful to read...
This is probably the most painfully redundant sentence in the entire thing. So far. >.>
Mojojojo: I do not talk like that! The way I communicate is muuuch different! I do not reiterate, repeat, reinstate the same thing ooover and over again! I am clear! Concise! To the point! I'm--*POW!*
This paragraph. Kill it with fire. @_@ *foams at the mouth*
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I was gonna make an in-dept comment about this, but it seems i wasn't the first to notice: The sentence structure is atrocious. There is no flow at all. You focus too much on trying to make grand and colorful descriptions in an attempt to captivate the reader, and it has the exact opposite effect.
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The flow is what makes a story. The words are what conveys it.
This was interesting I can honestly say I have never red a story like this before.
You need to change your editor, because master Yoda is adding too many modifications of his own to the text...
I assume you were trying to give it that certain comic book feel this way, but I think it's unnecessary.
Story does need a good bit of grammar correction regardless, but other than that I like the idea.