a strange creatre has been living in the everfree forest for a while with the citzens of ponyville and even zeccora unaware of its existence, however after the creature saves thier lives twilight and pinkie must find out what it is and more importantly what does it want.
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Is this a trollfic? Or just your ''Best'' attempt to write?
630230 sadly i am trying to make the story enjoyable i'm just not thinking very clearly what with me beng sick and all if you have suggestions on how i can improve please tell me i do want this to be good and please remeber that this is my first shot and i willstrive to do better i'm sorry that you don't like it so far
630240 Jesus, cut the waterworks man. i saw much errors. The names ALLWAYS have a big letter t.ex ''Jimmy say Tom sitting next to Jerry'' and dont make walls of text my eyes still bleed. Don't forget grammar and other shits.
630245 thanks i'll work on that also thanks for being my first comenter
630250 No problem. you may wanna get a pre-reader or a ''Proof-reader''. But not me, i suck at that stuff.
630256 thats not a bad idea do you have anyone you can suggest?
630258 No, but look in the ''Groups'' and type in '' pre-read'' or ''Proof-read'' and hope you get someting
630259 awsome ill try that thank you sooo much
630262 No problem.
Yes there is a lot of grammar and spelling errors but its still an enjoyable story
Like SomeBrony and alphex said, it needs some proofreading work, but don't give up!
630330thank you very much
630330thank you very much
630337 i'm happy for the encoruagement X3
630467 alright then (salutes)
It looks like you've rushed this out. take your time to check to see if there is any errors, which there is hundreds of them!
630751 alight i will i'm sorry about it being rushed its just i'm alittle sick at the moment so i wanted to ge it out before i thew up on my keyboard but i will improve i pinkie promise
630807 i'm sorry about the errors i'm trying to fix them i am glad you like the story though
I like this story, but like many else I think you need a proof reader. If you got one then it would be 20% cooler
630811 dude, chill you don't need to promise anything
630840 i'm acctualy in the process of getting one so don't worry i'll get this cleared up in ten seconds flat
630841i know i just really want to make people happy
630849 make your self happy first because you won't write anything good when unhappy. Making people happy comes with you enjoying writing, not you feeling forced to pump out some magnificent story...
630841i know i just really want to make people happy
630865 ya your right
630872 so take the time to fix it up and make it a great piece of writing!
Well I like the setting lone survivor in the everfree I kinda imagine settings like that. So ill keep a look out for this. Oh longer chapters listen to the other comments well so far and have fun.
633684 thank you i'm glad you like it
When someone different talks you're supposed to start a new paragraph.
For example
"Hey Tom!" Jeff called out to his friend enthusiastically.
"Oh, hey Jeff." Tom paused for a moment before proceeding. "What brings you here?"
You can also start a paragraph on a certain character or scene like this.
Jeff approached his friend and sat down next to him looking over the room. "I came to see if you wanted to go for a walk."
These are just exaMples. I hope you get the idea. You can find more info on it somewhere else on the Internet I'm sure.
Otherwise good job.
638610 oh i didn't know that thank you
great chapter love your fic
Moar!
642689 thanks so much i'm glad you like it
642714 right awat (salutes)
642714 sorry i ment to say right away
643014
Good story by the way.Looking forward to the next chapter.
PS:Good reply to my "moar!" comment
643036 thank you
643453 don't worry he may be a hunter but as you can see he's a nice guy so a fight between him and the mane 6 will not be likely and thats alol the spoilers your getting from me
GIVE ME MOAR YOU SON OF A BITCH!!!!! if you don't mind that is....
643580 of cource i don't mind i'm just happy you like my work
hurrah new chapter!
Good job, but have you read my comment on the first chapter yet?
647897 oh jeez yeah sorry
i kinda forgot
Enjoyable read. Always liked the idea of a human keeping to hisself in the forest.
On another note: Oh god! The pun, it hurts!
651250 reallly? i thought the jke was perfectly punny
thanks for liking it 
YEEEEESSSSSS UPDATE!!1!!!1
666467 glad your so excited
666843
loved the knew chapters bro but this one is a little short dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy.png
667224 i know but bear with me there wasn't alot of time for sam to be by himself so his chapter this time is pretty dray however i'm planning to do somthing in the next .5 that will give him alot more so don't worry i'm not even close to being out of steam