When Twilight tries her hoof at some Celestia fanfiction, she runs into problems and undergoes a bout of depression.
A one-shot for my fellow writers who will probably find this familiar.
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pjabrony
My name's PJ. I'm from New York. I write pony fics. I go to parties with bronies. I'm not good at self-introduction.
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This is pretty good. A bit too short for my liking (I feel some of the ideas could have been fleshed out a bit more), but good.
Why does the title say apologies to Arthur C. Clarke, though?
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I stole his title, "A Recursion in Metastories," which is technically the longest story ever written, as it contains an infinite number of words.
That was good. Really good! Had you cut the store off at the end of Twilight's letter it would have been a mediocre fic but the addition of 'Celestia's' letter really set this piece off. Great Job!
also FIRST
Greetings PJABrony
I read your story and I will offer some critique.
I enjoyed reading it. At first, I read it silently then out loud. I found reading it outloud made it flow better. The style of writing was personal and it came across as a correspondance between close friends.
Paragraph Six is a little confusing and the word "know" is used frequently. Try finding a substitute/synonym.
Paragraph Eight was clunky to read and I felt that I was missing some sort of background knowledge to understand. Spell out three you silly foal.
Paragraph Ten spell out three. "...gave me and four friends a dress each" I think this should be worded "...gave my friends and I..." This paragraph is a little sloppy. I recommend rewording.
"Sophomore Jinx" made me chuckle.
The very definition of insanity is repeating the same process over and over again and expecting differen results.
Princess Celestia's part was certainly different and provided a more complete experience.
Your writing is certainly promising and I look forward to seeing some more stories of yours in the future.
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I was already thinking this was a good story, it certainly sounds a lot like what happened to me. Except I DID leap into the deep end by having my first written project be a half million (or more, it's far far FAAAAAaaaarrrr from finished after 4 years of writers block) epic, that will probably never be published or seen beyond my family. That's okay, because I found MLP:FiM, have started writing again, and like Twilight am working my way to 100 posts of mediocraty!
Then the Celestia's letter portion started and this story went into the Great Story catagory. Excellent and kudos to you, pjabrony. Mustaches, thumbs up, and a favourite are yours.
Woa...that last paragraph was so cool that I have to quote it on tumblr.
I don´t known it just...speaks truth about the writing process.
The whole piece is great...
The title is overly-geeky, made me almost not read the story, and isn't really accurate. (Meta, yes. Recursive, no.) But the story captures a truth about writing! You, fellow writer, share my curse and my pain! If only you were as evil as you are insightful, we could be friends.
This is neat. I like it. I hope to see more from you
That's exactly the writer's pain! I find meta stories to be some of the most entertaining pieces around because they take what we go through as fans and writers of MLP:FiM and then force us to examine our actions from an outside perspective. That letter from Princess Celestia at the end got me thinking - I'm currently writing a fanfic that has received positive (if limited) reception, titled The Order of Koaxia. Unfortunately my best friend is completely biased against the genre I am writing for (it heavily includes elements of shounen), and he has repeatedly called my story "The Worst Piece of Shit I've Ever Read", despite objective criticism on my writing style stating the exact opposite. All I know is, if I succumb to my self-doubt and stop writing, Twilight and the rest of the Mane 6 will not become the saviors of Equestria, and they will not reach levels of power known only to the Gods.
Thank you good sir for inspiring me to continue writing my story and to not give up on what I have already started.
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I have made revisions. Please tell me what you think.
"The very definition of insanity is repeating the same process over and over again and expecting differen results."
I've never understood this saying. If I'm at a casino playing roulette, and I bet on red every time, I would expect different results each throw. If I go to a club and ask the prettiest girl for a dance, I expect sometimes she will say yes and sometimes she will say no. Different results are the spice of life.
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The recursion is that what Celestia is saying to Twilight, my own characters are saying to me. To be fully recursive, though, instead of "Princess Celestia and the Minotaur's Labyrinth," I should have Twilight write "Princess Celestia Becomes a Fanfic Writer."
But that's another way where madness lies.
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You just gave me my first reason to use the "Read it Later" button.
But I have to ask, if there's a Koaxial Order, is there also a Fiberoptik Order?
468338 You know what? That might actually be on idea... xD Kidding, kidding! God, the Order of Fiberoptiks just sounds plain weird, even if that joke was pretty good
Wow. This is really good! I think I may go look up an Arthur C. Clarke story now....
This was delightful. It was just wonderful. I'm somehow revived feeling.
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I read it in "The Collected Works of Arthur C. Clarke" which is a huge book full of so many short stories. Try your local library. If you do find it there, check out the follow up (can't call it a sequel) "Herbert George Robert Morley Wells, Esquire"
A rather interesting story, to say the least. I like it.
Also... "It makes me wonder if the ponies who wrote those books had books to tell them how to write that kind of books." ...made me almost go cross-eyed.
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Well, as soon as you introduce at least one meaningful random variable -- the roulette wheel, the personality and mood of the person you're talking to -- it's by definition not really the same process anymore each time you run through it, now is it? So the saying wouldn't apply to those examples.
Madness is more along the lines of earnestly expecting the exact same book (hardcopy, not e-book, thank you
) that you were reading 20,000 Leagues Beneath The Sea from today to instead contain the text of Twilight tomorrow for no particular reason.
...In any case (back on topic), I think I'll definitely keep this one around on my hard drive. It's strangely motivational.
I salute you sir. A fine story and a fine message at that!
A very touching message to all of the aspiring authors out there. Myself included. Thank you.
Ogawd. I like how the ending makes you wonder what actually happened. great story man!
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That sounds surprisingly like a thing Celestia might actually do. She loves to teach by experience rather than just tell Twilight what she needs to know, and this letter is a pretty great experience to have. Hell, I want to go forth and write stuff now, and it wasn't even addressed to me.
This made me pick my proverbial pen back up; I had been feeling much of Twilight's feelings about writing my fics (I have two–one that's as-of-yet unpublished, but set in an alternate GfM-verse), but Celly really helped me want to write again.
So thank you, Celestia, for being trapped in that labyrinth–you're an inspiration to all writers out there. I sincerely hope you get out safe and sound–then again, you're in Twilight Sparkle's capable hooves, so I know you'll be a-okay. 
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well I would say this is a heatrwarming story, but you most likely got how many messages saying that, though I love shoving food in a mouth that's already fill so yeah. Have a frigging pot full of compliments.