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I added another chapter to this story. I hope you can find time to read it. I also hope that it adds more to the story. Enjoy.

After I read the first chapter I was really tempted to down vote this story for you killing off the Human Mane 6, but then I read the second chapter and found that the first was just a horror dream for Sunset Shimmer.

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Thanks, but take another look. Was it just a dream?

Thanks again, I'm glad you liked it.

I have to say this chapter does have a couple dark innuendoes thrown back to the first one but I do believe it took away from the original, one-chapter version.

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I kind of expected that it might, but there are some reasons behind why I did add a second chapter.

I feel so bad for not reading this sooner, i just saw the story had an extra chapter while looling through my read it later section. Anyway long story short i read it and thought it was a nice chapter, if ill be honest though it felt a little unnecessary considering the first chapter was great, a nice little taste of darkness. Ill admit the second chapter sorta made the whole feeling of the first chapter less impactful, though on the other hand the whole dream thing kinda makes it slightly more realistic considering its possible for Sunny to still have those thoughts, i don't know what to think honestly, Not trying to tell you how to write just suggesting that i felt like if sunset actually remembered the dream and kept it from the other girls you coulda had more to work with in terms of keeping the originals feeling, like maybe keep the references but at the end have sunset sorta start thinking about the dream,weather it was all possible,the future,her friends and everything then just have it end with her staring at the bottle contemplating what could or can happen. You know, like a pre quel

I just love the effect the second chapter has on the whole story, I mean, to see how Sunset reacts to the whole thing, it was quite funny and it adds that sens eof, was it really a dream? Are they in some kind of adterlife? And at the end, how she is like, meh, who cares, let's enjoy life. It was nice, it was different so yeah, it was good.

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It's been a while since I read this one again myself, but I still got the same chills I did while writing it. Your opinion is valid, and I appreciate your input, but I'd like to draw your attention to something that might help you enjoy a little more of what I did in this work. The first chapter, while dancing around it, came out and told you what happened at the end, leaving you with the sense of sadness and finality of the story. The second chapter challenges that by taking something completely finished and spinning it on its head. Was it all a dream? Or is this the afterlife? Is Sunny seeing and hearing things that remind her of her last moments, or are they creepy coincident that lined up with her dream? Some say that ghosts are those who have passed on before resolving everything that ties them to earth, and I did state in the title page that this story was inspired by the anime Angel Beats, which is an anime about kids in the afterlife going to school to have the kind of life they never had.

So is all this really a tragic ending of life or a weird dream? It could go either way, and there's plenty of evidence to prove either ending. And there lies the horror. Because you just don't know.