omg. That twist actually got me holy shit. I wont spoil it but wow dude amazing climax did not see that coming.

6383344 Then I did good!

6383236 UUUGGG! I'm so sick of that song, yet I want to cry every time I hear it!

But seriously, if you play that in a loop while you read this, 8/10 it will make you cry.

6383355 i kinda wanna try that now. c if it dose.

6383404 Okay, but if you do, and it does make you cry, you have to post this story in every group you can, deal?

alright but if i dont wat do i get? actually im not that type of guy. regardless i think i will sense this story is really good. ill post either way.

6383447 If you don't cry, and are honest about it, I'll follow you, so you have another follower. Deal?

......Well, um, okay. Pretty much when I saw the "special drink" I pretty much knew what direction this was going in and honestly part of me was hoping I'd be wrong.

Granted I do understand the idea behind it. In Equestria all the main characters are grown up and live in the same town, so them separating is next to impossible since they really don't have anywhere to go at this point and teleportation and such makes it easy to stay in touch. In the human world however, it's a different story especially with high school. High school friends in general aren't famous for being sturdy or strong and friendship can and do break apart with time.

Sunset herself likely wouldn't have any kind of place in the human world after graduation and wouldn't be able to stay aftr all is said and done, thus this moment would be heartbreaking for her and there would be a possible chance this sort of thing would happen......That being said it was still a little too dark and depressing for my taste, and frankly it wasn't what i was hoping to see.

Still not terrible and I get what you were going for. Not bad, but not something I'll read on a regular basis.

6383457 Thank you for taking a look at this. I do agree that if this were placed in Pony Equestria, graduation would not be a big deal; however, I do have a lot of unspoken background that I just didn't put into the story. Sometimes, that kills the story.

But, without writing a wall of text, all the girls are going to be leaving either for College, work or, in Rainbow's case, professional sports. So Sunset really did feel like they would all die alone.

Now, there's a lot I don't know in here, like how or why she came up and convinced the others to do what they did, but that adds to the mystery and sadness of it all. You really are seeing this as an outsider, not understanding the motives behind this. All you know is they welcomed it and all agreed on this point of action.

Again, thank you for your point of view. It does help.

it was upsetting and dark taking into account wat happens but it did get a tear outa me no lie. follow me if u want i dont really care at the moment sense i cant write anything but yes if u count one tear u win, i didnt bawl like a baby if that was wat u were after.
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Not a problem, I actually wrote a story myself about a character with a somewhat similar viewpoint on friendship, though not as dark in "A Heart Encased in Stone" Check it out if you can.

Again, though I get the idea behind it, leaving behind friends hurts, a lot. I myself didn't have a lot of friends in High School so it didn't hurt nearly as much as it could have, but the idea that those fun times and experiences you have in high school being over forever, is a harsh thing to accept and frankly if I did have friends like the Mane 6, I'd be heartbroken to split up and move on, it would just be painful.

Anyway it was a decent story, even if it was a little too dark in some areas.

6383535 Thanks for the read.

How freakin' dark can you get?!

6383529 SUCCESS!!!!

6383549 ...Is that a question or a challenge?

6383555 i cant believe i actually lost a bet in 6 minutes. i am NEVER gambbling and ill see wat i can do for u

6383582 I can't believe I won! I'll follow you anyways. Thanks.

6383596 anytime tht was fun.

6383619 heh. Tell me. Was this actually dark? Like, scary dark? (I thought I did a poor job writing it)

6383566 Question obviously.

6383648 Better question. Did you read Without a Butterfly?

Celestia's balls, this was twisted!! But so very well written!!

6383652 *blink blink* It was?!

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Very much so! Just the right amount of darkness. Subtle hints throughout the intro. The way each of the characters worded their dialogue. This was brilliant! Except, you know, in a dark way.

6383742 T-thank you. I'm glad you really liked it.

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You're most welcome.

6383828 squee~

I just reread my story, and I got chills.

6383650 No, you were inspired by it weren't you?

6385535 No, but I wrote what there is of that story. That answers the question how dark I can get, thought I can't finish it...to disturbing. I'll be taking it down monday, so check it out while it's still there.

6383632 sure it was. i mean ive read even darker stories than this but yea id say its pretty dark.

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Did a good job then!

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Um... Well, I get that this story supposed to evoke some feeling but in my opinion, it's so over the top (I mean... Kill entire school just because you don't want to be separated from your friends) that my only reaction is something like "Teenagers... They stupid as hell".
Sorry, this is my opinion.

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Everyone is entitled to their own opinion. And when I read your comment I was like teenagers are stupid!

But think of all the over the top or dramatic stuff teens do because they think they know better or think their life is over.

While extreme, I could see them coming to this conclusion. My twisted logic I guess.

This caught my eye when I saw it shared the same title as one of my own stories. It actually surprised me as to the amount of content that was packed into 1.3k words. Very touching story.

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At the end of my graduation I was expecting the end credits to roll.